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COMPETITIVE EXAMINATION FOR RECRUITMENT TO POSTS
IN BPS – 17 UNDER THE FEDERAL GOVERNMENT, 1996.

ENGLISH (Précis)

1. Make a Précis of the following passage about one third of its length and suggest a suitable title. (25)[/I]

Along with the new revelations of science and psychology there have also occurred distortions of what is being discovered. -Most of the scientists and psychologists have accepted Darwin’s theory of evolution and his observations on “survival of the fittest” as a final word. While enunciating his-postulate on the concept of the fittest, Darwin primarily projected physical force as the main criterion, and remained unmindful of the culture of mind, The psychologist, on the other hand, in his exclusive involvement with the psyche, has overlooked the potential of man’s physical-self and the world outside him. No synthesis has been attempted between the two with the obvious result of the one being sacrificed at the altar of the other. This has given birth to a civilisation which is wholly based on economic considerations, transforming man into a mere “economic being” and limiting, his pleasures and sorrows to sensuous cravings. With the force of his craft and guns, this man of the modern world gave birth to two cannibalistic philosophies, the cunning capitalism and the callous communism. They joined hands to block the evolution of man as a cultural entity, denuding him of the feelings of love, sympathy, and humanness. Technologically, man is immensely powerful; culturally, he is the creature ‘of stoneage, as lustful as ever, and equally ignorant of his destiny. The two world wars and the resultant attitudes display harrowing distortion of the purposes of life and power. In this agonizing situation the Scientist is harnessing forces of nature, placing them at the feet of his country’s leaders, to be used against people in other parts of the world. This state of his servility makes the functions of the scientist appear merely to push humanity to a state of perpetual fear, and lead man to the inevitable destruction as a species with his own inventions and achievements. This irrational situation raises many questions. They concern the role of a scientist, the function of religion, the conduct of politician who is directing the course 5f history, and the future role of man as a species. There is an obvious mutilation of the purpose of creation, and the relationship .between Cosmos, Life, and Man is hidden from eyes; they have not been viewed collectively.

Precis

It is a matter of vital importance that modern sciences have not realized any significance of culture despite huge developments in science. The psychologist have ignored the potential of man and developed a materialistic world where emotionless deliberation has transformed man into an monetary instrument. The systems of communism and capitalism were also the yields of the same think-tank that it discouraged the growth of cultural, social and emotional feelings. successive wars and insensitive technology have threatened the objective of life in this planet. The adverse environment, full of terror, has made the role of scientist controversial subject to predictable dangerous life, in the light of destructive inventions. How the life emerged? The question needs amplification due to indistinct contribution of scientists, politicians and religion. Its erroneous to say man a ‘specie’.

Topic
Life with Modern Science

nice attempt,
your takeoff is excellent, but I am afraid you couldn't catch the writers' main points. writer didn't say middle class was not welcoming upper class, if you re-read the para you will find, Middle class was not even considered as part of society. he then gave different exampls. then transition and then changes since then and the establishment of their own society.

Note, this is my own judgement, I am by no means an expert. you may disagree with me.

here is my attempt.

Describing the conditions of bourgeois in 9th century, Besant says, it was not even considered as part of the society. Tradesmen and professionals other than army, were not worthy. Social status was determined on birth and family connections. they were not allowed to settled in counties and were deprived of facilities in towns. Realizing their abject position they established their own society based on strong values and earned their lost respect. They protected the rights of lower starta and became their idols. Though opinions differ about respectablity but they established values which have univeral acceptance. Since then they increased their influence.

Title; Transition of Bourgeios since 9th Century
words: 102

seniors please comment on it.

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@subah hunzai
Have an eye at my precis as well

Regards

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“The greatest discovery of all time is that a person can change his future by merely changing his attitude.”

