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Evaluation of Outline
Assalaum o Alaikum! Seniors kindly give a feedback on this outline. Topic is "Crisis of health governance in Pakistan".
Outline A)Introduction Thesis Statement: Although there had been many developments carried out by various governments/decision makers to achieve national health objectives in Pakistan, however, the state of governance in the health sector of Pakistan is still in crisis and needs uplifting. B) What is Health governance? i) Definition and basic elements of health governance ii) Role of governance in the health sector iii) Health governance and the changing dynamics C) Health governance in Pakistan i) Historical perspective ii) Evolving structure of health governance and the present scenario iii) The pre-devolution and post-devolution scenario D) How the crisis emerged in Pakistan? i) Weak health governance and monitoring system ii) Political interference led to the death of meritocracy in health governance iii) Lack of human and material resources iv) Population explosion led to a double BOD(Burden of disease) E) Impact of health governance crisis i) Low rates of health indicators in the country ii) Inability to sustain the influx of patients during pandemics iii) Inefficient healthcare delivery system F) How can the crisis be controlled? i) Health financing to improve management system ii) Increasing the infrastructure available for healthcare ii) Improving the efficiency of monitoring and control system iii) Improving health services delivery system iv) Introducing health information systems v) HR reforms to strengthen health institutions vi) Cross sectoral action for advancing health G) Conclusion Sent from my SM-G610F using Tapatalk |
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Second, "B) What is Health governance? i) Definition and basic elements of health governance ii) Role of governance in the health sector iii) Health governance and the changing dynamics" just a simple paragraph will suffice definition. Going in such explanations make essay less interesting, since checker already know what is a definition of the topic. Besides, B-iii seems not to be its sub-heading. It feels more like a separate heading, so you can either make it separate heading or find it a right placement. Third, "C) Health governance in Pakistan i) Historical perspective ii) Evolving structure of health governance and the present scenario iii) The pre-devolution and post-devolution scenario" sub-headings i andii are fine but iii has semblance with above two. You can cut it out/rephrase. I suggest brief historical overview will suffice rather than detail. Most importantly, after this heading you must not go to, "D) How the crisis emerged in Pakistan?"(causes), instead as mentioned in your thesis statement,"...however, the state of governance in the health sector of Pakistan is still in crisis and needs uplifting." You must emphasize to prove how still it is in crisis, i.e., give arguments. That is a core of your essay. Because you have driven assessor (in the thesis statement) to look for arguments that health governance is in crisis. Include those (core) arguments in you outline than expanding definitions or history. Fourth, certain sub-headings in "D" causes are ambiguous need to be rephrased to be more clear, for instance, "Weak health governance and monitoring system." Fifth, add more arguments to the impacts. Essay must be balanced throughout. Hope it helps! |
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Silvia Rose (Sunday, May 17, 2020) |
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Thank you for your kind insight. I will try to improve these things in my future outlines. Meanwhile, can you please evaluate this outline as well? I know it is alot to ask from you but I hope that you are kind enough to have a look at it.
Outline A) Introduction Thesis Statement: Although there are many factors upon which the future of a nation is dependent, however, classrooms play an indispensable role in deciding the future of a nation B) What are the factors that influence the future of a nation? i) Economic development and economic growth ii) Smart use of natural resources iii) The nature of Institutions within the country iv) The factor of culture- v) Geographical location and history vi) The factor of ideology C) How classrooms decide the future of a nation? i) Development of social skills ii) Classrooms impart critical thinking iii) Classrooms develop a moral and civic sense iv) Classrooms help in curbing extremism v) Enhancement of self-esteem and self-confidence vi) National values are taught to promote patriotism vii) A healthy learning environment for students D) How classrooms can be made to function properly i) A dynamic educational policy ii) Well trained teachers and professionals iii) Increased budget share for education iv) A comprehensive and up-to-date curriculum E) Conclusion Sent from my SM-G610F using Tapatalk |
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The topic is, "Classrooms decide the future of a nation."
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Secondly, before going to "C) How classrooms decide the future of a nation?" you should construe what do you mean by classrooms. It must be clear to a reader that on what grounds you are going to approach the topic. That will narrow down your topic and add sense to your arguments. Certain headings can be rephrased, i.e., "Development of social skills" (socialization),"Enhancement of self-esteem and self-confidence" (Enhance self-confidence)... "ii) Classrooms impart critical thinking iii) Classrooms develop a moral and civic sense iv) Classrooms help in curbing extremism" (you have already mentioned Classrooms in your main heading so avoid repetition in sub-headings. It effects expression). P.S. for next essay (outlines) reviews/practice use this following thread i have made for all. It will be convenient and accessible to all of us: http://www.cssforum.com.pk/css-compu...ml#post1110558 |
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Silvia Rose (Monday, May 18, 2020) |
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Thank you so much!
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