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siddiquiali Thursday, August 26, 2021 09:03 PM

[QUOTE=kinzakhokher;1122816]Pros and Cons of Globalization: Introduction
Apple, an American multinational technology company, launched its new “iPhone 12 series” in 2020. Within 7 months, it reached in the hands of more than a hundred million users. On the other hand, a novel coronavirus erupted in China in 2019 and soon reached every part of the world. With more than 200 million people infected, the coronavirus evolved from an epidemic into a pandemic within a short span of time. What caused this remarkable increase in iPhone’s sales and Coronavirus cases in such a short span of time? Indeed, it was the interconnectedness provided by globalization which has exhibited its merits and demerits over the time. Since globalization is a natural process and has continued to affect human life for ages, the profound impacts of this phenomenon over the human civilization can be observed clearly. It has integrated people in social, cultural, political, economic and technological domains. People are now socially more connected, culturally more tolerant, politically more aware, economically more progressed and technologically more advanced. Interpersonal communication, cultural understanding, political cooperation, international organizations, global economic boost and scientific revolution are some of the commendable achievements of globalization. However, all that glitters is not gold. Amid the rapid growth and overall progress, the dangerous repercussions of globalization were ignored which later manifested themselves. The globalized world is more vulnerable to socio-economic disparities, cyber security threats, political and cultural exploitation and climate and health-related risks because of its interconnectedness. Hence, Globalization is a rose which has benefited millions with its charm of social interaction, cultural harmony, economic development, global cooperation and technological boom but it comes with thorns of social inequalities, economic and political exploitation, cyber security threats, climate change and global health risks. The prospects are, however, far brighter than the repercussions.[/QUOTE]

This is a good introduction. I think you need to improve the last line. The last line of the intro is supposed to be the thesis statement.

Prosparynaa Thursday, August 26, 2021 09:31 PM

It does. Thankyou so much.[/RIGHT][/B][/B][QUOTE=The dream of rain;1122882]first, give space between headings and subheadings so they can be read easily.

You could have added how brain feel appreciated and comparison of heart and mind appreciations. (To give it a bit of literary touch or not). Add some social, political and intellectual causes, most of the given are economic ones
Hope it helps![/QUOTE]

kinzakhokher Wednesday, September 01, 2021 11:32 AM

Please tell me if it is safe to start the introduction with a quote? And also if this is the right way to introduce a quote in writing?
Introduction: “Do not waste water even if you were at a running stream.”
“Thousands have lived without love, not one without water.” These words of W.H Auden, a famous English poet, accentuate the importance of water for life. Water is precious as it is the most essential natural resource for survival of life on Earth. Although water is present on two-thirds of the Earth’s surface, only fresh water can be used for activities of living organisms. Surprisingly, fresh water is only 3% of the total water present. Moreover, the access to fresh water is not uniform all over the world. With rising demand for water and excessive exploitation of fresh water, the natural reserves of water are depleting. Water shortages in many regions, including Pakistan are testimony to this fact. In such a scenario, wastage of water can have disastrous repercussions for the present as well as future generations. It can intensify water scarcity eventually leading to food deficiency, poor sanitation, high costs of living and destruction of natural habitats. Therefore, conservation of water is not only important for one’s own self but also for have-nots and for coming generations. Water must not be wasted as it is already scarce in many regions with depleting reserves all over the world. The biggest contribution towards saving water for contemporaries and future generations can be made by simply not wasting it. Wasting water would simply mean wasting life.

sundas88 Wednesday, September 01, 2021 01:01 PM

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kinzakhokher Wednesday, September 01, 2021 02:06 PM

Please check this outline as well.
 
Gender equality is a myth!
Outline:
I. Introduction
Thesis statement:
Gender equality is not a myth in the modern world rather it is achievable in an inclusive and participatory society with equitable standards and equal opportunities.
II. Why gender equality is considered a myth?
i. Due to biological differences between men and women, people believe that gender equality is not practical.
ii. The presence of a strong patriarchal culture since ages disfavors the prospects of true gender equality.
III. Why there has been gender inequality in the world?
i. Physical strength had been considered the criteria for success in early hunter-gatherer societies which led to male-dominated socio-political structures.
ii. Patriarchal societies offered unequal social, political and economic opportunities to women, resulting in the promotion of gender-based discrimination.
IV. Why gender equality is not a myth?
i. Scientifically, men and women both have equal potential to excel in any field in the modern world.
ii. History is evident that given equal opportunities, women have always performed as good, if not better, as men in all walks of life.
iii. In the modern world, excellence is being determined by character and intellectual prowess rather than physical strength.
iv. Social structures are evolving all over the world with greater acceptance of equal roles of genders.
v. Politics is a level playing field irrespective of gender as it has produced exceptional men and women of equal caliber.
vi. The importance of an inclusive economy with equal participation of both genders has been accentuated for the progress of any country.
V. How gender equality can be achieved?
i. Break typical stereotypes regarding gender roles through gender sensitive education.
ii. Target all forms of discrimination, violence and harmful practices against women through effective policy making.
iii. Ensure provision of equal rights and equal opportunities to encourage participation of women in all spheres of life.
iv. Incentivize female work force to include them in the economic progress of the country.
v. Adopt sound policies and effective legislation for the promotion of gender equality and women empowerment.
VI. Conclusion

