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Gender equality is a myth
• Introduction:
o Men and women are biologically, psychologically and physiologically similar. Both have 23 pairs of chromosomes, 206 bones in their body. Despite these similarities men are attain exalted place in our society while women are suffering and fighting for their fundamental rights.
• What is gender equality?
• Gender equality in Islam
• Gender inequality is a fact
1. In social sphere
a. Patriarchal society
b. Domestic violence
c. Orthodox religious practices
d. Conservative social norms
e. Mocking and equips
2. Political sphere
a. No quota
b. Weak legislation
3. Economic sphere
a. Less salary
b. Discrimination
c. Less opportunities
• Gender equality in Pakistan
• Suggestions to end gender inequality
a. Role of media
b. Strong legislation
c. More quota
d. Spreading awareness
e. Educating people
f. Women wings in political parties

• Conclusion

Ok let me assess this to the best of my abilities,and beg in advance pardon for any sort of misjudgment and error in evaluation.
First,your introduction is perfect and superb,with two deficiencies;one is graver and is of grammatical mistake,here verb attain will not be preceded by any helping verb,so remove are.
Second,thesis statement is too narrow and insufficient as it should include other hints of inequalities besides fundamental rights,which are a part of a series,like social inequality,and challenge from entrenched patriarchy.
Furthermore,there is no need to mention Islam here as it is not required and lastly,the intro should mirror the body.
But despite my cynical assessment,you have attempted it well.it just needs a bit fine-tuning.

Please elaborate the topic, specially those who attempted this topic in 2013 and passed essay. How this topic should be dealt?

Some people say that there is no discrimination on the basis of gender in the world, so no need to talk about gender inequality because no one's rights are being violated. But reality is that gender equality is a myth. Almost everywhere gender is facing discrimination. Every gender's rights are being violated. Like women rights are being violated, there is much difference in wages due to gender. So gender equality is a myth.

Or

Male and female are completely different, they cannot be considered same. Female are delicate, male are tough, males have the nature to earn to support the family, females have the nature to nurture and males and females are also physically different to each other, so gender equality is a myth, they cannot be considered same.

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Sure it is fine essay ..it can be bit more clear to make it more coherrent.still you can pass with 40

I discussed this topic with three Ph.D scholars of Punjab University, they have done Ph.D in gender studies. So first you all give your point of view, then I will tell that what they told me. If I'll tell you now then may be you all give bias statements by following their point.

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dear

will you please give us Ph.d scholar's view on this subject.

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Brother, as I already told that I will tell you their point of view, but I want to know first that what is the point of view of others. If I will tell you all now, then instead of telling their own point, everyone will follow that.

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my point view about ‘gender equality is a myth


1)discrimination against vulnerable gender

2) glass ceiling; women can see the upper levels in hierarchy but could never reach there due invisible ‘glass ceiling'.

3) low wages and harassment at workplace.


4) hypocrite world; no women become united nations secretary general.same is the case with American president election.


my essay centred around the point that after recent developments like free market economies,democracy,freedom of speech,and globalization,the rhetoric chanted was that both genders will get same respect and opportunities but these slogans never materialized.

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They told me that this topic is based on:
Some people say that there is no discrimination on the basis of gender in the world, so no need to talk about gender inequality because no one's rights are being violated. But reality is that gender equality is a myth. Almost everywhere gender is facing discrimination. Every gender's rights are being violated. Like there is much difference in wages due to gender. So gender equality is a myth.

According to them, below mentioned notion is wrong:
Male and female are completely different, they cannot be considered same. Female are delicate, male are tough, males have the nature to earn to support the family, females have the nature to nurture and males and females are also physically different to each other, so gender equality is a myth, they cannot be considered same.

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But you are limiting this topic, it is a wide topic. Will upload my own outline after the announcement of result.

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