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Policing a turbulent democracy is not a joke

1.Readvancing the sectional interests under the cloak of democracy
2.Violent clashes among political parties
3.Raising riots for technocrats, democracy can be revived?
4.Rioting mobs, why establishment is involved
5.Administrative action based on alleged complaints.
6.Pressure groups, Interest groups.
7.State security commission
8.Charter of state security commission
9.Arguments from political and religious perspectives
10Performance report of establishment
11.No need of more and more resolutions, actual need is action.
12.Orientive policy on behalf of parliament
13.Maintenance if public order by security agencies
14.Pre-requisites of democracy
Revival of educational system
Local governments
Electoral reforms
15.Destablishing the factors making the situation even worse


P.S. I am able to write a (1600-1700 words) essay. Please make additions where necessary
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Policing a turbulent democracy is not a joke

1.Readvancing the sectional interests under the cloak of democracy
2.Violent clashes among political parties
3.Raising riots for technocrats, democracy can be revived?
4.Rioting mobs, why establishment is involved
5.Administrative action based on alleged complaints.
6.Pressure groups, Interest groups.
7.State security commission
8.Charter of state security commission
9.Arguments from political and religious perspectives
10Performance report of establishment
11.No need of more and more resolutions, actual need is action.
12.Orientive policy on behalf of parliament
13.Maintenance if public order by security agencies
14.Pre-requisites of democracy
Revival of educational system
Local governments
Electoral reforms
15.Destablishing the factors making the situation even worse


P.S. I am able to write a (1600-1700 words) essay. Please make additions where necessary
Your outline lacks proper introduction. Make the factors more objective by narrowing down to a case study for example Pakistan. Develop a solid thesis. Your outline badly lacks the thesis. Then discuss what are the disadvantages of a turbulent demo. PointNo.14
is not at the proper place.Adjust it somewhere else like in the start or in conclusion. I hope you got my points. One thing more that do not write so long headings. Just be brief and write down proper title. For example point no 7 explains nothing. I mean what is state security commission. Make it more lucid by writing down like "Poor Performances or Naegative role of state security commission.

You are welcome for more suggestions. I will try to post my outline regarding this essay to the best of my knowledge. Good Luck
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Thank you sir for your kind opinions. I will consider them in my next attempt

The reason for my broader outlines is that i was criticised for writing brief outlines. Please check my essay in the following post also, in your ease time
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Thank you sir for your kind opinions. I will consider them in my next attempt

The reason for my broader outlines is that i was criticised for writing brief outlines. Please check my essay in the following post also, in your ease time
http://www.cssforum.com.pk/css-compu...uccessors.html
You are welcome. I have read your Essay in the above mentioned thread. And yes the outline is not up to the mark. The term broader outlines there means expand the thesis a bit more or explain the topic in a more detailed way. And ideal outline should not exceed two pages. However the term I used here that make your headings short means that do not use complete sentences. Make it simple. Follow the proper way of developing an outline. Your outlines seems to have no start and no end. For example read the following outline as a sample.

For example the topic is:
Decline of Education Standards in Pakistan

Here is the suggested outline:

1. Introduction
(Write 2,3 Lines under introduction in Outline)
2. Thesis Statement
Develop argument according to given topic. For Example in this case Thesis Statement will be:
Unfortunately in third world countries like Pakistan, education standards are declining perpetually instead of government efforts and It is deteriorating the society at large by curtailing basic educational facilities because education in Pakistan is exam oriented not education oriented. There is a dire need to reform educational policies in Pakistan in terms of providing better education to future generation.
(Now the whole essay will rotate about this argument)
3.Causes for decline of education in Pakistan
(Give brief details in outline of all the causes in your mind that are responsible for declining standards of education and describe each cause in one paragraph in essay)
4. Effects of declining education on Pakistan Society
(Now give brief detail of effects in outline and describe each effect in one paragraph in essay)
5. Critical Analysis of Government Educational Policies
(In essay write one or two paragraphs about different government policies. Describe distinguished steps taken by government and the reason for their failures )
6. Remedial Measures to Improve Education Standards in Pakistan
(Write brief measures in outline and Describe each remedy in one paragraph in essay)
7. Conclusion
Write one or two lines in outline of conclusion and a paragraph in an essay

I hope you will get a better idea about outline now. And If you want me to analyse your complete essay now, I will do so.
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So you mean that we should explain a topic under following pattern

Introduction
Prevaililng condition (of the topic under explanation)
Contributing factors
Remedial measures
Supportive arguments
Conclusion
(With a slight change while writing quotational essays)


P.S. its just a pattern i have made as a sketch of essay outline
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Introduction
Prevaililng condition (of the topic under explanation) ( Replace the heading with thesis statement in whatever outline you make even in paper give it the name of thesis statement. ) You have to develop your main argument about essay under here whether you favor the topic or oppose the topic. Examiner will grasp an idea about your essay from your thesis statement. Your whole essay rotates around this thing. In the next post I ll try to explain the way of writing thesis statement in paper.
Contributing factors
Effects
Current Scenario (Current Scenario can also be adjusted before contributing factors)
Remedial measures
Supportive arguments ( You need supportive arguments for every argument you made in paper or everything you discuss in your topic.so do not name it a separate heading.
Conclusion
(With a slight change while writing quotational essays)
Yes you can mould for any topic accordingly.
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