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Assalamu alaikum dearrr viewers and my respected mentors, Can u plz help me out with this essay. I have made the outline for it and I would like to persuade u to please grade Me for my outline, provide feedback and identify flaws in it. I'll be highly thankful to you.

1*) Introduction (100 words)

1) What does the proverb "We never know the worth of water till the well is dry" mean?
2) Thesis Statement

2*) What happens when a country realizes the worth of its resources after they are no more available? (500 words)

1) Loss of benefit gained through it
2) Searching for ways to rediscover it
3) Suffering of locals due to loss of resources
4) Birth of various issues in a country
5) Negative impact on conditions of the country


3*) Why does the loss of resources take place? (500 words)

1) Finite resources
2) Excessive Usage
3) High exports
4) More wastage
5) No future planning of sustainability

4*) Issues that took birth in Pakistan as it had lost it's resources (500 words)

1) Shortage of water
2) Inflation
3) Starvation and homelessness
4) Increased health hazards
5) Unemployment

5*) What can be done to avoid the future regret of loosing resources
(500 words)

1) Awareness programs for People
2) Strict laws to avoid wastage of resources
3) Set up a quota of exporting
4) Set up departments to monitor the use of resources within the country
5) Heavy fines on wastage of resources

6*) What are the problems due to which these measures cannot be carried out in Pakistan?
(500 words)

1) Lack of understanding amongst people
2) Lack of finance
3) Lack of education
4) Carelessness towards society
4) Lack of skilled workers
5) Increase in losses day by day

7*) Conclusion (100 words)
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It's a good attempt. But there are certain errors that I found in it. Firstly, you just wrote "introduction", but where is it? How would one know what's on your mind? Write an introduction so that respected members would grade you better. Similarly, also instead of writing a "conclusion", write one. Secondly, many points of your outlines are of just one word. This is wrong. Merely, reading it, the examiner won't have an idea about the paragraphs. You should write interesting headings so that it would entice the examiner to read your essay.

Apart from this, please avoid using "netspeak".

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Thank you so very very very muchhh for your help sir, it is huge favour from your side really. I will keep all the points in my mind that you identified and will improve InshaAllah InshaAllah. Millions of thanks to you lots of prayerssss.
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Thanks for sharing! I was just looking for some examples! I will work with intro and headlines.
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The nature of the topic is argumentative and if you wanted to explain it descriptively, you could have done it in a much better way. The topic in general highlights the importance of water as it sustains life; there is no other replacement; available in a very limited quantity and only on Earth; depleting at a very faster pace; a harbinger of prosperity; a valuable blessing of the Almighty.....

Moreover, mentioning that why we fail to know the worth of water by highlighting awareness issues, missing socialization, no water management bodies, Pollution, dumping of waste products into water bodies, excessive extracting of water from aquifers, no preservation steps/ strategies, no viable steps against global warming...

Also, mentioning the repercussions when the well is dry as it would be a precursor to wars, a reverse gear to the civilization, a threat to the ecology, transformation of Earth into another dry planet( like Mars, Venus),...

And at the end, highlighting the worth of water by suggesting and urging to take steps on a war footing.
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