sallam to all senior members! it is hereby requesting you that kindly check my essay. in fact it is not an essay, but just a first part of it. i m financially unable to join the academy or and teacher so please guide me as you can. please also tell me that is it the right way of making outline numbering wise a heading wise like i have marked the every first letter of heading in capital letter except helping verbs and preposition.

i am an aspirant of 2016 and its my very first attempt of essay paragraphs.i have not read it from anywhere else just write it with my own. Kindly check it from grammatical point of view and also correct my direction that am i fine in English writing or where i need improvement, because my all preparation depends on your guidance..thanks
and please tell me am i eligible to appear in css exams with this kind of english?
anxiously waiting for you reply..




City life is better than country life

Introduction
1) City life; full of luxuries and necessities.
2) Incentives including in city life;
i. Availability of Healthy Food
ii. Availability of Variety of Education System
iii. Healthy Atmosphere and Environment
iv. Health care centers and Hospitals
v. Latest technologies
vi. Intelligence Transport system
vii. Speedy Mass Communication; Internet,Telephone,Telegram,Infrared,Fax,E-mail etc
viii. E-commerce
ix. Latest Research Centers
3) Metropolitan roadway to international trade.
4) Cities; source of Economic prosperity
5) Prone to High Risk of Disasters;
i. Floods
ii. Earthquakes
iii. Global Warming
iv. Urban Heat Island
v. Biodiversity loss
6) Country life; lazy and sluggish way of life
7) Unaware of latest technologies
i. Lack of variety education
ii. Old methodology oriented
iii. Lack of proper transport system
iv. Lack of communication facilities; internet, infrared, optical fiber facilities etc
8) Country life; more prone to risk of lethal diseases
i. Adult mortality rate
ii. Child mortality rate
9) Low economic prosperity
10) Rural life; good environment; save Biodiversity; Less prone to Urban Heat Island Effect.
conclusion




The basic human life is divided into two categorizes; city life and country life. Such life with full of basic facilities ; healthy environment, healthy food, health care centers, intelligence transport system, speedy mass communication etc is termed as city life, while, a life lagging in such facilities identified with lower number of population is designated as country life. The city life is always preferred over country life in terms of availability of such facilities and latest technologies.
A rapid and vigorous trend has been observed in urbanization of the world, which reported, had been exceeded to 50 that residing in cities. The major trend is due to availability of varieties in life which, sometimes, greater than luxuries and made the life easier and comfortable.
City life is full of luxuries and diverse in nature. The number of species living and the life cycle is interdependent; hence the chain forming cycle produces a linear compatibility in life which sets mutual harmony and concordance with one other.
The basic need for the survival of living organism is food which available in various varieties in cities, the latest technologies imparted its role in food modification process and made the human life much easier and also time saving.
For instance, availability of junk food and canned food saves the time in cooking and also saves the energy consumed in cooking process, people often enjoy the food in various varieties with different taste, also the food technology in metropolitan cities preserve balanced and proper diet in canned food, thus made it more healthy for bodily health and physical fitness.
Afterward food, the necessity in priority is education. There is no comparison of city and rural education system, the numbers of courses and diplomas offered in cities makes it distinctive in character. People in cities, often have number of choices for selection or even they can get education without joining any institute via internet or home delivery of course packages. The quality of education offered in cities is outclass; the study environment; proper institute, also build the character and boosts the morale of person, leads him/her to climax of success.
Some other intrinsic characteristic of city life, are the incentives given by it to its residents, are the basic needs and facilities of life which maintains the high quality and drive the standard of living. Healthy environment is one of them; as the big metropolitan cities are highly planned and well managed structurally and socially, thus offering a better opportunities of convivial relations and events to the residents which makes the environment healthy.
One more incentive is immediate availability of medical facilities, as man made progress, it has generated diseases, but in large cities, it is no more problem. Dangerous and lethal diseases can be cured properly with good expertise and latest technologies as the hospitals in cities are well equipped with latest inventions of medical sciences which made the cure and treatment of diseases easy and convenient.
Another quality of city life is availability of intelligence transport system, though the population increases, residential and commercial areas had been expanded to far areas, but in cities, the transport system; well-constructed roads, highways, rail tracks and airports made the communication system via buses, cars, railways, aero planes easier and comfortable. People are often using these services for traveling far a part areas and keeping contact with their relatives .

anxiously waiting for your response seniors..

The grammatical part of your English is almost ok (though not perfect) but you need to improve your expression of the language. Extensive reading may help you in this regard.

Secondly, it would be better to write an essay that evaluates a given proposition rather than just giving your points in favour of it or against. In your essay, it would be much better to also talk about the merits of living in villages, but turning then to clarify why such advantages of country life still outweigh the merits of city life by far.

I expect other members would add to the discussion here.

It may be undesirable to include the merits of country life in this specific topic of essay, since the idea clearly prioritizes city life over country. Also, it may defeat the very purpose of keeping the essence of the topic alive. So, in my opinion -based on very little knowledge that i have- he has been on track in his entire essay.

please share some strategies to prepare for essay.... after making outline i get very confused... can not understand how start writting...please help

You may be right Kashif as far as the focus of the writeup is concerned. But writing a totally one-sided essay is still not a great idea. It shows that you have a narrow vision and can not take a holistic view of things.

@Anabiya Mughal
What's the confusion? Just start writing. After writing the essay come back to it in a day or two and see what it lacks and how you can improve it. Incorporate your observations in the next writeup.

Also, read sharp opninion articles crtically and try to learn from them

thanks for such a helpful suggestion, you gave me a piece of advice to improve my writing expression, can you please elaborate it what does it mean? so that i may properly focus on it?

Dear Nation Builder,

I am suggesting that when you write an essay, better to make it somewhat critical. That entails discussing the good and the bad sides, both, of something but substantiating through strong arguments and evidence why you favour one of the propositions in comparison to the other. E.g. It would be a good idea to discuss the merits of country life briefly too, but showing later why the city life is still way better. Also Google 'Critical Writing'

I just saw that you Have discussed the merits of country life briefly at the end of your essay. So we are already on the same page !

got it! Thanks...am i eligible to appear in CSS with this kind of English?

I think you can appear. But some work on perfecting your grammar with the help of a qualified teacher and a lot of reading will considerably raise your chances of qualifying...