Solved precis 2010

[Spotless Mind]

Envy, the worst trait of human nature

Envy is the worst trait of human nature. An envious person wishes bad luck to others and cannot avoid unhappiness. Such people ruin their happiness by desiring more. An envious person tries to stop others from the benefit of what they have. But he himself desires the same benefits. Why doctors have more facilities than the laborers? The same phenomenon happens in other fields. Admiration is the cure of envy, admiration with the good look for others overcomes envy. Envy can also be overcome through happiness but unfortunately envy is hindrance to happiness. To the envious person happiness is meaningless. Envy can be cured if it causes are found.
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[rishzzz]

Originally Posted by Spotless Mind

Envy, the worst trait of human nature

kindly review it again, it is a lot more intensifying

Envy is the worst trait of human nature. An envious person wishes bad luck to others and cannot avoid unhappiness. Such people ruin their happiness by desiring more(Make a single sentence by joining these both). An envious person tries to stop others from the benefit of what they have(Use abstract words rather tries to stop). But he himself desires the same benefits. Why doctors have more facilities than the laborers? The same phenomenon happens in other fields.(Btter if you dont really put examples in it) Admiration is the cure of envy, admiration with the good look for others overcomes envy. Envy can also be overcome through happiness but unfortunately envy is hindrance to happiness. To the envious person happiness is meaningless. Envy can be cured if it causes are found.
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I have attempted it in 2010 so i do remember it what is in original passage, you surpassed the later part of passage in which examples of saints have been given, you must quote their lighter reference in such a way that you dont luk incorporating example of saints in concerned passage.
You did well, avoid using the language in the original text. Try your own.

[Spotless Mind]

It was just a mere attempt becoz i m not that much good in precis ...i m obliged that u highlighted the mistakes and weak areas...certainly i ll try to overcome on my weakness...could you plz post your precis if you have...thanks

[Ibraheemamjadrafi]

please review my precis. suggestions for improvement are highly welcomed.

Title -- Dealing with Envy : A Catastrophic Emotion
Envy is the most undesirable feeling, making a person unhappy and ungrateful. it urges a person to make life miserable for others by depriving them of any benefits that they have. if left unchecked, envy becomes an impediment to progress making a person unjustifiably criticize a skilled person's advantages over an unskilled. contrarily, admiration brings happiness. a cure to envy may be selflessness, but, for ordinary man, it seems impracticable. Though the conundrum is that envy repels happiness, with an envious person arguing the same, happiness is the only remedy. Besides, real life is a mystery and figuring out only the causes of envious feeling can work wonders.