Please evaluate my outline about "Women's Empowerment"
 

Please evaluate, comment, and improve my outline about "Women Empowerment"

Women Empowerment
Outline:
• Introduction;
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Definition and Concepts.

• Importance of Womens Role in Society.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Worldly perspective
[INDENT][/INDENT]o National perspective (rural and urban society)

• Problems of women
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Deprived from basic rights.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Male dominating Society; Dependence on men.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Lack of freedom.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Social abuse, and voilence.

• Women’s empowerment and its importance.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Working side by side with men, support their families and sharing equal burden.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Impact of women empowerment on national issues like poverty, economic growth, politics, planning and policy making.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Their role in nation building

• How women’s empowerment can be achieved.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Islamic teaching, examples from histroy about muslim and non-muslim powerful womens.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Quaid’s teachings.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Benazir’s own character and personality.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Changing the overall mind-set of people.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Women education.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Realization and protection of their rights.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Freedom to think, speak and act.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Efficient Legal and justice system to protect their rights, and prevent any act of abuse and voilence against them.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Media’s role in promoting Gender Equility and education of common people about importance of women in any society.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Equal oppurtunities.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Engagment in different community services through micro-finance schemes, and Non-Governmental Organizations working for rural and social development.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Women’s responsibilities.

• Conclusion.

[QUOTE=Tauseef Taj Kiani;331013]Please evaluate, comment, and improve my outline about "Women Empowerment"

Women Empowerment
Outline:
• Introduction;
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Definition and Concepts.

• Importance of Womens Role in Society.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Worldly perspective
[INDENT][/INDENT]o National perspective (rural and urban society)

• Problems of women
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Deprived from basic rights.(mention the right like education)
[INDENT][/INDENT]o [B]Male dominating Society[/B]; Dependence on men.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Lack of freedom.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Social abuse, and voilence.

• Women’s empowerment and its importance.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Working side by side with men, support their families and sharing equal burden.(positive impact on society)
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Impact of women empowerment on national issues like poverty, economic growth, politics, planning and policy making.(strengthning country`s economy,and help in good policy making)
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Their role in nation building(explained already)

• How women’s empowerment can be achieved.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Islamic teaching, examples from histroy about muslim and non-muslim powerful womens.(only write this when the essay is about pakistan)
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Quaid’s teachings.(again not in general essay)
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Benazir’s own character and personality.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Changing the overall mind-set of people.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Women education.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Realization and protection of their rights.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Freedom to think, speak and act.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Efficient Legal and justice system to protect their rights, and prevent any act of abuse and voilence against them.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Media’s role in promoting Gender Equility and education of common people about importance of women in any society.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Equal oppurtunities.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Engagment in different community services through micro-finance schemes, and Non-Governmental Organizations working for rural and social development.
[INDENT][/INDENT]o Women’s responsibilities.

• Conclusion.[/QUOTE]



dear tauseef if it is your first attempt then its good,but as you know there is always a room for improvement.

first of all start your essay with a quotation, any unique example of women empoerment from newspaper(if there is any).it will definitely enhance your thesis statement,and also have a good effect on examiner.


in the above mentioned heading you wrote, male dominating society, plz simply write [B]gender discrimination.[/B] in the next step you wrote dependence on men.plz write this as[B] a sub heading of lack of freedom.[/B]



other sugessions are social justice,cummunity development programmes at low level.


i am not very good in english essay but still i tried my best to guide you, rest other seniors are welcome to guide you better.

regards sabahat

[QUOTE=Tauseef Taj Kiani;331110]Please evaluate and comment, it was my first outline :-([/QUOTE]

Dear outline of your essay is quite fine. But you need improvement as Syeda Sabahat has said earlier.

In my Opinion, also show examples from Pre-Islamic era and then compare it with Islamic teachings. Try to give quotes from Quran and Hadith. Also give examples of famous Muslim Women like Hazrat Khadija (R.A), Hazrat Ayesha (R.A), etc.
Also put light on current situation of Women in Muslim World especially in Pakistan. Then compare it with Western World.