this is not fair my precise is not discussed.i wanna know how was it

not even mine is discussed..do tell me if ma conception was right or wrong?

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Nosheen dear dont worry definately it take time to make corrections so at that time I have corrected Humayun's precis and now giving you some suggestions. And will wait for your another version.

Nosheen Sorry to say but your title is not according to the passage, so you have to change it. And as far as your précis is concerned the words limit is 100 – 106 while you have finished it within 86 words. So you have to reshape it. I will check your work after the correction you will make. You have used the word vain that was already in the passage, it is not a good practice to use the same vocabulary items as in the passage so you can take help from meaning of difficult words for replacing the words of the passage. Good things about your writing are its coherence and clarity.

Now after reading the main points of every paragraph as I have discussed its quite easy to understand the way to make a precis and I do hope that you will do the same. If you will say I will correct it but it would be appreciated if you give it another sitting.

Regards...

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"When Allah leads you to the edge of the cliff, Trust Him Fully, only 1 of 2 things will happen either He will catch you when you fall or He will teach you how to fly"

Atifch you have condensed the passage in a best possible manner and I m really impressed by your writing style but for precis writing you have to follow the limit of 1/3 and you havent followed it. So I m waiting for your another effort and do hope you will add it soon.

Actually I have started the thread as two way learning process, I will learn from you and will tell you the things I know. So if any of the members find some mistake in my work his or her correction would be highly appreciated.

Saturday will be the last day then we will move to another precis passage.

Regards

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"When Allah leads you to the edge of the cliff, Trust Him Fully, only 1 of 2 things will happen either He will catch you when you fall or He will teach you how to fly"

Precis:

HOuse of commons, brings home the fact that no man is indespensable, yet politicians support themselves with great deal of vanity, but in vain. They habitually disregard each other's thoughts and wish to grab every chance of addressing the house. Even one's closest friend may refuse to listen and the only one paying attention, would be the one who wants to be the next, to address the house. Sincerity is scarce among the members. People are eager to earn reputation for themselves and wish to exagerate their own importance, instead of extending their patronage to others.

I have bold the sentences need revision. Your attempt is really good having only 96 words so you check it once again and definately will reply your tomorrow caz now its time to leave.

Regards

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"When Allah leads you to the edge of the cliff, Trust Him Fully, only 1 of 2 things will happen either He will catch you when you fall or He will teach you how to fly"

If you have gone through the passages given in CSS exams you must find this one quite easy and comprehensible. Yes definately most of us use External Locus of Control so always examiner are responsible for our mistakes caz we are little and innocent angels, how we can commit mistakes.

Yes you can make a precis of this sort but when you are willing to lose your marks. The practice always means to learn from your mistakes and the same is the intention of thread. U can see the analysis I have added about the passsage it will help you to understand the boring and meaningless passage.

Here we mean to score good and for this purpose we are practicing it. I hope you will understand what I mean to say... for the help of members I have added meanings of difficult words too that can provide you replacements. But the matter is how much attention you are paying.

I hope nothing will be offensive and you will participate in next passage too caz yesterday was the last day for this passage and today I will add another.

Regards

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"When Allah leads you to the edge of the cliff, Trust Him Fully, only 1 of 2 things will happen either He will catch you when you fall or He will teach you how to fly"

Make a précis of the following passage and suggest a suitable title.

The last ball has been bowled, the bats have been oiled and put away, and around Lord’s the grand-stands are deserted and forlorn. We have said farewell to cricket. We have said farewell, too, to cricket’s king. The well graced actor leaves the stage and becomes only a memory in a world of happy memories. And so ‘hats off’ to the Jam Sahib – the prince of a little state, but the king of a great game….

I think it is undeniable that as a batsman the Indian will live as the supreme exponent of the Englishman’s game. The claim does not rest simply on his achievements, although, judged by them, the claim could be sustained. His season’s average of 87 with a total of over 3,000 runs, and no one else has equaled that record. And is not his astonishing achievement of scoring two double centuries in a single match on a single day – not against a feeble attack, but against Yorkshire, always the most resolute and resourceful of bowling teams.

But we don not judge a cricketer so much by the runs he gets as by the way he gets them, ‘In literature or as in finance, says Washington Irving, much paper and much poverty may coexist. And in cricket, too, many runs and much dullness may be associated. If cricket is menaced with creeping paralysis, it is because it is losing the spirit of joyous adventure and becoming a dull instrument for compiling table of averages. There are dull mechanic fellows who turn out runs with as little emotion as machine turns out pins. There is no colour, no enthusiasm, no character in their play, Cricket is not an adventure to them; it is a business. It was so with Shrewsbury. His technical perfection was astonishing; but the soul of the game was wanting in him. There was no sunshine in his play, or swift surprise or splendid unselfishness. And without these things, without gaiety, daring and the spirit of sacrifice cricket is a dead thing. Now the Jam Sahib has the root of the matter in him. His play is as sunny as his face. He is not a miser hoarding up runs, but a millionaire spending them, with a splendid yet judicious prodigality. It is as though his pockets are bursting with runs that he wants to shower with his blessings upon the expectant multitude. It is not difficult to believe that in his little kingdom of Nawanagar, where he has the power of life and death in his hands, he is extremely popular, for it is obvious that his pleasure is in giving pleasure. (438 Words)


Difficult words and their meanings.

Forlorn: sad – unhappy; Farewell: departure; Well graced: Impressive or graceful; Exponent: one who explains; Sustained: kept alive, Feeble: weak; Resolute: determined; Menaced: attacked; Creeping: that comes slowly and slowly; Paralysis: inactivity; Compiling: making; Astonishing: surprising; Gaiety: cheerfulness, Daring: courage; Hoarding up: billboard – to add up; Judicious: wise, Prodigality: spending too much; Multitude: too many people.

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"When Allah leads you to the edge of the cliff, Trust Him Fully, only 1 of 2 things will happen either He will catch you when you fall or He will teach you how to fly"

Jam sahib:The player of real cricket.

The price jam Sahib has ended his inns of his excellent career and the stadium and the stadium looks empty.The great cricket has now become the part of happy past.Indian batsman will always be a symbole of his game niether because of his excellent record of 3000 runs with the average of 87,nor for the his best 200 against the powerful bowling team like Yorkshire but because of the fervour that he lend to the game as against the mechanical runs of Shrewsbury.For cricket is not hust the game of barren runs but also of playfulness,excitement and sensation.Jam's talent lies not merely in making runs like machine but the sensation and excitement that he added to his game.Perhaps that's why he is so famous in his kingdom as he knows how to make others happy along with him.

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Woods are lovely dark and deep
But i have promises to keep
And miles to go before i sleep
And miles to go before i sleep
S.Nosheen

Jam sahib, an Indian prince of a small state, is a great king of the Englishman's game of cricket. He not only has brilliant season's average of scoring runs and other record breaking statistics, but the way he gets runs is trully admirable. He plays in an adventerous, joyous and spirited fashion. Unlike few other batsmen, who are dull and mechanical in their approach and play the game as if conducting business, Jam sahib is full of passion and sportsman spirit. He brings great enthusiasm and unselfishness to the game of cricket. He is not only spectacular to watch in the playground but he is also loved and respected by people in his kingdom of Nawanagar because of his attitude of finding happiness in giving happiness.

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