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FORIEGN AID TO PAKISTAN 1:-INTRODUCTION 2:-FORIEGN AID TO PAKISTAN SINCE INCEPTION 3:-FORIEGN AID IS A CURSE FOR PAKISTAN 4:-ITS REALLY A RAID ON OUR RESOURCES 5:-REASONS FOR TAKING AIDS a:-to meet un available requirements in the country b:-habit of import goods c:-imbalance of trade 6:-ITS EFFECTS ON PAKISTAN a:-more dependence on import goods b:-threat to local industries c:-rise in unemployment d:-other effects 7:-ALTERNATIVES OF FORIEGN AID a:-curtail luxuries b:-dependence on local items c:-levey heavy tax on rich people 8:-IMPOSITION OF BAN ON FORIEGN AID (MILITARY) COMPEL US TO BE SELF RELIENT 9:-ANALYSIS CONCLUSION
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FORIEGN AID TO PAKISTAN 1:-INTRODUCTION 2:-FORIEGN AID TO PAKISTAN SINCE INCEPTION 3:-FORIEGN AID IS A CURSE FOR PAKISTAN 4:-ITS REALLY A RAID ON OUR RESOURCES 5:-REASONS FOR TAKING AIDS a:-to meet un available requirements in the country b:-habit of import goods c:-imbalance of trade 6:-ITS EFFECTS ON PAKISTAN a:-more dependence on import goods b:-threat to local industries c:-rise in unemployment d:-other effects 7:-ALTERNATIVES OF FORIEGN AID a:-curtail luxuries b:-dependence on local items c:-levey heavy tax on rich people 8:-IMPOSITION OF BAN ON FORIEGN AID (MILITARY) COMPEL US TO BE SELF RELIENT 9:-ANALYSIS CONCLUSION
I am not going into much detail, but for starters, you are putting foreign aid as a curse in only the 3rd or 4th paragraph whereas this should be your conclusion at the end which you must derive through the provision of relevant facts and figures. You cannot make a sweeping statement without first proving it. If you really believe aid is a curse, then first try to prove it and then say its a curse. Never before you've proved it. And you put AIDS instead of AID at one place. They're hugely different.

Hopefully others will point out more. I'd say though, you need a lot of practice.
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FORIEGN AID TO PAKISTAN 1:-INTRODUCTION 2:-FORIEGN AID TO PAKISTAN SINCE INCEPTION 3:-FORIEGN AID IS A CURSE FOR PAKISTAN 4:-ITS REALLY A RAID ON OUR RESOURCES 5:-REASONS FOR TAKING AIDS a:-to meet un available requirements in the country b:-habit of import goods c:-imbalance of trade 6:-ITS EFFECTS ON PAKISTAN a:-more dependence on import goods b:-threat to local industries c:-rise in unemployment d:-other effects 7:-ALTERNATIVES OF FORIEGN AID a:-curtail luxuries b:-dependence on local items c:-levey heavy tax on rich people 8:-IMPOSITION OF BAN ON FORIEGN AID (MILITARY) COMPEL US TO BE SELF RELIENT 9:-ANALYSIS CONCLUSION

Mr Saad Qaisrani has already pointed out your week points in the outlines given by you, i would like to add some more points:


Introduction: Kinds of aids
Foreign aid

Reasons for getting Foreign aid.

The role of Foreign Aid since the establishment of Pakistan.

The effects of Foreign aid on Pakistan Economy.

Alternatives of Foreign aid should be then cleared.

Conclusion:
Foreign aid blessing or curse?
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@Syeda Sabahat

It is often difficult to assess someone's essay writing ability by only watching its outline. However, brother Qaisrani has rightly pointed out one of your weakness. I would also give my comments which are a bit more technical.

First, you said: "Foreign aid is a raid on our resources." I am really amazed at this statement. How aid can be a raid on our resources, while in fact it is the lending of some other country's resources to ours. A better statement would be about its repayment, which surely is a drain on our resources.

Secondly, there are two basic reasons for taking foreign aid. First is to fill the savings gap (in simple words, pakistani save less, therefore if we want more investment for example big dams, roads etc, then we borrow from other countries to invest in those projects), secondly, we borrow because we export less and import more, so to bridge this gap we borrow from other countries.

Thirdly, the effects you stated about impact of foreign aid on our economy needs re thinking. You stated: "6:-ITS EFFECTS ON PAKISTAN a:-more dependence on import goods b:-threat to local industries c:-rise in unemployment d:-other effects"

How foreign aid leads to more dependence on imported goods? It is true that foreign aid sometimes requires to import from the lending country, but that kind of aid is low in case of Pakistan.

I am also confused about foreign aid being a threat to local industry. How it can be a threat? Most of the aid goes for projects that are of public nature like dams roads and health and education sector, then how this can be a threat to local industry?

I wouldn't comment more on other points. I would rather suggest you to please read more material about technical subjects, as it seems that you may not have sufficient background in economics.

Please consider these points as friendly suggestions. I would not have written about those technical problems, but my point is to highlight various issues when a non technical person wants to write about some technical issues without proper homework. This strategy may not fetch good marks.

I hope you consider these points of mine in good faith.

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