Classrooms decide the future of the nation. Essay 2019 attempt
 

[COLOR="black"][B]Topic[/B][/COLOR]: Classrooms decide the future of the nation

[COLOR="Black"][B]Thesis Statement:[/B][/COLOR] Education is responsible for the success of a nation, as it influences the socio-cultural, political and commercial development of the nation.

[COLOR="black"][B]Outline[/B][/COLOR]:


1. Introduction
2. Philosophy of John Dewey on Education
3. Education and Social Development [LIST][*]i. Development of Critical Thinking [*] ii. Curb on Extremism[*] iii. Rights of Women [*] iv. Moral and Civic Sense[*] v. Diversity of Professions[/LIST]4. Role of Education in Political and Administrative Sphere[LIST][*]i. Democracy Flourishes [*] ii. Rule of Law[*] iii. Meritocracy[/LIST]5. Relation of Education with Economic Sector [LIST][*]i. Equal Opportunities for all [*] ii. Environment Protection[/LIST]6. Conclusion



[COLOR="black"][B]Comments[/B][/COLOR]: Wrote around 1800-1900 words essay. I had 4-5 more points which I couldn't add due to the shortage of time. Please evaluate.

overall good effort but point #4 and its parts need some editing/altering not seems appropriate match of main topic
its my personal opinion
and on point #2 reference of john dewey .....hands up:bow

your pass/fail depend on luck
I give you 47 marks on this.

tell me size of essay?

Thanks for your opinion.

The size was around 1800-1900 words.

please check this outline.
Class rooms decide the future of the nation.
outine
1-introduction
importance of education
2-how classrooms decide the future of the nation?
a-development of society
b-rule of law
c-awareness among the masses
d-poverty alleviation
e-critical analysis of government policies
f-participation in electoral process
g-unity in society
h-positive image on global forums
3-Pakistan a case study/situation in Pakistan
a-outdated syllabus
b-lack of attention
c-flawed policies
d-low budget allocation
e-poverty
f-lack of institutions+lack of facilities
g-English a double edged sword
h-different curriculum
untrained teachers
4- way forward/ suggestions
5-conclusion

Siddiqui
I think it is a very nice essay. Mine was also along the same lines. just two or three points here there. But mine did not have sub-divisions like yours.
If you have written good Intro and okay paragraphs, I think you'll get through.

[QUOTE=Maria The Chemist;1086985]overall good effort but point #4 and its parts need some editing/altering not seems appropriate match of main topic
its my personal opinion
and on point #2 reference of john dewey .....hands up:bow

your pass/fail depend on luck
I give you 47 marks on this.

tell me size of essay?[/QUOTE]

Please evaluate this one:

TOPIC: CLASSROOMS DECIDE THE FUTURE OF THE NATION:

OUTLINE:
1. Introduction
(i) Classrooms as representation of formal education
(ii) What is formal education?
(iii) Relationship between the future of the nation and the formal education

2. How Classrooms Decide the Future of the Nation

(i) Formal education imparts unity which is essential for prosperous future of nation
(ii) Economic progress of the nation depends on its formal education through classrooms
(iii) Scientific development as backbone for the bright future of nation is achievable through formal education through classrooms
(iv) Formal education imparts rational approach
(v) Classroom education decide the tolerance level of the nation which decides its future
(vi) Poverty percentage decides the future of the nation which depends on formal education
(vii) Political stability of the nation requires literate masses
(viii) Extremism in the nation depends on the performance of the educational institutes which decides the future of the nation
(ix) Formal education as weapon against social evils to ensure prosperous future of the nation
(x) Formal education decides the cultural outlook of the nation
(xi) Formal education through class room develops the counter-narrative during hybrid warfare

3. How to improve the formal education in Pakistan for its bright future
(i) Vibrant educational policy
(ii) Curb on plagiarism for higher education
(iii) Revision of the curriculum
(iv) Training of teachers
(v) Enhancing the educational budget

4. Conclusion

[QUOTE=White horse;1090235]Please evaluate this one:

TOPIC: CLASSROOMS DECIDE THE FUTURE OF THE NATION:

OUTLINE:
1. Introduction
(i) Classrooms as representation of formal education
(ii) What is formal education?
(iii) Relationship between the future of the nation and the formal education

2. How Classrooms Decide the Future of the Nation

(i) Formal education imparts unity which is essential for prosperous future of nation
(ii) Economic progress of the nation depends on its formal education through classrooms
(iii) Scientific development as backbone for the bright future of nation is achievable through formal education through classrooms
(iv) Formal education imparts rational approach
(v) Classroom education decide the tolerance level of the nation which decides its future
(vi) Poverty percentage decides the future of the nation which depends on formal education
(vii) Political stability of the nation requires literate masses
(viii) Extremism in the nation depends on the performance of the educational institutes which decides the future of the nation
(ix) Formal education as weapon against social evils to ensure prosperous future of the nation
(x) Formal education decides the cultural outlook of the nation
(xi) Formal education through class room develops the counter-narrative during hybrid warfare

3. How to improve the formal education in Pakistan for its bright future
(i) Vibrant educational policy
(ii) Curb on plagiarism for higher education
(iii) Revision of the curriculum
(iv) Training of teachers
(v) Enhancing the educational budget

4. Conclusion[/QUOTE].

It is indeed a good outline. It seems relevant and connecting. It should pass. One thing, in my opinion, that the essay should include is the role of teachers. Nevertheless, it is good.







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Essay
 

[QUOTE=White horse;1090235]Please evaluate this one:

TOPIC: CLASSROOMS DECIDE THE FUTURE OF THE NATION:

OUTLINE:
1. Introduction
(i) Classrooms as representation of formal education
(ii) What is formal education?
(iii) Relationship between the future of the nation and the formal education

2. How Classrooms Decide the Future of the Nation

(i) Formal education imparts unity which is essential for prosperous future of nation
(ii) Economic progress of the nation depends on its formal education through classrooms
(iii) Scientific development as backbone for the bright future of nation is achievable through formal education through classrooms
(iv) Formal education imparts rational approach
(v) Classroom education decide the tolerance level of the nation which decides its future
(vi) Poverty percentage decides the future of the nation which depends on formal education
(vii) Political stability of the nation requires literate masses
(viii) Extremism in the nation depends on the performance of the educational institutes which decides the future of the nation
(ix) Formal education as weapon against social evils to ensure prosperous future of the nation
(x) Formal education decides the cultural outlook of the nation
(xi) Formal education through class room develops the counter-narrative during hybrid warfare

3. How to improve the formal education in Pakistan for its bright future
(i) Vibrant educational policy
(ii) Curb on plagiarism for higher education
(iii) Revision of the curriculum
(iv) Training of teachers
(v) Enhancing the educational budget

4. Conclusion[/QUOTE]

Your essay seems to be the right reflection of topic...
Wish you best of luck

Some candidates have focused on classrooms while some have talked about the role of education in deciding a nation’s future in a general sense. I request members to comment if any of these interpretations can get passing marks or is one wrong and the other right.

Hi. I think it is safe to say that this topic “Classrooms decide the future of the nation” was one of those topics that was chosen by a large number of candidates in CSS 2019. I have seen numerous outlines on this topic and observed that while some candidates have focused strictly on classrooms and what they entail, others have written on the role of education in a broader sense. I, myself, fall in the category of those who have written on education’s role in deciding a nations social/political/economic future with not too much focus on the word ‘classrooms’.

I request members to express their thoughts on whether one could have chosen either of these directions for this essay or a specific focus on ‘classrooms’ was required.