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your outline is not bad....however some more point were required to be added for elaboration of the topic and the way you going to narrate the whole subject....it makes things easy and clear for the examiner .... otherwise examiner has to check your whole essay which would not be in your favour.

if you have explained all the things related to subject you will definitely get the passing marks.
in my view follwoings point are lacking in outline
-drfinition of democracy given by abraham lincoln as democract is govt of the people
-elaboration as to organs of state and working
- democratic forms of govt
- pre requisite of democracy or chracteristics instead of importance
-hurdles inluding conflict between organs, political and religious parties role etc
- hopes ... timely election, smooth transfer of power , army current stance etc
- role of media in safeguarding democracy
- constitutional measures...treason article 6 application

allah apko pass karay..!!
Hey GanXTer,

Thank you for your response. I added some to the of those points, but not elaborated in detail. Could have expanded on Media's Role, but rather than pin pointing most of details - I just touched generally like how the masses should be educated etc.

Though, I did discuss all the points mentioned in essay, some in more detail others just top off it.

Thank you, I also hope just to pass tbh.

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You had to prove that there is still hope for democracy in pakistan through few paragraphs and then move on to the hurdles that lie ahead and finally you had to give remedies for the hurdles
Hi Sami,

The hope part I actually did after discussing the hurdles and showing in the end how an informed voter can make a difference.

Tbh, as long as I pass I'd be fine. I just hope tbis piece gets me that.

Thank you for your response.

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Overall, your outline is good, however, it would have been far better if you had made a single point of history of democracy in Pakistan (for that is a complementary point). Also, merging the 3rd and the 5th principle headings into a single heading pertaining to the hopes would have made it more organized.

I hope you have not made mistakes in your Essay such as writing 'A birdeye view' when it should have been 'A bird's eye view'.

Do not worry about the facts and figures thing - I did not refer to even a single fact / figure in my Essay of CE 2017; essay is not a research paper.
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Overall, your outline is good, however, it would have been far better if you had made a single point of history of democracy in Pakistan (for that is a complementary point). Also, merging the 3rd and the 5th principle headings into a single heading pertaining to the hopes would have made it more organized.

I hope you have not made mistakes in your Essay such as writing 'A birdeye view' when it should have been 'A bird's eye view'.

Do not worry about the facts and figures thing - I did not refer to even a single fact / figure in my Essay of CE 2017; essay is not a research paper.
Hey Wasxxm,

Thank you for your input. Hopefully, not many such mistakes though you may understand writing with just some time left on the clock would to certain minor mistakes - though hopefully not major ones as I tried to keep correcting them as I went along.

Yeah, I just hope them facts and figures aren't THAAAT important. Again, a pass would be enough.

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Hey GanXTer,

Thank you for your response. I added some to the of those points, but not elaborated in detail. Could have expanded on Media's Role, but rather than pin pointing most of details - I just touched generally like how the masses should be educated etc.

Though, I did discuss all the points mentioned in essay, some in more detail others just top off it.

Thank you, I also hope just to pass tbh.

Good day to you!
i think following outline is the reasonable and appropirate outline

1. introduction
2. meaning
* derivation of the word democracy
3. definition
* by abraham lincoln
4. types of democracy
direct--- people,directly par5icipate
indirect--- through legal representative
5. organs of state
legislature
executive
judiciary
6. charachteristic of democracy
.political parties
. adult frqnchise
. elections
. public opinion
. independent judiciary etc
7. forms of govt and history of demkcracy in pak
* 1956 const--- parliamnetry
* 1962 const ---- presidential as given by military dictator
* 1973 const--- parliamenty
8. hurdles
. conflict b/w organs
. no rule of law
. military invasions
. rigging
. corruption
. political parties role
. non independce of jidiciary
. sit in protests
. horse trading
. foreign elements etc
9. effects
. dictatorahip
. rights curbing
. no rule of law
. no peoples rule etx
10. hopes and suggestion
. free n fair elction
. timely election
.smoothe transfer of power
. non military interfer3nce
. respect of pu lic opinion
. independence of judicary
. political parties positive role
. religious parties role
. integration etc
11. role of media in safeguarding democracy
12. constituional,proviosons protectinv democracy
* article 6---- treason
* 223- 227 election provision
13.democract in pak vs ind
14. pak vs west
* uk * us
15 islam n democracy in pak
16. conclusion
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Hi All,

It is my first attempt at CSS. Today's paper was apparently easier but the easiness made it a little more confusing for me because I believe, I could have written on 3-4 of the given topics. But being not very sure about certain facts and figures and some thinking, I went for democratic one. However, seeing that how it is a gamble and we can't really say anything about passing or failing, here's a "rough" outline of my essay for review.

