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If i have to write this essay
i will write instead of cause= factors responsible for terrorism
instead of effects= grave implications of terrorism
instead of solutions= Quick fix of terrorism

try to use synonyms it will bring beauty in your essay. Additionally try to start paragraph with topic sentence and end with concluding sentence.
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If i have to write this essay
i will write instead of cause= factors responsible for terrorism
instead of effects= grave implications of terrorism
instead of solutions= Quick fix of terrorism

try to use synonyms it will bring beauty in your essay. Additionally try to start paragraph with topic sentence and end with concluding sentence.
Thanks for the valuable suggestions. By the way i did try to give the topic sentence to every paragraph, so it need more work maybe

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I am really very sorry as I have just seen this thread right now. Mysterious, I am really facing a busy and hectic working schedule these days, so if you can please spare me for a day or two. I will Inshallah check your essay and discuss it in detail with you.

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its ok sir. i had figured it out, obviously one can not always remain constantly indulged in this forum. Looking forward to hear from you whenever feasible for you.
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Aoa,First of all i am a beginner so treat me like one
Well what i have to say is a bit different and it goes that for eg someone opt for this topic "Extremism the bane of our society" is it mandatory for him/her to follow the theme as said couldnt He go like The bane is actually the injustice, the divided and scattered system of education, poverty (i think these are major things) that had eventually lead to extremisim whatver its kind is.

So Iam saying that someone could go on that theme that extremism is okay the current main issue but but the real problems are those which have been for 60 years and has led to exrtrsm.So we should address those so extremism will be gone itself mostly.
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[QUOTE=mysterious me;774498]Thanks for the valuable suggestions. By the way i did try to give the topic sentence to every paragraph, so it need more work maybe


I said Topic as well as concluding sentence its very important for proper paragraph and use transitional words to bring coherence between sentences and paragraphs.
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Aoa,First of all i am a beginner so treat me like one
Well what i have to say is a bit different and it goes that for eg someone opt for this topic "Extremism the bane of our society" is it mandatory for him/her to follow the theme as said couldnt He go like The bane is actually the injustice, the divided and scattered system of education, poverty (i think these are major things) that had eventually lead to extremisim whatver its kind is.

So Iam saying that someone could go on that theme that extremism is okay the current main issue but but the real problems are those which have been for 60 years and has led to exrtrsm.So we should address those so extremism will be gone itself mostly.
Hope u understand it.
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you can go against the given statemet. All you have to do is to prove it through your arguments. Unless you remain clear and prove it, its okay. But, i'll suggest, never go in favor of extremism or terrorism or women oppression, not even slightly, if you dont agree on such issues better not opt them. Always play safe in essay.
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