Only Failed candidates.(What was your mistake in Essay CSS-2013 Written)
 

Please give in indication of the mistake you deem to be more lethal or main cause of your essay failure.
I have figured out following mistakes were there which either took away my essay or were partially responsible for the failure. The people who get blocked by Essay only must share the mistake. Mine were:
1- The last sentence of my essay which was about myth of gender equality, was:
If gender equality is to build a palace then in Pakistan we even have not laid the first brick of it. (This is good for thing and bad for everything, when I am presenting the legislative figures and action taken for the process it means situation is far more better than I described.)
2- I had spelling mistakes very scarce but inadequate use of thick grammar took me down. Along with I was little bit out of track from my outline. I mean some latter topics I described earlier and vice verse.

I did'nt organize my essay in coherent way, but i was not sure during attempting essay that i will pass this paper, initially my mind was totally blank but when i started writing on meaning and purpose of education then i relate historical perspective with present scenario, but i wrote very few pages, in my view i am failed due to grammatical mistakes, i cut outline at start of paper, lack of ideas, opinions and not ending my essay as it should be.

[QUOTE=googlechrome;674597]Please give in indication of the mistake you deem to be more lethal or main cause of your essay failure.
I have figured out following mistakes were there which either took away my essay or were partially responsible for the failure. The people who get blocked by Essay only must share the mistake. Mine were:
1- The last sentence of my essay which was about myth of gender equality, was:
If gender equality is to build a palace then in Pakistan we even have not laid the first brick of it. (This is good for thing and bad for everything, when I am presenting the legislative figures and action taken for the process it means situation is far more better than I described.)
2- I had spelling mistakes very scarce but inadequate use of thick grammar took me down. Along with I was little bit out of track from my outline. I mean some latter topics I described earlier and vice verse.[/QUOTE]

your score in essay?

Drawbacks of my essay.
1-I wrote 20 pages and in order to make my essay lengthy i think i added some irrelevant material.( in 2012 i wrote just 12 pages and got 44 marks).

2-In my essay i could not keep same rhythm and same tune, initially i took essay in philosophical perspective but letter on i took it as an contemporary issue, this shift tarnished the flow of my essay and the essay went ambiguous.

Rest examiner knows better why he gave me only 30.

i did not write title of essay at top, wrote only question number
did it effect my essay?
besides, my essay was simple and to the point consisted of 18 pages with quotes and saying but scored only 18 marks

[QUOTE=faiza shafi;675143]i did not title of essay at top, wrote only question number
did it effect my essay?
besides, my essay was simple and to the point consisted of 18 pages with quotes and saying but scored only 18 marks[/QUOTE]

You should have written the topic on the page from where you had to start your essay. But this isn't the sole reason of your low score.
Your outline may be flawed and language and ideas discussed may also be contributing factors in your collapse.

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Only God knows, what we are going to do next time. Today I am writing about
:Technology and culture are mutually exclusive: and again I am messed up.
I wrote it like:
Technology and tradition are mutually exclusive
Introduction
What is tradition?
What is technology?
What is changed?

Social system has evolved from cavemen to the modern man living in sky-scrappers. With more inventions at hand man got freed of cultural constraints. Inventions made his work easy and the way to do it also. The process which would define culture changed. We can say traditionally we used bread to scoop up the food. With time it was replaced by foods needing spoons. Now in big hotels and street shops modern fast foods like burgers are available. People used to...




And mind goes blank.

I got [B]35 marks[/B] on [B]Meaning and purpose of education[/B]!

[B]Reasons of Failing:[/B]
1. My essay was way too boring, even I got bored while writing it and I remember I kept yawning during the paper.
2. It was way too ordinary and common, like it had nothing special to stand out of the line!
3. I went way too descriptive and the essay lacked any sparks or thought provoking points.

And along with these my basic issues were there, like Zero practice, worst kind of handwriting and one mistake that I still remember is that instead of writing "across the Atlantic" I wrote "Across the Arctic". And also, at the end of essay I was so tired and bored, I didn't even felt like writing outlines, so I wrote just a few major outlines and never bothered to read my essay again!

So in short the checker had so many reasons to fail me. And I got a well deserving 35 and I am all happy and fine with it because I could have done much better had I not been so lazy and had practice a bit before going for exam.

[QUOTE=faiza shafi;675143]i did not write title of essay at top, wrote only question number
did it effect my essay?
besides, my essay was simple and to the point consisted of 18 pages with quotes and saying but scored only 18 marks[/QUOTE]

I didn't give title at the top of essay, however before the essay I had title above the outlines! But I don't think its something to worry about!

[B]My reason for failure in my essay paper:[/B]
[LIST=1][*]Wrong selection of topic that was [B]Meaning and purpose of Education.[/B][*]The topic itself was boring or possibly i might have run out of data.[*]It took me virtually 50 min to make a proper outline; and my biggest ever mistake was that i wrote rough introduction and conclusion on the back page and then made it neat on the front page. How stupid I was :pp[*]When I reached on page 7 i noticed i had only 30 min left, then i sped up my writing which made my writing indecipherable. i could not complete my essay properly.[*]i also failed to proofread, so many mistakes were bound to spring up.[*]Last but not the least my essay was much boring as i said i have nothing to write on :hurt:huh[/LIST]
[B]Marks 05[/B] :D

[QUOTE=Descendant of Saul;675157]I got [B]35 marks[/B] on [B]Meaning and purpose of education[/B]!

[B]Reasons of Failing:[/B]
1. My essay was way too boring, even I got bored while writing it and I remember I kept yawning during the paper.
2. It was way too ordinary and common, like it had nothing special to stand out of the line!
3. I went way too descriptive and the essay lacked any sparks or thought provoking points.

And along with these my basic issues were there, like Zero practice, worst kind of handwriting and one mistake that I still remember is that instead of writing "across the Atlantic" I wrote "Across the Arctic". And also, at the end of essay I was so tired and bored, I didn't even felt like writing outlines, so I wrote just a few major outlines and never bothered to read my essay again!

So in short the checker had so many reasons to fail me. And I got a well deserving 35 and I am all happy and fine with it because I could have done much better had I not been so lazy and had practice a bit before going for exam.[/QUOTE]

35 marks!!! quite impressive.

I prepared around 10 essays on general topic like corruption, global warming, UNO and etc. when I saw the essay paper it really shocked me and for the next 10 minutes i was in Trauma. OMG!!! I just cannot forget that feeling which i experienced there. OH GOD Please don't let that happen this time.

[QUOTE=seher bano;675367][B]My reason for failure in my essay paper:[/B]
[LIST=1][*]Wrong selection of topic that was [B]Meaning and purpose of Education.[/B][*]The topic itself was boring or possibly i might have run out of data.[*]It took me virtually 50 min to make a proper outline; and my biggest ever mistake was that i wrote rough introduction and conclusion on the back page and then made it neat on the front page. How stupid I was :pp[*]When I reached on page 7 i noticed i had only 30 min left, then i sped up my writing which made my writing indecipherable. i could not complete my essay properly.[*]i also failed to proofread, so many mistakes were bound to spring up.[*]Last but not the least my essay was much boring as i said i have nothing to write on :hurt:huh[/LIST]
[B]Marks 05[/B] :D[/QUOTE]

Too many reasons to be failed! Practice now. By the way, you must have learned, by now, how not to get bored during writing. Please teach me as well.