The dream of rain Friday, September 03, 2021 09:28 PM

[QUOTE=kinzakhokher;1123057]Gender equality is a myth!
Outline:
I. Introduction
Thesis statement:
Gender equality is not a myth in the modern world rather it is achievable in an inclusive and participatory society with equitable standards and equal opportunities.
II. Why gender equality is considered a myth?
i. Due to biological differences between men and women, people believe that gender equality is not practical.
ii. The presence of a strong patriarchal culture since ages disfavors the prospects of true gender equality.
III. Why there has been gender inequality in the world?
i. Physical strength had been considered the criteria for success in early hunter-gatherer societies which led to male-dominated socio-political structures.
ii. Patriarchal societies offered unequal social, political and economic opportunities to women, resulting in the promotion of gender-based discrimination.
IV. Why gender equality is not a myth?
i. Scientifically, men and women both have equal potential to excel in any field in the modern world.
ii. History is evident that given equal opportunities, women have always performed as good, if not better, as men in all walks of life.
iii. In the modern world, excellence is being determined by character and intellectual prowess rather than physical strength.
iv. Social structures are evolving all over the world with greater acceptance of equal roles of genders.
v. Politics is a level playing field irrespective of gender as it has produced exceptional men and women of equal caliber.
vi. The importance of an inclusive economy with equal participation of both genders has been accentuated for the progress of any country.
V. How gender equality can be achieved?
i. Break typical stereotypes regarding gender roles through gender sensitive education.
ii. Target all forms of discrimination, violence and harmful practices against women through effective policy making.
iii. Ensure provision of equal rights and equal opportunities to encourage participation of women in all spheres of life.
iv. Incentivize female work force to include them in the economic progress of the country.
v. Adopt sound policies and effective legislation for the promotion of gender equality and women empowerment.
VI. Conclusion[/QUOTE]


Though its a good attempt, content need more work. Add more points in "why its a myth." And the argument that "political is level playing field..." rules out the face that there are more men in politics than women.. Women also faces barriers in various aspects just to enter... Add more concrete arguments in both.

It will be better to write one liner/short sentences in the outline, makes it easier to convey.

Keep practicing!

hope it helps!

Haseeb U Saturday, September 04, 2021 03:01 AM

Brains, Like Hearts, Go Where They are Appreciated
 
[B]Introduction:[/B]
Artists, having completed their pieces of art, wish to present them to the public. They go through a fulfilling experience once their art is appreciated and acknowledged. Picasso drew because the masses would flock to his expos. The Beatles would sing because thousands would fill their concerts. Ghalib would write because the Palace would look forward to his recitals every Friday. The same is true for doctors, scientists, engineers, architects and other professionals who carry in them any art. While people may not flock to watch a doctor treating his patient, the appreciation is showed in other ways that include, but are not limited to, good monetary compensation, high regard in the society, or acknowledgement by the state, society and media. It is thus that talented professionals aspire to fly to European or North-American countries where their talent is more likely to be appreciated- financially and socially. Dr. Zia Ur Rahman, the first Civil Engineer to design a 30-story high-rise, had to prove his mettle in the U.S. after Bangladesh failed to recognize his creative potential. Dr. Abdul Salam, having failed to attract appreciation from the Government of Pakistan, left for Zurich only to receive a Nobel Prize in Physics. Had the same appreciation and support been given to the aforementioned individuals in Pakistan, the country would have retained them and benefitted from their creative potential. It would be unfair to lay the responsibility solely over the state since the society, too, has a great role to play in supporting, appreciating and acknowledging such brains that have the potential to make a difference. Unless the society and the state realises this fact, brains will keep draining into other countries that appreciates their wit.

Haseeb U Saturday, September 04, 2021 03:09 AM

[QUOTE=kinzakhokher;1123052]Please tell me if it is safe to start the introduction with a quote? And also if this is the right way to introduce a quote in writing?
Introduction: “Do not waste water even if you were at a running stream.”
“Thousands have lived without love, not one without water.” These words of W.H Auden, a famous English poet, accentuate the importance of water for life. Water is precious as it is the most essential natural resource for survival of life on Earth. Although water is present on two-thirds of the Earth’s surface, only fresh water can be used for activities of living organisms. Surprisingly, fresh water is only 3% of the total water present. Moreover, the access to fresh water is not uniform all over the world. With rising demand for water and excessive exploitation of fresh water, the natural reserves of water are depleting. Water shortages in many regions, including Pakistan are testimony to this fact. In such a scenario, wastage of water can have disastrous repercussions for the present as well as future generations. It can intensify water scarcity eventually leading to food deficiency, poor sanitation, high costs of living and destruction of natural habitats. Therefore, conservation of water is not only important for one’s own self but also for have-nots and for coming generations. Water must not be wasted as it is already scarce in many regions with depleting reserves all over the world. The biggest contribution towards saving water for contemporaries and future generations can be made by simply not wasting it. Wasting water would simply mean wasting life.[/QUOTE]
Dear,
I think it's okay to quote before writing an essay, however the quote must aim directly at the topic. I think, and you are free to disagree, that the quote is not relevant to the topic. While the topic calls for "Not Wasting water", the quote seems to draw a comparison between love and water, declaring that the latter is vital while the former isn't
Regarding the rest of the paragraph, I think its fairly good and to the point!!

