This type of Introductions are acceptable or not ?
 

I do not know if this type of introduction in Essay is acceptable or not in CSS, kindly correct me. I made 40 outlines, and I don't have any prior knowledge regarding this topic and it is my first ever attempt and I want to receive honest feedback so I can correct my mistakes. Also, I am trying to improve my English as well, so do let me know If I miss sentence structure or any grammatical mistake.
Thanks in advance.

[B]CSS Essay 2018-
Too many of us are not living our dreams because we are living our Fears:[/B]
[B]Sample 1:[/B]
Peace is the most essential ingredient of life. World desire peace and harmony. Humans are peace-loving creatures of nature. Humans are social animals so they love to live together. In past, as clans or tribes. The group of people, with similarities, form the clan or tribe. But in present, they are divided on the behalf of the country they reside. Humans, on the behalf of their country, call themselves as a nation. The word "Nation" is initially a European concept and was first introduced to differentiate between the students of different universities. But later this word gained popularity and people of different backgrounds living in the same country called themselves as a nation. Now, as they live together under a single umbrella of the country in a vast majority, not knowing each other but having the same feelings of patriotism. They feel united, and take the problems of other parts of the country seriously as if it is their own problems. When the population rises, problems also rise. Now, as a nation, they share the same love or fear which come in contact with their country. Now the circle of fear is growing and every citizen wants his country to be peaceful and successful. That is why nations are competing against each other, beyond ethics. Though human being was created a single entity or call it as a nation by nature. But Now, they are divided into different nations of their own. Few nations are friendliest and other are deadliest. In a world like this, nations form groups with mutual understanding to compete with other nation. These competitions divide them further into a group of allies versus the group of enemies. Countries forms coalitions of military support to encounter their enemy country. Hence, dividing nations into the further group of nations with mutual understanding of different nations. These groups of nations, which call themselves friends or allies sees other nations as their bitter enemy and they try every possible way to sabotage and destabilize their competitor beyond ethics. This is the never-ending game, as it is our history. Dreamers are looking for peace around the world not realizing that dreams are made to be broken. Those who dream about world peace are actually fooling themselves. Life is the name of struggle, from cradle to grave. And still, too many of us are not living the life of fears but of dreams. Because in dreams, everything is controllable but in real life, you are not even the sailor of your own boat. To sum up, the above-mentioned dialogues let us say that dreams are the place of easiness whereas life is really full of hurdles. Including fear of terrorism, pollution, foreign invasions, basic life necessities, inflation, unemployment, and much more fear of life.

[B]Sample 2:[/B]
Peace is the most essential ingredient of life. The whole world desires peace and harmony. Humans are peace-loving creatures of nature and social animals so they love to live together, especially in the past, as clans or tribes. A group of people, with similarities, will form a clan or tribe. But in the present day, they are divided into the realm of the country they reside in. Humans, on the behalf of their country, call themselves as a nation. The word "nation" is initially a European concept and was first introduced to differentiate between the students of different universities. But later this word gained popularity and people of different backgrounds living in the same country called themselves a nation.Now, as they live together under a single umbrella of the country in a vast majority, not knowing each other but having the same feelings of patriotism. They feel united, and take the problems of other parts of the country seriously as if it is their own problems. When the population rises, problems also rise. Now, as a nation, they share the same love or fear which come in contact with their country. Now the circle of fear is growing and every citizen wants their country to be peaceful and successful. That is why nations are competing against each other, beyond ethics. Though the human being was created a single entity or call it as a nation by nature. But now, they are divided into different nations of their own. Some nations are the friendliest while others can be deadly. In a world like this, nations form groups with mutual understanding to compete with other nation. These competitions divide them further into a group of allies versus the group of enemies. Countries forms coalitions of military support to encounter their enemy country. Hence, dividing nations into the further group of nations with the mutual understanding of different nations. These groups of nations, which call themselves friends or allies see other nations as their bitter enemy and they try every possible way to sabotage and destabilize their competitor beyond ethics. This is the never-ending game and it is our history. Dreamers are looking for peace around the world not realizing that dreams are made to be broken. Those who dream about world peace are actually fooling themselves. Life is the name of struggle, from cradle to grave. And still, too many of us are not living a life of fears but of dreams, because in dreams, everything is controllable.

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