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Cool 2. Anticipation is often greater than realisation
Outline:
Thesis: Anticipation is often greater, in several aspects of society, than realization leading to negative consequences in all such spheres.
Point one:
Anticipation part of human nature which often exceeds realisation
Point two:
1: society(personal level)
example of husband wife
in family
2: friends
3: office
4: international
5: sports
Point three: Humans try to balance the negatives by minimizing the gaps between anticipation and what the reality could bring.
1: by understanding
2: cooperation
3: integration between international countries
4: delivering in sports politic etc by the players and public figures
Conclusion.
In first attempt I tried this essay, any idea about this essay's chance of being accepted or giving me 40 score to clear it? Seniors and CSP's can you please comment on it?