Please check my Precis
 

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English (precis & Composition)

TIME ALLOWED: 3 HOURS MAXIMUM MARKS: 100
MAKE A PRÉCIS OF THE FOLLOWING PASSAGE IN ABOUT ONE THIRD OF ITS LENGTH. Suggest a suitable title also. (20)


Besant describing the middle class of the 9th century wrote " In the first place it was for more a class apart. "In no sense did it belong to society. Men in professions of any kind (except in the Army and Navy) could only belong to society by right of birth and family connections; men in trade—bankers were still accounted tradesmen—could not possibly belong to society. That is to say, if they went to live in the country they were not called upon by the county families and in the town they were not admitted by the men into their clubs, or by ladies into their houses… The middle class knew its own place, respected itself, made its own society for itself, and cheerfully accorded to rank the deference due."

Since then, however, the life of the middle classes had undergone great changes as their numbers had swelled and their influence had increased.

Their already well –developed consciousness of their own importance had deepened. More critical than they had been in the past of certain aspects of aristocratic life, they wee also more concerned with the plight of the poor and the importance of their own values of society, thrift, hand work, piety and respectability thrift, hand work, piety and respectability as examples of ideal behavior for the guidance of the lower orders. Above all they were respectable. There were divergences of opinion as to what exactly was respectable and what was not. There were, nevertheless, certain conventions, which were universally recognized: wild and drunker behaviors were certainly not respectable, nor were godlessness or avert promiscuity, not an ill-ordered home life, unconventional manners, self-indulgence or flamboyant clothes and personal adornments.

Solved Precis:-

History of emergence of middle class
According to Besant the middle class of 9th century included professional men not the traders. Realizing that they were not accepted by both country and town, they shaped their own society of respect and deference as their number and influence increased. While balancing themselves, they were critical of aristocracy but were concerned for the siffering of the poor. To create difference between right and wrong a universal convention took shape in which a person having negative attributes of wildness, drunkardness, godlessness, avert promiscuity, ill-orderedness of homely life, self-indulgence, flamboyance of clothes and adornments was counted unrespectable.

Dear Faraz Ali
Your effort is good. Choice of words and their depiction is also good. But your sentences are too long. You make just four sentences in the whole paragraph. Try to breakdown the sentences and make smaller sentences. Best of Luck!

[QUOTE=Faraz Ali;211391]2000

English (precis & Composition)

TIME ALLOWED: 3 HOURS MAXIMUM MARKS: 100
MAKE A PRÉCIS OF THE FOLLOWING PASSAGE IN ABOUT ONE THIRD OF ITS LENGTH. Suggest a suitable title also. (20)


Besant describing the middle class of the 9th century wrote " In the first place it was for more a class apart. "In no sense did it belong to society. Men in professions of any kind (except in the Army and Navy) could only belong to society by right of birth and family connections; men in trade—bankers were still accounted tradesmen—could not possibly belong to society. That is to say, if they went to live in the country they were not called upon by the county families and in the town they were not admitted by the men into their clubs, or by ladies into their houses… The middle class knew its own place, respected itself, made its own society for itself, and cheerfully accorded to rank the deference due."

Since then, however, the life of the middle classes had undergone great changes as their numbers had swelled and their influence had increased.

Their already well –developed consciousness of their own importance had deepened. More critical than they had been in the past of certain aspects of aristocratic life, they wee also more concerned with the plight of the poor and the importance of their own values of society, thrift, hand work, piety and respectability thrift, hand work, piety and respectability as examples of ideal behavior for the guidance of the lower orders. Above all they were respectable. There were divergences of opinion as to what exactly was respectable and what was not. There were, nevertheless, certain conventions, which were universally recognized: wild and drunker behaviors were certainly not respectable, nor were godlessness or avert promiscuity, not an ill-ordered home life, unconventional manners, self-indulgence or flamboyant clothes and personal adornments.

