women education in Pakistan
 

please check the outline of my essay.





-OUTLINE
1-INTRODUCTION
Importance of education
Role of education in pakistan
situation of women education in pakistan
education of women in Islam

2-HURDLES IN WOMEN EDUCATION
parents distinction
expensive education
early age marriages
lack of girls school in remote areas
militants influence (Malala yousafzai incident)
Governments helplessness
limited career fields for women
backwardness of society in female education

3- CONSEQUENCES OF LACK OF FEMALE EDUCATION
deprived of understanding technology
limited ways of interaction
illiteracy give ways to worst evils
non participation in the development of country

4-SOLUTION

5- CONCLUSION

please write some solutions

[QUOTE=aleena fazal;518055]please check the outline of my essay.





-OUTLINE
1-INTRODUCTION
Importance of education
Role of education in pakistan
situation of women education in pakistan
education of women in Islam

2-HURDLES IN WOMEN EDUCATION
parents distinction
expensive education
early age marriages
lack of girls school in remote areas
militants influence (Malala yousafzai incident)
Governments helplessness
limited career fields for women
backwardness of society in female education

3- CONSEQUENCES OF LACK OF FEMALE EDUCATION
deprived of understanding technology
limited ways of interaction
illiteracy give ways to worst evils
non participation in the development of country

4-SOLUTION

5- CONCLUSION[/QUOTE]
[B][I]Your effort is good.
You should start intro with women education not education because topic is women education not education.
Must give some suggestions to solve these problems.
stay happy:)[/I][/B]

Sister! you are so direct in beginning the body of your essay by starting the first paragraph with Hurdles. I must say that this is not a good move dear. You should give some background or something which can better start the body of essay. Like, the two points you have written under your introduction which are 'Importance of education' and 'Role of education' you can write these points under the body, i mean start your essay's body with these two points, it would be better. And introduction should hit the topic women' education as rightly pointed out by Isha sister. Also give some recommendations, again as pointed out by Isha sister. Overall, a fair effort. Try it again you can make it better.
Good luck.