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Topic: China Pakistan Economic Corridor and its socioeconomic implications for the region and the world

A. Introduction

CPEC is 3200 km long road network that connect China’s western hinterland with deap sea port at Gawadar. The project provides China with an opportunity to export its surplus production and also export its ‘Chinese values’. To Pakistan, it provides the much needed economic respite.

B. Socio economic implications for Pakistan
a. $62 billion investment unprecedented in Pakistan’s history
b. Energy crisis in Pakistan and $35 billion investment in energy sector
c. CPEC: countering unemployment and youth bulge
d. Historic opportunity to mainstream Balochistan and FATA
c. GDP growth and FDI

C. Socioeconomic implications for China
a. China is facing three major problems
i. Continued underdevelopment and rising intolerance in western China
ii. Excess industrial capacity
iii. Surplus of production
b. Migration issue in China and CPEC
c. China wants to export its ‘Chinese values’
d. China as a future soft power house
e. Deepening cultural ties between China and Pakistan

D. Implications for the region
a. India has been the fiercest critic of CPEC
b. Reasons why India opposes CPEC are economic
i. Stronger economic Pakistan will be more assertive on Kashmir
ii. It will spend more on military
iii. It will be less inclined to cooperate with India
c. India’s dream of regional dominance will see a setback
d. Regional countries more willing to cooperate with China than India
e. Pakistan will be strong in SAARC
f. Chabahar port will be facing a fierce competition
g. Gawadar deep sea port and Chinese presence will threaten India’s interests
h. China will get much needed respite from Strait of Mallaca

E. Implications for the World
a. China’s rise and growing regional influence makes US apprehensive
b. China’s presence at Gawadar and Strait of Hormuz, main US supply line
c. China integration with Europe through BRI and CPEC

F. Conclusion

[QUOTE=LouisXIV;1074589]Topic: China Pakistan Economic Corridor and its socioeconomic implications for the region and the world

A. Introduction

CPEC is 3200 km long road network that connect China’s western hinterland with deap sea port at Gawadar. The project provides China with an opportunity to export its surplus production and also export its ‘Chinese values’. To Pakistan, it provides the much needed economic respite.

B. Socio economic implications for Pakistan
a. $62 billion investment unprecedented in Pakistan’s history
b. Energy crisis in Pakistan and $35 billion investment in energy sector
c. CPEC: countering unemployment and youth bulge
d. Historic opportunity to mainstream Balochistan and FATA
c. GDP growth and FDI

C. Socioeconomic implications for China
a. China is facing three major problems
i. Continued underdevelopment and rising intolerance in western China
ii. Excess industrial capacity
iii. Surplus of production
b. Migration issue in China and CPEC
c. China wants to export its ‘Chinese values’
d. China as a future soft power house
e. Deepening cultural ties between China and Pakistan

D. Implications for the region
a. India has been the fiercest critic of CPEC
b. Reasons why India opposes CPEC are economic
i. Stronger economic Pakistan will be more assertive on Kashmir
ii. It will spend more on military
iii. It will be less inclined to cooperate with India
c. India’s dream of regional dominance will see a setback
d. Regional countries more willing to cooperate with China than India
e. Pakistan will be strong in SAARC
f. Chabahar port will be facing a fierce competition
g. Gawadar deep sea port and Chinese presence will threaten India’s interests
h. China will get much needed respite from Strait of Mallaca

E. Implications for the World
a. China’s rise and growing regional influence makes US apprehensive
b. China’s presence at Gawadar and Strait of Hormuz, main US supply line
c. China integration with Europe through BRI and CPEC

F. Conclusion[/QUOTE]

Hello,
You have made a great effort in writing this outline, but there are some shortcomings in it.
1. Try to make some heading more general.
2. Add other points, such as regional connectivity, economic development in the region, possible strengthening of social bonds.
3. Your entire outline is focused more on China and a few dimensions, such as China's rise, than anything else.
4. Connect Gawadar, Strait of Hormuz with economic implications for the region and the world.

[QUOTE=LouisXIV;1074589]Topic: China Pakistan Economic Corridor and its socioeconomic implications for the region and the world

A. Introduction

CPEC is 3200 km long road network that connect China’s western hinterland with deap sea port at Gawadar. The project provides China with an opportunity to export its surplus production and also export its ‘Chinese values’. To Pakistan, it provides the much needed economic respite.

