Precis 2016
Suggested Title: A Tour to Cherokee
The author had difficulty in deciding an abroad and breathtaking place for his yesteryear's May vacation till his friend suggested him Cherokee, Oklahoma. In Cherokee, they landed in a paradise-like town, Qualla Boundary, in a valley. There Cherokee presented them its history with exhibition of 'Oconaluftee Indian Village' and a week-long historical show 'Unto These Hills'. They visited souvenir shops with the help of a native despite language barrier. Then they met George, a middle aged fluent English speaking tourist, erstwhile a woodcutter, who invited them for a lunch. He told them that besides trade, Cherokee earns through 'Bingo Weekend' during tour off-peak days. Huge crowds of people gather at Bingo entertainment hall for various games on every Friday afternoon of the Bingo Weekends. Finally, they visited the art museum of Qualla Boundary. The author missed Cherokee back at home and anticipated to visit another foreign place. |
In preci can we mention yhe name of places
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Of course, if such names are related to topic information.
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@Abdul Fatah Solangi
By the way, I am not able to understand the purpose of putting this precis in here. Do you want to offer this precis for critical review? If that is the purpose, then do paste the original passage. Or if you want this precis to be a guide for novices, then still you need to have the original passage pasted before the precis. |
Well! Sir, I appreciate your advice. I thought original passage is not required here. It's one of the recent past papers, and I believe everyone preparing for precis must have these papers already.
Nevertheless, I shall paste the original passage in future. Moreover, I would appreciate your feedback on my writeups, please evaluate them. |
Sure I will.
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Sir, kindly give your feedback on this precis.
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[QUOTE=Abdul Fatah Solangi;1125830]Suggested Title: A Tour to Cherokee
The author had difficulty in deciding an abroad and breathtaking place for his yesteryear's May vacation till his friend suggested him Cherokee, Oklahoma. In Cherokee, they landed in a paradise-like town, Qualla Boundary, in a valley. There Cherokee presented them its history with exhibition of 'Oconaluftee Indian Village' and a week-long historical show 'Unto These Hills'. They visited souvenir shops with the help of a native despite language barrier. Then they met George, a middle aged fluent English speaking tourist, erstwhile a woodcutter, who invited them for a lunch. He told them that besides trade, Cherokee earns through 'Bingo Weekend' during tour off-peak days. Huge crowds of people gather at Bingo entertainment hall for various games on every Friday afternoon of the Bingo Weekends. Finally, they visited the art museum of Qualla Boundary. The author missed Cherokee back at home and anticipated to visit another foreign place.[/QUOTE] After reading original passage,I can say that this one is related to the emotions and feelings of author. Focus on these things instead of mentioning all those places. You have described events and places in your précis, requirement was to write down how author felt after going to these places. In short you are missing the main point as said above. When I wrote this précis first time, I did the same mistake,then realized I am looking at wrong direction. Précis can't have this much places and events, main point is to analyze feelings and emotions of an author. |
I have a question regarding precis,as it is recommended that use substitutes for more words, it can limit words range .... But are those substitutes are not the difficult words, and we are advised to use simple words..... Kindly explain this point...
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I partly agree with you. This might be the case that I would have expressed the emotions and experiences of the author. However, there is no harm to mention the places and to give spatial references, as far as they are pertinent to the actual theme.
I hope you would agree on this note. Thanks for your sincere feedback. Appreciated. |
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