Pages: 3.5 for outline - Pages for Essay: 9.5 (all sides) Approx. 280+ words on each page as my writing is rather in small font. Total word count should be approx. 2500-2700.

1. Introduction
- What is democracy?
- A birdeye view of democracy and it's comparison
- Different democratic systems

2. History of Democracy in Pakistan
- Civil governments and disagreements
- Military Interventions and dismemberment of Pakistan
- Back on track since 2008 elections
- 2013 elections and emergence of third political power
- Current scenario

3. Importance of Democracy - Reasons
*Social and Political
- Gives people awareness about their rights
- Voice to weak people
- Representatives are aware of their responsibilities and duties
- Democratic values like freedom of expression, tolerance, pluralism, justice and equality prevail
- Freedom of expression leads to innovation through exchange of ideas

*Economic
- Political stability helps develop economy
- Presents better image to the world, helps in trade
- Can help to curb menaces like unemployment, poverty and illiteracy

4. Democracy in Pakistan: Hurdles
*Administrative
- Corruption and mismanagement
- Nepotism, Favoritism
- Red tapism
- Conflicts among provincial and federal governments

*Political
- Military interventions
- Political immaturity
- Self interests and conflicts
- No independent judiciary

*Social
- Masses not aware about power of their vote
- Votes are given based on ethnical or racial affiliations
- Feudals can influence the poor people for votes

*Religious
- Forgotten teachings of Islam
- Votes are given on basis of religious affiliations
- Religion is used by leaders and scholars to get votes

*Legal and Educational
- Laws are twisted by leaders for their self interests
- Leaders are not educated or trained enough
- Laymam is not educated about their rights

5. Hopes for Democracy in Pakistan: Suggestions
- Empowering Institutions
- No corruption
- Enchanced role of NAB
- No military interventions
- Educating masses about their rights and responsibilies (including politicians)
- Independent Judiciary
- Developing culture of democracy
- Political maturity
- Taking inspirations from the developed democracies of the world
- Taking inspirations from the teachings of Islam

6. Conclusion
- Pakistan is a young democracy
- It will get better with more time and trial and errors
- Need political will and everyone playing individual and collective roles to secure democratic Pakistan
- No power on earth can undo Pakistan
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So this is it. I must have missed some points to add or may be only one or two might not be wrong here.

I was busy in outline till 10.15am, so had not enough time to write more. I believe as if I still missed something, though my introduction was more than a page bit conclusion just a half page or so. Grammatical and spelling mistakes should be not many, though my hand writing is not amazing. Also, I kept it rather simple than using fancy words.

Overall, I am not sure what will be the outcome but surely could have done better. Unfortunately, did not use quotes or figures as was running short on time, so I just covered almost all points of outline briefly - perhaps missed one or two. :l

Nevertheless, what's done is done and can't do anything about it. Allah Maalik.

Thank you for reading/reviewing and your time.

Good day!
Rather gathering a number of words on justifiying your thoughts, it creates more charm if one pay heeds to quality merely.When write a number of outlines and as a reprisal, one runs short of time in proving all the mentioned outlines, it tarnishes the quality of the essay as a whole because it connotes how timely one has happened to go through the essay.I would suggest to all aspirants always draw as outlines as you seem yourself capabale of proving comprehensively.
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The summary of my outline for this essay is as follows:
Introduction
History of democracy in Pakistan

*Post-independence situation
*Present situation
Future of Democracy in Pakistan
Challenges faced by Democracy in Pakistan
Suggestion to improve democracy in Pakistan
Conclusion