Solved Precis:-

History of emergence of middle class
According to Besant the middle class of 9th century included professional men not the traders. Realizing that they were not accepted by both country and town, they shaped their own society of respect and deference as their number and influence increased. While balancing themselves, they were critical of aristocracy but were concerned for the siffering of the poor. To create difference between right and wrong a universal convention took shape in which a person having negative attributes of wildness, drunkardness, godlessness, avert promiscuity, ill-orderedness of homely life, self-indulgence, flamboyance of clothes and adornments was counted unrespectable.[/QUOTE]
Faraz u did a good effort
well done
expression, grammer, tenses and structure every thing is upto the mark but you went in length for sentences. Though your sentences are good but they must be a little short to make it look like a complete summary of above not just few bunch of sentences
hope you got me
keep it up

Regards

Thanks dear Sir!
Hope you will guide me in the same manner in the future. I'll Inshallah continue to develop the side which has been criticized by you. I do comply with you that my sentences ever remain longer than needed. TC. Thanks again!

Please critically asses the precis of 2001 paper
 

FEDERAL PUBLIC SERVICE COMMISSION COMPETITIVE EXAMINATION FOR RECRUITMENT TO POSTS IN B.P.S. – 17 UNDER THE FEDERAL GOVERNMENT, 2001.

(PRECISE AND COMPOSITION)

1.Make a precise of the following passage in about one third of its length and suggest a suitable heading. (20)

It was not from want of perceiving the beauty of external nature but from the different way of perceiving it, that the early Greeks did not turn their genius to portray, either in colour or in poetry, the outlines, the hues, and contrasts of all fair valley, and hold cliffs, and golden moons, and rosy lawns which their beautiful country affords in lavish abundance.

Primitive people never so far as I know, enjoy when is called the picturesque in nature, wild forests, beetling cliffs, reaches of Alpine snow are with them great hindrances to human intercourse, and difficulties in the way of agriculture. They are furthermore the homes of the enemies of mankind, of the eagle, the wolf, or the tiger, and are most dangerous in times of earthquake or tempest. Hence the grand and striking features of nature are at first looked upon with fear and dislike.

I do not suppose that Greeks different in the respect from other people, except that the frequent occurrence of mountains and forests made agriculture peculiarly difficult and intercourse scanty, thus increasing their dislike for the apparently reckless waste in nature. We have even in Homer a similar feeling as regards the sea, --- the sea that proved the source of all their wealth and the condition of most of their greatness. Before they had learned all this, they called it “the unvintagable sea” and looked upon its shore as merely so much waste land. We can, therefore, easily understand, how in the first beginning of Greek art, the representation of wild landscape would find no place, whereas, fruitful fields did not suggest themselves as more than the ordinary background. Art in those days was struggling with material nature to which it felt a certain antagonism.

There was nothing in the social circumstances of the Greeks to produce any revolution in this attitude during their greatest days. The Greek republics were small towns where the pressure of the city life was not felt. But as soon as the days of the Greeks republics were over, the men began to congregate for imperial purposes into Antioch, or Alexandria, or lastly into Rome, than we seek the effect of noise and dust and smoke and turmoil breaking out into the natural longing for rural rest and retirement so that from Alexander’s day …… We find all kinds of authors --- epic poets, lyricist, novelists and preachers --- agreeing in the precise of nature, its rich colours, and its varied sounds. Mohaffy: Rambles in Greece

Solved Precis:-
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Evolution of Greek Art

Because of defferent ways of perceiving the nature, the early Greeks did not turn their genius to portraying, in colour or in poetry, different phenomena. Primitive people, like Greeks, never enjoyed picturesque in nature as that remained haindrance to human intercourse or agriculture or remained enemy on mankind. Early Greek art was in confrontation with material nature in which wild landscape had no space but fruitful fields were found in ordinary background. As soon as Greek republics, vanishing small towns, began to congregate for imperial purposes in Antoich, Alexandria or Rome, they were seen then agreeing in the precise of nature, its rich colours and varied sounds.