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@Miss_Naqvi
Thanks for such a nice analysis. It would be very beneficial for us. However, analysis is not a complete solution without much awaiting precis of yours. Please enlighten us how to embody the analysis in a perfect precis.
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dear miss Naqvi
its really encouraging to see ur reply.and ur analysis tought me the points which i cdnt grap in my percie and added up my knowledge.thanx again. |
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extreemly sorry for being late,hopefully u will consider my participation.
PRECIS: Title:Ways of celebrating Jinnah's centenary. According to the writer, there are two ways of celebrating a great man's centenary;we can take him off from his high rank,examine his work for humanity and than make him insusceptible by installing him on high rank.Another way which is more sound ,is to examine life of Jinnah not as a heroic statue,but as a common and living man and utilize his qualities for solving world problems.Jinnah is reduced to a mere heroic stature,our duty is to examine his life as mere mr.Jinnah by depriving him from his leadership.During this process of examining his life writer finds that his glory was not diminished though,he had human limitations.Our interest is to find principles of his life.He tries to awake people from slumber of slavery.Jinnah had put spirit in Pakistani youth,by awakening their faith in themselves.His faith in ordinary man shows that he offered good life for all Pakistanis.Lovers of Jinnah should try to maintain unity in their work. [words;169] sorry again for being late.Dear miss Naqvi ,i write the precis before checking ur analysis of paragraph.i hope u will guide me and point out my limitations.thanks |
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Arghhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh...........late again....................
Anywayz, nice passage. It was an interesting read. I had a precis of the passage but cudn't post it before. Here it is:- Title: Apposite Celebration of Jinnah's Centenary A great person's centenary celebration can be glorified either by praising his credentials and achievements thus exalting him even higher before becoming amnesiac to it; or his life can be analyzed more microscopically and he made as a source of inspiration for us. Jinnah should be remembered by treating him simply as a man not as a leader to protect him from becoming an idol whose comprehension is beyond the reach of mere mortals. Seen from a birdseye view, Jinnah's magnanimity increases although he too was a mortal having his frailties. The thing to be righteously analyzed, to guide us out of our idleness, is his principles and mannerisms. History bears witness that Jinnah instilled courage into the hearts of the oppressed, taught the downtrodden how to stand up to oppression and faith was all they needed to succeed. Jinnah's determination that the unity of humankind is the key to the welfare of all still holds true and men true to his values keep this in their hearts and minds. (170 words) Sorry, this precis was attempted before your points were added. I'll analyze my attempt in light of them. In the meantime, i'll be waiting for your analysis, the model precis and the new passage, Miss Naqvi. Once agian, Thnxxxxxx for your efforts. Take Care and Stay Cool!
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See you next time.
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Sorry for this time
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Yes dear I got late caz occupied at so many avenues but still try to spare some time for helping other with my skills that I learnt after taking suggestions from so many competent teachers. My answer is same to you that precis submitted after analysis is not eligible to meet the criteria of correction. Really sorry caz you are late more to me. So try next time. Best Wishes
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Here I am dissecting your précis into paragraphs and then you would be able to see the areas to improve and the mistakes you have committed while understanding the theme of passage. Quote:
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There are two possibilities of celebrating great man’s birthday; one by making monument and put him at a height and other is to peep into his life as human and take inspiration to eye with life. (Words 36) Quote:
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Jinnah should be appreciated as model man by separating him from leadership rather seeing him as sculpture of greatness that is hanged high for momentary admiration without any inspiration and action. (Words 31) Quote:
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My Suggestion Jinnah also owes shortcomings to share human nature but it does not lessen perception of him. His greatness lies in the paramount principles that lead him to live life with no compromise and thought provoking inspiration for upcoming generations. (Words 39) Quote:
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Jinnah’s independence campaign taught lesson of courage and sublime faith for standing against those who are barrier to the cause. He poured new life by showing the importance of will power for achieving a cause. (Words 34) Quote:
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Jinnah’s trust on man realized his dream into reality. He introduced concept of Unity to give equal opportunities to all and his followers hold this message efficiently. (Words 26) So in the light of my suggestions overall Precis would be; There are two possibilities of celebrating great man’s birthday; one by making monument and putting it at height and other is to peep into his life as human and take inspiration to eye with life. Jinnah should be appreciated as model man by separating him from leadership rather seeing him as sculpture of greatness that is hanged high for momentary admiration without any inspiration and action. Jinnah also owes shortcomings to share human nature but it does not lessen his perception. His greatness lies in the paramount principles that lead him to live life with no compromise and thought provoking inspiration for upcoming generations. Jinnah’s independence campaign taught lesson of courage and sublime faith for standing against those who are barrier to the cause. He poured new life by showing the importance of will power for achieving a cause. Jinnah’s trust on man realized his dream into reality. He introduced concept of Unity to give equal opportunities to all and his followers hold this message efficiently. (Words 166)
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Sorry Hayatkhan & Secondopinion
Sorry Hayatkhan & Secondopinion
I will be adding suggestions for your precis by tomorrow. Your work is good but it need some preening. That I will suggest tomorrow. Definately it wont be disected in a manner of Sam Dya but will guide you to write a good precis. I know its not good to be late always but their are not only time constraints but other reasons as well. I was facing internet access problem during last week that caused long delay. But Inshshallah I will be adding next passage tomorrow alongwith correction to your precis.
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4 secondopinion
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I don’t mean that you shall always make a précis by separating it into paragraphs it means to take a help and divide it in a way that you can precise every point of the passage. I started practice after long time thus given you the passage that was quite easy and can be separated comfortably but sometime it happens that a paragraph deals only with examples thus we cannot make a précis this way. Quote:
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Keep it up....!
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Very Good effort no doubt. Your effort was really wonderful need and here I have made some minor replacements to polish it. You have presented it as a whole and here I would like to tell you the skills you owe; Understanding of concept Merging of whole passage in a paragraph Capturing basic ideas from a lot So keep it up and put some more efforts. A great man’s centenary can be celebrated in two ways either by formal admiration of great qualities and services for human race or by scrutinized analysis of his life and taking an inspiration for implementing his principals. His life can be a source of actuation while facing difficult situations. The valid way to celebrate Jinnah’s centenary is the second. We have already admired him too much jeopardizing him as a superhuman. After all he was human and every human has its own strength and weaknesses. If we sideline his leadership for a while and examine his personal life, we would notice that he was always committed to his principles he lived by. He was always a distinguished man. The main thing that one can learn form Jinnah’s independence campaign is power of self confidence and self belief. He was determined that his dreamland Pakistan would be a land of equal opportunities for all as he given slogan of “Unity” which elaborates welfare of all. (164 words)
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