B. Socio economic implications for Pakistan
a. $62 billion investment unprecedented in Pakistan’s history
b. Energy crisis in Pakistan and $35 billion investment in energy sector
c. CPEC: countering unemployment and youth bulge
d. Historic opportunity to mainstream Balochistan and FATA
c. GDP growth and FDI

C. Socioeconomic implications for China
a. China is facing three major problems
i. Continued underdevelopment and rising intolerance in western China
ii. Excess industrial capacity
iii. Surplus of production
b. Migration issue in China and CPEC
c. China wants to export its ‘Chinese values’
d. China as a future soft power house
e. Deepening cultural ties between China and Pakistan

D. Implications for the region
a. India has been the fiercest critic of CPEC
b. Reasons why India opposes CPEC are economic
i. Stronger economic Pakistan will be more assertive on Kashmir
ii. It will spend more on military
iii. It will be less inclined to cooperate with India
c. India’s dream of regional dominance will see a setback
d. Regional countries more willing to cooperate with China than India
e. Pakistan will be strong in SAARC
f. Chabahar port will be facing a fierce competition
g. Gawadar deep sea port and Chinese presence will threaten India’s interests
h. China will get much needed respite from Strait of Mallaca

E. Implications for the World
a. China’s rise and growing regional influence makes US apprehensive
b. China’s presence at Gawadar and Strait of Hormuz, main US supply line
c. China integration with Europe through BRI and CPEC

F. Conclusion[/QUOTE]
well, one who has studied cpec in detail will guide you better however my analysis on the basis what i have learnt from newspaper/news channels

1. 2nd point was required to be made in waht is cpec? BRI and total 6 no of corridors. cpec is one of them,
2. connectivity for what? why? mode of connectivity ( roads, rail, sail)
3. why pakistan is part of corridor? pak geo location, strategic value should have been discussed
4. investment by whom? chinese investors and the point of loan etc is found missing
5. pakistan govt steps for cpec

6. socio economics inplication for pak
economic activity, investment, industial zone, emoloyment, gdp improvement, infrasturcture, cultures sharing etc were not discusssed

internal reservations of provinces, political parties, role of parliament etc were ignored

7, implication for region world was not properly highlighted

8. impact of treaty/ int laws

9. propagation and rebuttal by pak govt

many other points should have been discussed.

in my view, your outline is 50/50 but chances of paasing the paper still exist. giving analysis for your other attempts and improvement.
allah apko kamyab kray.

[QUOTE=GanXTeR;1074620]well, one who has studied cpec in detail will guide you better however my analysis on the basis what i have learnt from newspaper/news channels

1. 2nd point was required to be made in waht is cpec? BRI and total 6 no of corridors. cpec is one of them,
2. connectivity for what? why? mode of connectivity ( roads, rail, sail)
3. why pakistan is part of corridor? pak geo location, strategic value should have been discussed
4. investment by whom? chinese investors and the point of loan etc is found missing
5. pakistan govt steps for cpec

6. socio economics inplication for pak
economic activity, investment, industial zone, emoloyment, gdp improvement, infrasturcture, cultures sharing etc were not discusssed

internal reservations of provinces, political parties, role of parliament etc were ignored

7, implication for region world was not properly highlighted

8. impact of treaty/ int laws

9. propagation and rebuttal by pak govt

many other points should have been discussed.

in my view, your outline is 50/50 but chances of paasing the paper still exist. giving analysis for your other attempts and improvement.
allah apko kamyab kray.[/QUOTE]
Well, I have absolutely discussed more or less each and every point that you mentioned above. The point ia that if I follow your way, my pointers in outline would not remain pointers - they would become paras.

Pointers in outline can only explain too much - but not everything. In fact the few points that you have added here are redundant. There is no need at all for the last two points in particular.

[QUOTE=thetiktik;1074616]Hello,
You have made a great effort in writing this outline, but there are some shortcomings in it.
1. Try to make some heading more general.
2. Add other points, such as regional connectivity, economic development in the region, possible strengthening of social bonds.
3. Your entire outline is focused more on China and a few dimensions, such as China's rise, than anything else.
4. Connect Gawadar, Strait of Hormuz with economic implications for the region and the world.[/QUOTE]
Thank you for your response.

Well, on point 2, there literally was no direct regional connectivity or economic implication for the region per se back in February when I was writing this essay. I like your point that this essay is more focused on China.

Do you think this is a passable attempt?