Besant describing the middle class of the 9th century wrote " In the first place it was for more a class apart. "In no sense did it belong to society. Men in professions of any kind (except in the Army and Navy) could only belong to society by right of birth and family connections; men in trade—bankers were still accounted tradesmen—could not possibly belong to society. That is to say, if they went to live in the country they were not called upon by the county families and in the town they were not admitted by the men into their clubs, or by ladies into their houses… The middle class knew its own place, respected itself, made its own society for itself, and cheerfully accorded to rank the deference due."

Since then, however, the life of the middle classes had undergone great changes as their numbers had swelled and their influence had increased.

Their already well –developed consciousness of their own importance had deepened. More critical than they had been in the past of certain aspects of aristocratic life, they wee also more concerned with the plight of the poor and the importance of their own values of society, thrift, hand work, piety and respectability thrift, hand work, piety and respectability as examples of ideal behavior for the guidance of the lower orders. Above all they were respectable. There were divergences of opinion as to what exactly was respectable and what was not. There were, nevertheless, certain conventions, which were universally recognized: wild and drunker behaviors were certainly not respectable, nor were godlessness or avert promiscuity, not an ill-ordered home life, unconventional manners, self-indulgence or flamboyant clothes and personal adornments.


precis

Describing the conditions of bourgeois in 9th century, Besant says, it was not even considered as part of the society. Tradesmen and professionals other than army, were not worthy. Social status was determined on birth and family connections. they were not allowed to settled in counties and were deprived of facilities in towns. Realizing their abject position they established their own society based on strong values and earned their lost respect. They protected the rights of lower starta and became their idols. Though opinions differ about respectablity but they established values which have univeral acceptance. Since then they increased their influence.

Title; Transition of Bourgeios since 9th Century
words: 102

seniors please comment on it.

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Self-confidence is the first requisite to great undertakings.

Describing the conditions of bourgeois in 9th century, Besant says, it was not even considered as part of the society. Tradesmen and professionals other than army, were not worthy. Social status was determined on birth and family connections. they were not allowed to settled in counties and were deprived of facilities in towns. Realizing their abject position they established their own society based on strong values and earned their lost respect. They protected the rights of lower starta and became their idols. Though opinions differ about respectablity but they established values which have univeral acceptance. Since then they increased their influence.

Your sentences start with less apeal...y u start most the sentences DESCRIBING....n REALIZING.....Since
Well this is a wrong move

Always use first form after TO

i think ur problem is that you dont give required time of precis which makes such fallacies....give atleast 30 minutes and make 2,3 rough drafts before arriving at a gud precis....2ndly i wud recommend u to write precis of same para again and then post it.


It is easy to find out mistakes while v read and difficult to catch them while v r writing, so dont mind....

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“The greatest discovery of all time is that a person can change his future by merely changing his attitude.”

ENGLISH (Précis)

1. Make a Précis of the following passage about one third of its length and suggest a suitable title. (25)[/I]

Along with the new revelations of science and psychology there have also occurred distortions of what is being discovered. -Most of the scientists and psychologists have accepted Darwin’s theory of evolution and his observations on “survival of the fittest” as a final word. While enunciating his-postulate on the concept of the fittest, Darwin primarily projected physical force as the main criterion, and remained unmindful of the culture of mind, The psychologist, on the other hand, in his exclusive involvement with the psyche, has overlooked the potential of man’s physical-self and the world outside him. No synthesis has been attempted between the two with the obvious result of the one being sacrificed at the altar of the other. This has given birth to a civilisation which is wholly based on economic considerations, transforming man into a mere “economic being” and limiting, his pleasures and sorrows to sensuous cravings. With the force of his craft and guns, this man of the modern world gave birth to two cannibalistic philosophies, the cunning capitalism and the callous communism. They joined hands to block the evolution of man as a cultural entity, denuding him of the feelings of love, sympathy, and humanness. Technologically, man is immensely powerful; culturally, he is the creature ‘of stoneage, as lustful as ever, and equally ignorant of his destiny. The two world wars and the resultant attitudes display harrowing distortion of the purposes of life and power. In this agonizing situation the Scientist is harnessing forces of nature, placing them at the feet of his country’s leaders, to be used against people in other parts of the world. This state of his servility makes the functions of the scientist appear merely to push humanity to a state of perpetual fear, and lead man to the inevitable destruction as a species with his own inventions and achievements. This irrational situation raises many questions. They concern the role of a scientist, the function of religion, the conduct of politician who is directing the course 5f history, and the future role of man as a species. There is an obvious mutilation of the purpose of creation, and the relationship .between Cosmos, Life, and Man is hidden from eyes; they have not been viewed collectively.