And at 11:55 I had merely finished the portion of challenges. Left the suggestions portion and wrote conclusion in 3-4 lines after which the paper was snatched by invigilators. I was much worried afterwards but surprisingly I got 62 marks in it.
Now moral of the story is that you have to keep your essay in perfect alignment with the topic given. No need to define democracy or its advantage/disadvantages etc like the most candidates do.
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Hi All,

It is my first attempt at CSS. Today's paper was apparently easier but the easiness made it a little more confusing for me because I believe, I could have written on 3-4 of the given topics. But being not very sure about certain facts and figures and some thinking, I went for democratic one. However, seeing that how it is a gamble and we can't really say anything about passing or failing, here's a "rough" outline of my essay for review.

Pages: 3.5 for outline - Pages for Essay: 9.5 (all sides) Approx. 280+ words on each page as my writing is rather in small font. Total word count should be approx. 2500-2700.

1. Introduction
- What is democracy?
- A birdeye view of democracy and it's comparison
- Different democratic systems

2. History of Democracy in Pakistan
- Civil governments and disagreements
- Military Interventions and dismemberment of Pakistan
- Back on track since 2008 elections
- 2013 elections and emergence of third political power
- Current scenario

3. Importance of Democracy - Reasons
*Social and Political
- Gives people awareness about their rights
- Voice to weak people
- Representatives are aware of their responsibilities and duties
- Democratic values like freedom of expression, tolerance, pluralism, justice and equality prevail
- Freedom of expression leads to innovation through exchange of ideas

*Economic
- Political stability helps develop economy
- Presents better image to the world, helps in trade
- Can help to curb menaces like unemployment, poverty and illiteracy

4. Democracy in Pakistan: Hurdles
*Administrative
- Corruption and mismanagement
- Nepotism, Favoritism
- Red tapism
- Conflicts among provincial and federal governments

*Political
- Military interventions
- Political immaturity
- Self interests and conflicts
- No independent judiciary

*Social
- Masses not aware about power of their vote
- Votes are given based on ethnical or racial affiliations
- Feudals can influence the poor people for votes

*Religious
- Forgotten teachings of Islam
- Votes are given on basis of religious affiliations
- Religion is used by leaders and scholars to get votes

*Legal and Educational
- Laws are twisted by leaders for their self interests
- Leaders are not educated or trained enough
- Laymam is not educated about their rights

5. Hopes for Democracy in Pakistan: Suggestions
- Empowering Institutions
- No corruption
- Enchanced role of NAB
- No military interventions
- Educating masses about their rights and responsibilies (including politicians)
- Independent Judiciary
- Developing culture of democracy
- Political maturity
- Taking inspirations from the developed democracies of the world
- Taking inspirations from the teachings of Islam

6. Conclusion
- Pakistan is a young democracy
- It will get better with more time and trial and errors
- Need political will and everyone playing individual and collective roles to secure democratic Pakistan
- No power on earth can undo Pakistan
----

So this is it. I must have missed some points to add or may be only one or two might not be wrong here.

I was busy in outline till 10.15am, so had not enough time to write more. I believe as if I still missed something, though my introduction was more than a page bit conclusion just a half page or so. Grammatical and spelling mistakes should be not many, though my hand writing is not amazing. Also, I kept it rather simple than using fancy words.

Overall, I am not sure what will be the outcome but surely could have done better. Unfortunately, did not use quotes or figures as was running short on time, so I just covered almost all points of outline briefly - perhaps missed one or two. :l

Nevertheless, what's done is done and can't do anything about it. Allah Maalik.

Thank you for reading/reviewing and your time.

Good day!

How much did you manage to score in this essay?
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Hi Bakr,

Unfortunately, 30. I was really hoping to do well in it. I really think it was my hand writing towards the end (2-4 pages) which gave it away.

I did really well in Precis & Comp. and truth be told I didn't even prepare for it. Or for many other subjects which includes Eco, Business and Journalism & Criminology (took first time).

Wish you luck, need a lot of practice. I did it with a full time job, 6 days a week. So, it's doable. Just need to put your head to it.

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