Thank you very much Dr. sb .I am agree with you on all counts.Next time I will use white sheets.Yep I missed s in goods.Dr.sb tomorrow its your turn , if you please. I think we should give a little rest to Adil and AFRMS .

thanks and regards

Thanks but the title of the posts says All CSPs so your comments are equally important.

Infact you are right!

Agreed,the problem with scan is that you cannot qoute the sentences,so at time you miss stuff like this.

A very good suggestion,i think Dr atif is now going to use plain sheets

@ Dr. Atif:

Sentence No. 1:
... made up of (as pointed out by Dr. Hassan)

Sentence No. 3:
Springs must emerge from 'depths' not 'depth'.

Sentence No. 4:
"cool, green, shady place" can also be a "pleasant place"... which is called oasis. I find this incorrect. It should rather be 'thus forming an oasis'.

Sentence No. 5:
'abode' is not a verb applicable here. makeshift/foldables - don't do this. Use one appropriate word. Remember: You are precising. The original text says in search of 'grass and water', but you mentioned only grass. Use a word like 'food' instead.

Sentence No. 7:
you have used 'and' twice in the sentence. replace the first one with a comma.

'and care them'... you it should be 'care for'
'feel proud riding them'... I am not sure but I think a preposition may be missing after proud... so make a safe sentence like 'proudly ride them' or 'feel pride in riding them'.
avoid contractions like "Don't" in formal English. Use do not.

Sentence No. 8:
'goods' as already pointed out by Dr. Hassan.

This time your title is better. You overwrote again, or perhaps there's a

problem with your pen. Buy a good-quality ink pen now so that it becomes

smooth till you finally sit in the exams. This was however a better attempt.

For improving your handwriting, you should write slowly with the aim of a better handwriting. Pick up speed when your handwriting starts getting beautiful. You should give some time to handwriting practice. It's also important.

All the best.

Regards,

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"The race is not over because I haven't won yet."

Adil Memon
Police Service of Pakistan (P.S.P)
37th Common Training Program

@ AFRMS, Mumtaz Hayat Maneka and all moderators

Dr. Atifrana is doing a great job regarding precis writing. I would humbly request the Jury members(Essay Competition) to kindly initiate precis writing competition. This would provide all the aspirants a great opportunity to practice and participate in precis writing and improve their skills.

Thanks and regards.

@dr.atifrana

I am waiting for further precis sir. Please upload new precis.

regards,
floydian

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Police Service of Pakistan (PSP)
39th Common Training Program