please check precis of 1995 paper.
 

please check my precis of paper 1995. thanks in advance.

Paper precis and composition 1995.
(Original passage)

When you see a cockroach or a bed-hug your first reaction is one of disgust and that is immediately, followed by a desire to exterminate the offensive creature. Later, in the garden, you see a butterfly or a dragonfly, and you are filled with admiration at its beauty and grace.Man’s feelings towards insects are ambivalent. He realizes that some of them for example, -flies and cockroaches arc threats to health. Mosquitoes and tsetse flies have in the past sapped the vitality of entire tribes or nations. Other insects are destructive and cause enormous losses.Such arc locusts, which can wipe out whole areas of crops in minutes; and termites, whose often insidious ravages, unless checked at an early stage, can end in the destructing of entire rows –of houses.Yet men’s ways of living may undergo radical changes if certain species of insects were to become extinct. Bees, for example, pollinate the flowers of many plants which are food sources.In the past, honey was the only sweetening agent known to man in some remote parts of the world. Ants, although they bite and contaminate man’s food are useful scavengers which consume waste material that would otherwise pollute the environment.Entomologists who have studied insect fossils believe them to have inhabited the earth for nearly 400 million years. Insects live in large numbers almost everywhere in the world, from the hottest deserts and the deepest caves to the peaks of-high mountains and even the snows of the polar caps.Some insect communities are complex in organizations, prompting men to believe that they possess an ordered intelligence. But such organized behavior is clearly not due to- developed brains. If we have to compare them to humans, bee and ant groups behave like extreme totalitarian societies. Each bee or ant seems to have a determined role to play instinctively and does so without deviation.The word “instinct” is often applied to insect behavior. But some insect behavior appears so clear that one tends to think that some sort of intelligenceis at work. For example, the worker bee, upon relating to the hive after having found a new source of nectar, communicates his discovery by a kind of dance which tells other bees the direction and distance away of the nectar.


Precis of above passage:[B][SIZE="5"]

“Human reaction towards insects”[/SIZE][/B]
If one see insects like cockroach or bed-bug, he feels irritated and tries to kill it . on the other hand if one see butterfly or dragon-fly he starts showing respect due to their beauty. Human feels that certain insects like flies and cockroaches are bad for health. Furthermore, insects like locust are dangerous for crops and termites, which are dangerous for houses.
On the other hand, human respects the insects like honey bee, which is known as sweet agent. Despite the fact that ant bites and pollute men’s food yet they are useful to eat thrown food to have environment pollution.
Insects are present in every part of the world and Scientific study of insects showed that insects lived on earth almost for 400 million years.
Sometime human thinks that some insect societies are extremely organized is due to brain capacity which is not true. Particularly bees and ants are said to more devoted to their work as compare to humans.
Some insects act smartly in between the work. Which one compels to think that it is due to their intellegensia. The so called intellegensia is referred to the honey bees. When Honeybee get nectar and reaches to its hive, give a particular gesture through which other bees understands about the nectar’s place and direction.

Here is my solution:
Title:[U][B]Man in relation with insects[/B][/U]

Man has mixed feelings for insects, he maintains that some are dangerous for living beings like cockroach, bed-bug,mosquitoes and locusts whereas some are source of pleasure and have very essential role in todays human living i.e the honey bee which not only pollinate the flowers but have a source of honey and ant though bite and pollute our food but engulf the daily waste.
By observing their remains entomolists have suggested that most of the insects live in great number approx from 400 million years in all corners of the world, they used to live very organized in behaviour by playing their individual role like bee and ants that is why the word “instinct is used for them”.




Now let me enumerate your mistakes:
1.the original passage is about 372 words,but you solution is about 216 words long where as it must be with in 115 to 125 words long.
2. In most of the places you have paragraphed the original passage where as you have to summarize into your own words.
3.don't make small paragraphs.(try to follow the rule of para)

lot of effort is needed from your side(I am not claiming that i am a master of this art,but i used to try some of above mentioned points to make a precis)
It seems that you have perceived the original passage, but did not able to produce the desired gist. so practice, practice and more practice!

regards

[QUOTE=suzaq2005;426062]Here is my solution:
Title:[U][B]Man in relation with insects[/B][/U]

Man has mixed feelings for insects, he maintains that some are dangerous for living beings like cockroach, bed-bug,mosquitoes and locusts whereas some are source of pleasure and have very essential role in todays human living i.e the honey bee which not only pollinate the flowers but have a source of honey and ant though bite and pollute our food but engulf the daily waste.
By observing their remains entomolists have suggested that most of the insects live in great number approx from 400 million years in all corners of the world, they used to live very organized in behaviour by playing their individual role like bee and ants that is why the word “instinct is used for them”.




Now let me enumerate your mistakes:
1.the original passage is about 372 words,but you solution is about 216 words long where as it must be with in 115 to 125 words long.
2. In most of the places you have paragraphed the original passage where as you have to summarize into your own words.
3.don't make small paragraphs.(try to follow the rule of para)

lot of effort is needed from your side(I am not claiming that i am a master of this art,but i used to try some of above mentioned points to make a precis)
It seems that you have perceived the original passage, but did not able to produce the desired gist. so practice, practice and more practice!

regards[/QUOTE]

ok got it..... inshallah next time i would try to overcome these mistakes. and thanks a lot for kind reply.

MY precise 1995
TITLE:[B][U] Insects' impact on Human society.[/U][/B]

Different insects prompt different kinds of feeling is humankind. Man abhors some species while admire the beauty of others. Some insects are considered deleterious to human health and destructive to vegetation and human constructions. Conversely, insects like Bees contribute in human food through pollination and by producing by-products. Scientific study reveals that insects live on this planet for 400 million years. Although they are devoid of definite intelligence, behavior of some species depict the opposite.