Originally Posted by Aimen khakwani

My second attempt

Envy is the deplorable trait of human personality. It is the source of unhappiness. The envious person does not seek happiness from his own belongings. He usually imposes misfortune on others. He creates hurdles for the others to attain their benefits. It seems that he is securing these benefits for himself. This attitude, if does not condemn, will ruin his qualities and character. He does not know how to compare the situation and importance of anything. Even saints are not free from envious feelings. However, enviousness can be cured through admiration rather than happiness. An envious person cannot feel happiness. Rationally, comprehending the root cause of envious feeling is an ultimate approach to cure envy.


Please Evaluate This And Disciple of Aristotle Thank you for guiding me rightly rather than giving me full marks. I missed some points. And u guided me in a right manner

Originally Posted by sidra siyal

Good effort this sentence need some work i.e. shallow otherwise, though mightresult in a short-term success, but are not long-lasting rest is good


Thank you for your comments! could you please point out what EXACTLY did you find wrong/irrelevant in the sentence you've quoted ?
cheers!

Originally Posted by agilicious

your writing style is effective ,the sentence in bold if adjusted,might clear the meaning.
i.e. shallow otherwise, though mightresult in a short-term success, but are not long-lasting
i.e. shallow otherwise, It might result in a short-term success, but not long-term

Originally Posted by Aimen khakwani

My second attempt

Envy is the deplorable trait of human personality. It is the source of unhappiness. The envious person does not seek happiness from his own belongings. He usually imposes misfortune on others. He creates hurdles for the others to attain their benefits. It seems that he is securing these benefits for himself. This attitude, if does not condemn, will ruin his qualities and character. He does not know how to compare the situation and importance of anything. Even saints are not free from envious feelings. However, enviousness can be cured through admiration rather than happiness. An envious person cannot feel happiness. Rationally, comprehending the root cause of envious feeling is an ultimate approach to cure envy.


Please Evaluate This And Disciple of Aristotle Thank you for guiding me rightly rather than giving me full marks. I missed some points. And u guided me in a right manner

Originally Posted by sidra siyal

PRECIS 2010
Of all the characteristics of ordinary human nature envy is the most unfortunate; not only does the envious person wish to inflict misfortune and do so whenever he can with impunity, but he is also himself rendered unhappy by envy. Instead of deriving pleasure from what he has, he derives pain from what others have. If he can, he deprives others of their advantages, which to him is as desirable as it would be to secure the same advantages himself. If this passion is allowed to run riot it becomes fatal to all excellence, and even to the most useful exercise of exceptional skill. Why should a medical man go to see his patients in a car when the labourer has to walk to his work? Why should the scientific investigator be allowed to spend his time in a warm room when others have to face the inclemency of the elements? Why should a man who possesses some rare talent of great importance to the world be saved from the drudgery of his own housework? To such questions envy finds no answer. Fortunately, however, there is in human nature a compensating passion, namely that of admiration. Whoever wishes to increase human happiness must wish to increase admiration and to diminish envy.
What cure is there for envy? For the saint there is the cure of selflessness, though even in the case of saints envy of other saints is by no means impossible. But, leaving saints out of account, the only cure for envy in the case of ordinary men and women is happiness, and the difficulty is that envy is itself a terrible obstacle to happiness.
But the envious man may say: ‘What is the good of telling me that the cure for envy is happiness? I cannot find happiness while I continue to feel envy, and you tell me that I cannot cease to be envious until I find happiness.’ But real life is never so logical as this. Merely to realize the causes of one’s own envious feeling is to take a long step towards curing them.

TITLE:ENVY-THE FATAL DISEASE OR ENVY-THE MORAL DISEASE CAUSES AND REMEDIES

Envy is the fatal disease.Envious person desires to mark others with bad karma and seeks pleasure in destroying others.Instead to being thankful for what he has,envious person is busy depriving others of glories.If this obsession is let loose it could turn into a habit or a skill.As every coin has two sides,the fatality of enviousness can be cured by the rehab of admiration or if not then by self realization of one's own flaws.

Corrections are highly welcomed

Originally Posted by sidra siyal

Make a precis of the given passage and suggest a suitable heading:

We're dealing with a very dramatic and very fundamental paradigm shift here. You may try" to lubricate your' social interactions with personality techniques and skills, but in the process, you may truncate the vital character base. You can't have the fruits without the roots. It's the principle of sequencing: Private victory precedes Public Victory. Self-mastery and self-discipline are the foundation of good relationship with others. Some people say that you have to like yourself before you can like others. I think' that idea has merit but if you don't know yourself, if you don't control yourself, if you don't have mastery over yourself, it's very hard to like yourself, except in some short-term, psych-up, superficial way. Real self-respect comes from dominion over*self from true independence. Independence is an achievement. Inter dependence is a choice only independent people can make. Unless we are willing to achieve real independence, it's foolish to try to develop human relations skills. We might try. We might even have some degree of success when the sun is shining. But when the difficult times come - and they will - We won't have the foundation to keep things together. The most important ingredient we put into any relationship is not what we say or what we do, but what we are. And if our words and our actions come from superficial human relations techniques (the Personality Ethic) rather than from our own inner core (the character Ethic), others will sense that duplicity. We simply won't be able to create and sustain the foundation necessary" for effective interdependence. The techniques and skills that really make a difference in human interaction are the ones that almost naturally flow from a truly independent character. So the place to begin building any relationship is inside ourselves, inside our Circle of Influence, our own character. As we become independent - Proactive, centered in correct principles, value driven and able to organize and execute around the priorities in our life with integrity - we then can choose to become interdependent - capable of building rich, enduring, highly productive relationships with other people.

PRECIS:

By personality tactics one might impress upon others for a time being.But,this process is superficial.The real personality comes from within.Notwithstanding,sharping ones inner abilities creates independence of character and also the basis of a good relationship with others.

Originally Posted by sidra siyal

i appreciate your comment and time! Kindly note that the sentence you've quoted is grammatically wrong. But i do get the idea!

Would you mind taking a look at my other solution for the article "ENVY TO ADMIRATION" and i'd be returning the favor by commenting on your work and by trying to point out anything i can!
Regards.

Originally Posted by agilicious

Again i couldn't find out anything wrong in this! damn it.

Originally Posted by agilicious

Thanks Agil... !!! I am thinking that we or any other interested candidate should attempt precis of the same year and post it here,that way we would be in a better position to evaluate the gist of it properly...What do you say?? Precis of which year should we attempt next?



words are less in this precis actually