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sundas Friday, August 28, 2009 03:59 PM

Check it out and point out my errors
 
1: It is quite clear to everybody that large number of taxis lorries,vans,buses,and private cars use Queen's road everyday and one often sees motorcycles and bicycles trying to sqeeze through dense traffic.

PRCISE.

on queen's road two wheeler passes through dense traffic of vehicles.
what vl be the theme of this topic according to you guys?

2: LACK OF CARE PARTICULARLY on the part of drivers of vehicles is probably the major cause of traffic accidents, although pedestrians are sometimes to blame.This carelessness can take many forms.A driver may be chatting with a companion . He may be watching somebody in another vehicle.He may be thinking about some trouble at work or at home. he may be smooking and trying to find ashtray. whatever the reason may be there is no excuse for many of the accidents which occur.

PECISE:

Mostly drivers are to blame for accidents as compare to pedestrian because of their lack of attention, which can lead to disastreous accidents.whatever the reason may be there is no excuse for the accidents.
THEME: CAUSES OF ACCIDENTS.

4: Nature has provided each livingthing with its own means of defence. sometimes this is obvious to anybody. cats can climb trees to escape from dogs A lizard can freeze in the grass when chased by a inquisitive dogs. It can shed patrs of its tail if necessary thereby distracting an enemy. birds can fly away. frogs can jump in to water and hide in the mud at the bottom of a pool.each creature has its own way of staying alive.


what vl be the precise of this paragraph?

A.U.Hassan Saturday, August 29, 2009 01:23 AM

[QUOTE=sundas]1: It is quite clear to everybody that large number of taxis lorries,vans,buses,and private cars use Queen's road everyday and one often sees motorcycles and bicycles trying to sqeeze through dense traffic.

PRCISE.

on queen's road two wheeler passes through dense traffic of vehicles.
what vl be the theme of this topic according to you guys?

2: LACK OF CARE PARTICULARLY on the part of drivers of vehicles is probably the major cause of traffic accidents, although pedestrians are sometimes to blame.This carelessness can take many forms.A driver may be chatting with a companion . He may be watching somebody in another vehicle.He may be thinking about some trouble at work or at home. he may be smooking and trying to find ashtray. whatever the reason may be there is no excuse for many of the accidents which occur.

PECISE:

Mostly drivers are to blame for accidents as compare to pedestrian because of their lack of attention, which can lead to disastreous accidents.whatever the reason may be there is no excuse for the accidents.
THEME: CAUSES OF ACCIDENTS.

4: Nature has provided each livingthing with its own means of defence. sometimes this is obvious to anybody. cats can climb trees to escape from dogs A lizard can freeze in the grass when chased by a inquisitive dogs. It can shed patrs of its tail if necessary thereby distracting an enemy. birds can fly away. frogs can jump in to water and hide in the mud at the bottom of a pool.each creature has its own way of staying alive.


what vl be the precise of this paragraph?[/QUOTE]

Tittle: Natural art of defence.

For staying alive, each creature has been given a way to avoid of being hunted, like cats by climbing, lizards by freezing, birds by flying; frogs by jumping water depthly to protect themselves from dogs & others; it's all about 'natural art of defence.'

Nonchalant Saturday, August 29, 2009 08:26 AM

one correction
 
@Sundas

Your solution was satisfactory, i mean i cudn't see many grammatical mistakes, and the answers were to the point and brief, as is required in papers.

but there's only one thing, the spelling is PRECIS, not precise, there's no "E" at the end, and the pronunciation is not like that of the word "Precise", it is pronounced as, "pre-cee" (the last "S" is silent)

:)

keep doing the effort sis!!!
regards

sundas Sunday, August 30, 2009 10:17 PM

:0 ooops maine spelling he galat likh diye.thank u so much

[QUOTE=A.U.Hassan]Tittle: Natural art of defence.

For staying alive, each creature has been given a way to avoid of being hunted, like cats by climbing, lizards by freezing, birds by flying; frogs by jumping water depthly to protect themselves from dogs & others; it's all about 'natural art of defence.'[/QUOTE]
i am little bit confuse in this line "frogs by jumping water depthly" or it vl be " frogs by jumping deep in water" or both sentences are right?

Ahmed_2007_Cool Monday, August 31, 2009 08:12 AM

[QUOTE=sundas]

Mostly drivers are to blame for accidents as compare to pedestrian because of their lack of attention, which can lead to disastreous accidents.whatever the reason may be there is no excuse for the accidents.
THEME: CAUSES OF ACCIDENTS.

[/QUOTE]
[B]

Mostly, drivers, due to their inattentiveness, are to blame for accidents in contrast to pedestrians. Such carelessness leads to disastrous accidents. However, whatever reason there may be, accidents simply cannot be excused.[/B]

There, I fixed your precis for you. Here are some mistakes you made:


1) Pedestrian should have been plural. Also, "mostly" should have been followed by a comma.

2) When you mentioned two subjects in your first sentence (drivers and pedestrians) and you cite "their lack of attention," it seems confusing as to who exactly you're referring to.

3) "disastreous" spelling check.

4) You didn't capitalize the first letters of the first words of each sentence.

5) I'd like to mention nother little pointer that would help you out - instead of writing "lack of attention," just shorten the word and go with "their inattentiveness" or "carelessness," etc.

[QUOTE=sundas]:0 ooops maine spelling he galat likh diye.thank u so much


i am little bit confuse in this line "frogs by jumping water depthly" or it vl be " frogs by jumping deep in water" or both sentences are right?[/QUOTE]

The latter.


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