Prosparynaa Sunday, September 05, 2021 12:44 AM

Global Power Dynamics and Foreign Policy
of Pakistan

1.Introduction
1.1- Insight into the changing global power
1.2- Pakistan's foreign policy-Irrational, generous and impulsive-everything a foreign policy should not be

2. Global Power Dynamics
2.1- Evolving from a Unipolar to a multipolar world with emerging
powers including China,India,Australia and Brazil
2. 2- Shifting balance of domination: Militarily to economically
- The US ending its military engagements in Afghanistan and
Iraq
- -US-China trade war
-South China Sea controversy
-OBRI vs B3W
- Israel's domination in the middle east despite its size
2.3-Rise of China as the next superpower
2.4-The growing US-China conflict- The beginning of a new cold war?
2.5- Emergency of Russia into the global political picture
2.6- Upsurge of Populism and Nationalistic sentiments- An antidote to
globalization
-Modi's Hindutva's exclusion of minorities
-Brexit as the edifice of EU's fragmentation
2.7- Resurrection of Taliban and its implications on the global power
order and regional stablity
2.8 Middle East- A conflict zone and home of proxy wars

3-Pakistan's foreign policy- Determinants
3.1- Geography
3.2- Political
3.3- Economical
3.4- Religious

4-Pakistan's foreign Policy - Current Scenario
4.1- Deepening resentment with India over Kashmir issues leading to obscured political and economical ties.
4.2- China-Pakistan ties in the backdrop of CPEC and US-China conflict
4.3- The apparent hopes and threats of the new Taliban 2.0 government
4.4- Changing dynamics of the US-Pak relations with special refrence to Afghanistan and the former's tilt towards India
4.5- Pakistan's relation with the European Union- It's 3rd largest exporter
4.6- Cordial relations with the Muslim world with special reference to Turkey, Saudia and Malaysia
4.7- Support for the Palestinian cause and it's subsequent sour relations with Israel
4.8- Neutral stance in the Middle Eastern conflict.

5-Reccomendations
6-Conclusion

The dream of rain Monday, September 06, 2021 07:48 PM

[QUOTE=Prosparynaa;1123104]Global Power Dynamics and Foreign Policy
of Pakistan

1.Introduction
1.1- Insight into the changing global power
1.2- Pakistan's foreign policy-Irrational, generous and impulsive-everything a foreign policy should not be

2. Global Power Dynamics
2.1- Evolving from a Unipolar to a multipolar world with emerging
powers including China,India,Australia and Brazil
2. 2- Shifting balance of domination: Militarily to economically
- The US ending its military engagements in Afghanistan and
Iraq
- -US-China trade war
-South China Sea controversy
-OBRI vs B3W
- Israel's domination in the middle east despite its size
2.3-Rise of China as the next superpower
2.4-The growing US-China conflict- The beginning of a new cold war?
2.5- Emergency of Russia into the global political picture
2.6- Upsurge of Populism and Nationalistic sentiments- An antidote to
globalization
-Modi's Hindutva's exclusion of minorities
-Brexit as the edifice of EU's fragmentation
2.7- Resurrection of Taliban and its implications on the global power
order and regional stablity
2.8 Middle East- A conflict zone and home of proxy wars

3-Pakistan's foreign policy- Determinants
3.1- Geography
3.2- Political
3.3- Economical
3.4- Religious

4-Pakistan's foreign Policy - Current Scenario
4.1- Deepening resentment with India over Kashmir issues leading to obscured political and economical ties.
4.2- China-Pakistan ties in the backdrop of CPEC and US-China conflict
4.3- The apparent hopes and threats of the new Taliban 2.0 government
4.4- Changing dynamics of the US-Pak relations with special refrence to Afghanistan and the former's tilt towards India
4.5- Pakistan's relation with the European Union- It's 3rd largest exporter
4.6- Cordial relations with the Muslim world with special reference to Turkey, Saudia and Malaysia
4.7- Support for the Palestinian cause and it's subsequent sour relations with Israel
4.8- Neutral stance in the Middle Eastern conflict.

5-Reccomendations
6-Conclusion[/QUOTE]


Good outline, arguments specifically in the global dynamics are convincing. But the ones given in Pakistan's foreign policy sound more like issues. This doesn't mean they are wrong but thing is they need to be rephrased.
It should highlight how Pakistan has aligned its foreign policy under such dynamics. "Determinants" are not necessary. Recommendations for what? make it clear. Don't just leave headings on the way.

Hope it helps!


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