senior check my outline.
 

Pakistan, a land needs dire reforms.
1. Introduction
2. Political reforms.
a. Strengthen and improve bilateral relation.
b. Establish rule of law.
c. Political stability.
d. Equal distribution of rights.
e. Right to franchise.
f. Democracy inside political system.

3. Social reforms.
a. Awareness of basic rights..
b. Freedom of expression.
c. Poverty reduction policies.
d. Pivotal role of media.

4. Economic reforms.
a. Decrease inflation.
b. Effective policies for FDI.
c. Proper utilization of resources.
d. Ensure accountability.
e. Increase in employment opportunities.


5. Religious reforms.
a. encourage tolerance.
b. security of minority.
c. nip in the bud terrorism, extremism.
d. check and balance of madrases.

6. Educational reforms.
a . Improve education system.
b. provide free education.
c. raise education GDP.
d. appropriate check and balance.
e. difference of private and public education should be eliminated.

7. conclusion.

[QUOTE=Amir Ali Jokhio;778058]Pakistan, a land needs dire reforms.
1. Introduction
2. Political reforms.
a. Strengthen and improve bilateral relation.
b. Establish rule of law.
c. Political stability.
d. Equal distribution of rights.
e. Right to franchise.
f. Democracy inside political system.

3. Social reforms.
a. Awareness of basic rights..
b. Freedom of expression.
c. Poverty reduction policies.
d. Pivotal role of media.

4. Economic reforms.
a. Decrease inflation.
b. Effective policies for FDI.
c. Proper utilization of resources.
d. Ensure accountability.
e. Increase in employment opportunities.


5. Religious reforms.
a. encourage tolerance.
b. security of minority.
c. nip in the bud terrorism, extremism.
d. check and balance of madrases.

6. Educational reforms.
a . Improve education system.
b. provide free education.
c. raise education GDP.
d. appropriate check and balance.
e. difference of private and public education should be eliminated.

7. conclusion.[/QUOTE]

[B]Aoa,

Good effort !
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[COLOR="Blue"][B]Here are my following suggestions:

o Always mention " Main body " after introduction and then write down its body (headings, sub-headings).

o And your point "raise education GDP" doesn't make sense. It should be "raise education budget" and you missed some significant points:

o Reforms in armed forces (Army shouldn't interfere in democratic affairs).
o Training of teachers on regular basis
o Judicial reforms:
-Zero tolerance for any crime
-Justice delayed is justice denied (decision process of the cases should be fast and transparent).
o Crack down against food mafia (who stores food items and sell them at high prices).
o Ensuring merit and weed out social evils [/B][/COLOR]

[B]And last but not the least, always start your essay with relevant quote. And you should add relevant quotes in the body as well to make your essay more adorable, but it should be relevant and don't ever fire stray bullets. :)

Stay blessed and best of luck.
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[B]You should also add followings points as well:
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o Health reforms:

- Construction of more hospitals
- Result oriented strategy for Polio control
- Protection of health workers
- Check and balance for disposal of:
1. Used medical tools
2. Expired medicine

o Balance between conventional and non-conventional weapons

Stay blessed.
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amir ali jokhio,you have done great job,please make clear what do you want to say,in nutshell you have done an outstanding work in initial process,keep it up,