Seniors, please assess my outline....pleaseee :)
 

Essay Topic: "What are the hurdles in our way to becoming a truly independent state?"

1. Introduction

2. What is meant by "Truly Independent State" ?

a. State sovereignty
b. Territorial Integrity
c. Military Strength and Deterrence
d. Political Stability and Robust Institutional structure
e. Positive international image
f. Economic stoutness and Investment opportunities
g. Power of people (Resourceful population)
h. Effective role in national and international politics

3. Do truly independence states really exist ?

a. Democratic norms and its impact on states
b. Global Politics and hegemony of world powers
c. Global Economy and the role of nation states
d. Territorial disputes and independence of states

4. Obstruction in the path of true independence

a. Lack of implementation of International Law
b. Hegemony of world powers and their dictatorial attitude
c. Biased attitude of world community
i) Palestine Issue: Territorial Integrity and misuse of power
ii) Kashmir Issue: Right of self determination sidelined

5. How can true independence be achieved ?

a. Respect of state sovereignty and territorial integrity at global and regional level
b. Effective participation of regional and world organizations in promoting and guarding state's independence
c. Discrmination towards states needs to be stopped
d. Equal opportunities to all for attaining prosperity and welfare

6. Conclusion

Dear all,

You are requested to provide your valuable input...

missing the point
 

deal fellow... you are missing the basic point in this essay. keep yourself within the limits of the topic. its about the hurdles hindering Pakistan to become a truly independent state but you are focusing else where .
be precise and to the point. focus should be on Pakistan .
plus try to understand the topic and then write your essay.

dear,
write the definition of “truly independent state",just two lines.

[QUOTE=waqarhassan;927388]deal fellow... you are missing the basic point in this essay. keep yourself within the limits of the topic. its about the hurdles hindering Pakistan to become a truly independent state but you are focusing else where .
be precise and to the point. focus should be on Pakistan .
plus try to understand the topic and then write your essay.[/QUOTE]

Dear brother, thanks for your comments. Truly grateful !! What if i alter the essay as follows:

Essay Topic: "What are the hurdles in our way to becoming a truly independent state?"

1. Introduction

2. Obstruction in the path of true independence

a. Threat to state sovereignty and territorial Integrity
b. Military Strength under international criticism
c. Poverty and illiteracy
d. Political and institutional instability
e. Tarnished international image
f. Lacking economic stoutness and investment opportunities
g. Dearth of resourceful population/Under resourced population
h. Lack of implementation of International Law
i. Hegemony of world powers and their dictatorial attitude
j. Biased attitude of world community
i) Palestine Issue: Territorial Integrity and misuse of power
ii) Kashmir Issue: Right of self determination sidelined
k) Lack of seriousness towards human development

3. How can true independence be achieved ?

a. Respect of state sovereignty and territorial integrity at global and regional level
b. Effective participation of regional and world organizations in promoting and guarding state's independence
c. Discrmination towards states needs to be stopped
d. Equal opportunities to all for attaining prosperity and welfare
e) Focus towards human development
f) Creating positive image on international and regional level

4. Conclusion

[QUOTE=qublai khan;927389]dear,
write the definition of “truly independent state",just two lines.[/QUOTE]

Thanks brother for your input. Can u please tell me how it could be done ? Should I insert the definition in introduction or skip the introduction and put the definition under its own heading

your outline depends upon point that how do “you" view a truly independent country.....

dear you made waffles.without having any central idea,you cannot make an outline.just glance over it again,no one can better point out your this fault except you,yourself.

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Outline

1-Introduction


A-Truly Independent State defined
B-Thesis statement


2-Hurdles that hinders our way to become a Truly Independent State


A-Absence of Nationhood
B-Absence of National Integration
C-Unstable Political Condition
D-Dearth of Leadership
E-Absence of National Political Party
F-Rise of Poverty
G-Rate of Literacy
H-Economic Stagnation
I-Growth of Population
J-Pluralistic Culture and Social Diversity
K-Weak Law and Order
L-High Level of Corruption
M-Politicisation of administration and Education
N-Violence/Terrorism


3- Recommendations

A_Rationalised Authority
B-Spcialised Administration
C-Socially / politically Mobilisation and Participation of People


4- Conclusion