Its a humble request to check my precis please and raise my mistakes. thnx alot in advance.

(below is the original passage from 1992 precis and composition paper.)

Throughout the ages of human development men have been subject to miseries of two kinds: those imposed by external nature, and, those that human beings misguidedly inflicted upon each other. At first, by far the worst evils were those that were due to the environment. Man was a rare species, whose survival was precarious. Without the agility of the monkey, without any coating of fur, he has difficulty in escaping from wild beasts, and in most parts of the world could not endure the

winter’s cold. He had only two biological advantages: the upright posture freed his hands, and intelligence enabled him to transmit experience.Gradually these two advantages gave him supremacy. The numbers of the human species increased beyond those of any other large mammals. But nature could still assert her power by means of flood and famine an pestilence and by exacting from the great majority of mankind incessant toil in the securing of daily bread.In our own day our bondage to external nature is fast diminishing, as a result of the growth of scientific intelligence. Famines and pestilence still occur, but we know-better, year by year, what should be done to prevent them. Hard work is still necessary, but only because we are unwise:given peace and co-operation, we could subsist on a very moderate amount of toil. With existing technique, we can, whenever we choose to exercise wisdom, be free of many ancient- forms -of bondage to external nature.But the evils that men inflict upon each other have not diminished in the same degree.There are still wars, oppressions, and hideous cruelties, and greedy men still snatch wealth from those who are less skilful or less ruthless than themselves. Love of power still leads to vast tyrannies, or to mere obstruction when its grosser forms are impossible. And fear-deep -scarcely conscious fear — is still the dominant motive in very many lives.

Precis and heading of the above passage:

"Human Development And Its Miseries"

Different phases of human development faced hurdels due to natural disasters and their own mistakes.human is free in nature and having an intellectual ability which made them superior. the human family increased in great deal but natural disaster's made human to work hard for their daily needs.
natural disasters still occurs but due to the progress in scientific knowledge, day by day, man learned to deal with these disasters.as compare to the past, currently with scientific knowledge human greatly reduced the natural damages.
our own inflicted hurdles in development still exists in the shape of wars, power hunger/game/war and wealth snatching. due to power hunger/game much of human suffered and are still suffering.

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Well I have attempted to make précis of the above passage. There are some mistakes that i have seen in your précis(using too many words that are in original, too much generality and the lack of coherence...otherwise it is a good attempt). However it is not necessary that you will agree with my attempt too.


Title: Two root causes of Men’s Miseries
Since the earliest times, man has suffered at the hands of nature and his fellow beings. He managed to attain dominance over wild creatures due to free hands to toil and his intelligence to broadcast experience. He combated hard with natural calamities for securing his survival.
Furthermore, in modern times, with the hard work and scientific methods we can better overcome the furies of nature. But it is misfortune that man’s exploitation by man still continues. Lust of power and wealth has given ways to war, oppressions and ruthless atrocities. Unless man gives up exploiting his fellowman, a congenial society can not be established.

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I don't want to be the looser...

well m impressed from your precis writing skill.....i am new in this game so just trying my best to improve my precis writing. wat would u suggest as per ur experience? nd yeah.. thnx for raising my mistakes.

you are welcome.
I think you are on the right track to solve the precis of past papers.
I would suggest that you must follow the book "Exploring the world of English by Syed Sadat Ali shah" for your precis writing.It will take some time but eventually you will be able to tackle this.


regards

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I don't want to be the looser...

I think this passage has been taken from Bertrand Russel's book .."Unpopular Essays"..Am I right?

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Ali da malang.

Well i will try this precis very soon.

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"Our Lord, give us the good in this world and the good in the hereafter." (Al-Qur'an, 2:201).

yeah exactly i am following that book.... i would request when ever you are free plz check my upcoming precis. i would b thnkful for that.

yeah sure why not!

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I don't want to be the looser...

Well thanks :-)....

please check this one.
Original :
The best aid to give isintellectual aid, a gift of useful knowledge. A gift of knowledgeis infinitely preferable to a gift of material things. There are many reasons for this. Nothing becomes truly one’s own except on the basis of some genuine effort or sacrifice. A gift of material goods can be appropriated by the recipient without effort or sacrifice; it therefore rarely becomes his own and is all too frequently and easily treated as a mere windfall. A gift of intellectual goods, a gift of knowledge, is a very different matter. Without a genuine effort of appropriation on the part of the recipient there is no gift. To appropriate the gift and to make itone’s own is the same thing, and ‘neither moth nor rust doth corrupt’. The gift of material goodsmakes people dependent, but the gift of knowledge makes them free. The gift of knowledge alsohas far more lasting effects and is far more closely relevant to the concept of ‘development.’Give a man a fish, as the saying goes, and you are helping him a little bit for a very short time,teach him the act of fishing, and he can help himself all his life. further, if you teach him to makehis own fishing net, you have helped him to become not only self-supporting, but also self-reliantand independent, man and businessman.This, then should become the ever-increasing preoccupation of aid-programmes to make menself-reliant and independent by the generous supply of the appropriate intellectual gifts, gifts of relevant knowledge on the methods of self-help. This approach, incidentally, has also theadvantage of being relatively cheap, of making money go a long way. For POUNDS 100/- you may be able to equip one man with certain means of production, hut for the same moneyyou may well be able to teach and hundred men to equip themselves. Perhaps a little ‘pumppriming’ by way of material goods will in some cases, be helpful to speed the process of development.(E. F. Schumacher)

Precis:
"Power of knowledge"
The real power is that of concrete knowledge. the power of knowledge is far better then the presents of commodities , which is having solid grounds to justify. in order, to achieve something one has to make true endeavors. one can accept the presents of commodities without making much hard work but that is hardly related to the individual. on the other hand power of knowledge is dissimilar stuff. for knowledge one had to roll up his sleeves.
The present of knowledge makes oneself set free and the present of substances/commodities makes oneself rely on others. the power of knowledge is nearly related to the idea of growth. if a person taught another person about fishing, he basically helped him for his future.
Different programmes should focus to spread knowledge, by which one will rely on himself/herself rather than on others. by spreading knowledge one will be able to earn at low-cost. for $100 one can provide someone the medium of earning but in he same amount one can teach more than one man to tackle the daily challenges. nevertheless, may be, investment in the matter commodities would be useful in the process of development.

Your original draft has many mistakes of spellings and as well as the Precise.2nd there is nothing like Power of Knowledge shows essence in the passage.you have repeatedly use the word POWER ,that's wrong.the main theme of passage was Acquisition on knowledge makes a man self reliance,skillful and this is better than acquisition of material goods.so i think the title should be give THE BEST GIFT IS THE GIFT OF KNOWLEDGE or Knowledge Makes Skilful.
however carry on and precise is an art and art can be obtained through regular exercise.
Regads

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