Precis


It is a matter of vital importance that modern sciences have not realized any significance of culture despite huge developments in science. The psychologist have ignored the potential of man and developed a materialistic world where emotionless deliberation has transformed man into an monetary instrument. The systems of communism and capitalism were also the yields of the same think-tank that it discouraged the growth of cultural, social and emotional feelings. successive wars and insensitive technology have threatened the objective of life in this planet. The adverse environment, full of terror, has made the role of scientist controversial subject to predictable dangerous life, in the light of destructive inventions. How the life emerged? The question needs amplification due to indistinct contribution of scientists, politicians and religion. Its erroneous to say man a ‘specie’.

Topic
Life with Modern Science





please go through and find out mistakes and comment over it.

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“The greatest discovery of all time is that a person can change his future by merely changing his attitude.”

I would comment on the passage directly as how it develops its argument.

1. Most of scientists accepted Darwin's theory which considers physical force as the main criterion.
2. Psychologists focused on man's psyche and remained ignorant of man's physical self.
3. No synthesis has been made between two views.
3. Resulting in man's image to be just an economic being, based on concepts of communism and capitalism.
4. Man is now technologically powerful but not as much cultured.
5. This irrational situation resulted in several questions about man role as seen from political and religious views. It is because man is not analyzed as whole.

Precis should be developed on the above lines. Because passage is argumentative so should be the precis.

Regards

So, other than argumentative precis.....give me some more mistakes i made in it
so that i cud take corrective actions
Thanx

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“The greatest discovery of all time is that a person can change his future by merely changing his attitude.”

Your precis:

"It is a matter of vital importance that modern sciences have not realized any significance of culture despite huge developments in science. The psychologist have ignored the potential of man and developed a materialistic world where emotionless deliberation has transformed man into an monetary instrument. The systems of communism and capitalism were also the yields of the same think-tank that it discouraged the growth of cultural, social and emotional feelings. successive wars and insensitive technology have threatened the objective of life in this planet. The adverse environment, full of terror, has made the role of scientist controversial subject to predictable dangerous life, in the light of destructive inventions. How the life emerged? The question needs amplification due to indistinct contribution of scientists, politicians and religion. Its erroneous to say man a ‘specie’."

Some Suggestions (May sound harsh but I am writing it in good faith so be patient) :

1. You say "It is a matter of vital importance ....". You are making it matter of vital importance passage doesnt say that. So stick to what is said in precis.
2. You say "The psychologist have ignored the potential of man and developed a materialistic world where emotionless deliberation has transformed man into an monetary instrument." Psychologist focused on psyche and ignored the physical aspect, they didnt made man into a monetary instrument. Try to understand what passage says. Passage means that due to non synthesis of Darwin's theory and psychologist thinking the result is emergence of man as an economic being.
3. You say "The systems of communism and capitalism were also the yields of the same think-tank.....". Which think-tank you are referring to. You didnt describe it earlier.
4. You say "Its erroneous to say man a ‘specie’." Well this is not mentioned in original passage.

Again I am saying that I am giving my honest opinion, if you find it not useful then ignore it.

Regards

@God Fearer

Brother I think our minds match a lot. I would have done the same precis as you did with one difference.

You said "They did not welcome people belonging to upper class into their domain." In my thinking opposite is true.

Baki its all fine.

Regards