Please Comment on my Outline,, I attempted in my last CSS Attempt

highly uploaded · #1 Sunday, February 18, 2018

Thanks for stopping by and reviewing my outline... This is my last attempt, , I did cleared essay last time in 2016 & failed in P&C...

The Emerging Power of Social Media: Prospects & Problems

1. Introduction.
2. Understanding Social Media.
3. How power of Social Media emerged?
4. How much power Social Media has?
5. Prospects of Social Media; as
a. Social Media; as medium of self-fulfillment, self-esteem, an ultimate tool of socialization & building public opinion.
b. A marketing tool for businessmen.
c. A source for society to ventilate grievances.
d. Shares role of opposition.
e. Can press govt. to act, postpone or suspend a course of action.
f. Sets benchmark for policy makers.
g. Employment pool.
6. Suggestions to regulate Social Media in right direction.
7. Problem of Social Media.
a. Cultural invasion.
b. Loneliness & isolation.
c. Depression.
d. Elevated exasperation.
e. Deteriorated patience.
f. Declining writing skills.
g. Moral devaluation.
8. Conclusion.

mrdon · #2 Sunday, February 18, 2018

Its brilliant!
One question; why did you write suggestions?

Cotton candy · #3 Sunday, February 18, 2018

I have a question. Was it okay to write less on 'problems' ?

Or it was must to write equally on both prospects and problems.

mrdon · #4 Sunday, February 18, 2018

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Originally Posted by Cotton candy

I have a question. Was it okay to write less on 'problems' ?

Or it was must to write equally on both prospects and problems.

I believe these two "prospects" and "problems" should be almost equal as both are to be described well.

Thanks!

Anum Zara · #5 Sunday, February 18, 2018

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Originally Posted by highly uploaded

Thanks for stopping by and reviewing my outline... This is my last attempt, , I did cleared essay last time in 2016 & failed in P&C...

The Emerging Power of Social Media: Prospects & Problems

1. Introduction.
2. Understanding Social Media.
3. How power of Social Media emerged?
4. How much power Social Media has?
5. Prospects of Social Media; as
a. Social Media; as medium of self-fulfillment, self-esteem, an ultimate tool of socialization & building public opinion.
b. A marketing tool for businessmen.
c. A source for society to ventilate grievances.
d. Shares role of opposition.
e. Can press govt. to act, postpone or suspend a course of action.
f. Sets benchmark for policy makers.
g. Employment pool.
6. Suggestions to regulate Social Media in right direction.
7. Problem of Social Media.
a. Cultural invasion.
b. Loneliness & isolation.
c. Depression.
d. Elevated exasperation.
e. Deteriorated patience.
f. Declining writing skills.
g. Moral devaluation.
8. Conclusion.

It is good. Just one thing I want to mention is that you have written suggestions before problems. Suggestions were required but after problems. Media is not moving in right direction and that is a problem. Suggestion to set media on track should have come after discussing the problems. Moreover, you have dedicated only one paragraph for suggestions. You should have given at least five suggestions. After discussing problems, suggestions or recommendations are expected even in ordinary examinations.
Overall a good attempt. If introduction and conclusion was convincing, well justified and to the point, writing was neat and there were no spelling and grammatical mistakes, you deserve at least passing marks.

wasxxm · #6 Monday, February 19, 2018

One paragraph of suggestions is alright; it is just misplaced.

mrdon · #7 Monday, February 19, 2018

Yes, one paragraph is not bad, but could have been avoided. Actually, when one needs to show both the sides of certain technology etc then it is not preferable to suggest something as it is not a problematic essay. But, this one paragraph does not look a hurdle in passing.
Thanks!

highly uploaded · #8 Monday, February 19, 2018

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Originally Posted by Anum Zara

It is good. Just one thing I want to mention is that you have written suggestions before problems. Suggestions were required but after problems. Media is not moving in right direction and that is a problem. Suggestion to set media on track should have come after discussing the problems. Moreover, you have dedicated only one paragraph for suggestions. You should have given at least five suggestions. After discussing problems, suggestions or recommendations are expected even in ordinary examinations.
Overall a good attempt. If introduction and conclusion was convincing, well justified and to the point, writing was neat and there were no spelling and grammatical mistakes, you deserve at least passing marks.

I am well aware of suggestions part,,, as most of essays it is placed right before conclusion mostly,,, But I wrote suggestions immediately after prospects because it is well aligned with prospects,, I found it a little odd to mention after problems.. I confined suggestion bullet in one paragraph by mentioning its direction in it, I thought it would have some leverage,,. I almost posted 1900 words, while last time I wrote around 1600 to 1700 max,, I got 42...

Anum Zara · #9 Monday, February 19, 2018

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Originally Posted by highly uploaded

I am well aware of suggestions part,,, as most of essays it is placed right before conclusion mostly,,, But I wrote suggestions immediately after prospects because it is well aligned with prospects,, I found it a little odd to mention after problems.. I confined suggestion bullet in one paragraph by mentioning its direction in it, I thought it would have some leverage,,. I almost posted 1900 words, while last time I wrote around 1600 to 1700 max,, I got 42...

Your outline is totally relevant and to the point. Suggestion part is extra and can only be written at end if someone has time. In general practice, teachers advice to write suggestions if problems are asked. Likewise, if suggestions are asked, it is a hidden requirement to mention causes and impacts. No idea about words. Last time, I wrote around 20 pages and got 57 in essay without any preparation or practice. This year, I have done the same with some improvements.

highly uploaded · #10 Monday, February 19, 2018

Thanks all for having a look at my outline,,,, I really am thankful...
The one paragraph of Suggestions, is I placed there because it resembled with PROSPECTS, since they are also potential predictions, hence suggestions suited them well,,, However, placement of recommendations & suggestions are suitable at end but they can be placed if deemed fit any where I guess. If some one deem its placement irrelevant or unnecessary than I guess they should not be included at the first placed.., Well its my opinion, as Essay is all about opinion expression,,, Thanks again

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