Check my Essay introduction "Terrorism"

[haroon malik]

Terrorism
Brief Relevant History: Terrorism, for centuries, has been carried out in different parts of the world by different groups for a variety of purposes. Sometimes a communist organization, fascist, radical and separatist section assumes responsibility for these acts. Terrorism changing with changing worldly technology. In Pakistan, it has become a highly destructive phenomenon in recent past. Terrorism is the biggest threat to Pakistan’s progress. It roots can be traced back from 1979, when there was an effort to kick out Russia from Afghanistan. But the problem became severe after 9/11. And now in 2015, it’s become a menace for our motherland. Basis of Stance: Terrorism is an inhuman act that is condemned by our Deen Islam and all the religions of the world as it’s a biggest social evil. Causes: Major contributors of terrorism and extremism in Pakistan includes war on terror, poor law and order situation, justice denied or delayed, short cut culture, lack of education, poverty (lack of food, shelter), corruption and nepotism, absence of nation building, broken family bonds, breakdown of civic facilities, external actors – both state and non-state, religious sectarianism, false ideologies, and feudal mindsets. Consequences: Due to prevailing circumstances FDI decreases, image of country demolished, internal conflicts started and law and order situation worsen etc Suggestions: There is a dire need of few steps like promoting peace in Afghanistan, logical end to war on terror, active foreign policy, improving intelligence, dealing with militancy in tribal belt, enhancing competence of security forces, effective use of media, economic recovery and poverty alleviation, revamping education system, revamping education system, streamlining madrassa culture, availability of speedy and affordable justice, improving law and order, eradicating corruption and nepotism. Thesis Statement: Presently Pakistan is facing with two broad categories of terrorism namely internal and external terrorism. It is facing the twin danger of religious extremism and ethnic conflicts.

[Man Jaanbazam]

Originally Posted by haroon malik

Terrorism
Terrorism, for centuries, has been carried out in different parts of the world by different groups for a variety of purposes. Sometimes a communist organization, fascist, radical and separatist section assumes responsibility for these acts. . In Pakistan, it has become a highly destructive phenomenon in recent past. Presently Pakistan is facing with the monster of terrorism that has badly destroyed the social fabric of society and has hampered the economy. There is dire need to take more effective steps and plan strategies to cope with this endemic disease.(It can be your thesis statement or like this. I have just put up a general idea

Now read this one . This one more suits to introduction paragraph. Add more details in it like what is terrorism or you can mention that from where it was started in just one line. You can mention causes, effects and remedies in outline under separate headings.

[haroon malik]

Originally Posted by Man Jaanbazam

Now read this one . This one more suits to introduction paragraph. Add more details in it like what is terrorism or you can mention that from where it was started in just one line. You can mention causes, effects and remedies in outline under separate headings.

Thanks

[haroon malik]

Provide me your valued help regarding Essay writing. Whatever I am writing for practice regarding essay topics is after reading from books, articles, internet and re-writing it. But what if any unseen literature, philosophical or expression based essay topic appeared in exam on which I have little knowledge then how can I write over it. Besides, should I made some dummy essay’s and reproduce them in paper after making little changes according to topic??

[Man Jaanbazam]

Originally Posted by haroon malik

Provide me your valued help regarding Essay writing. Whatever I am writing for practice regarding essay topics is after reading from books, articles, internet and re-writing it. But what if any unseen literature, philosophical or expression based essay topic appeared in exam on which I have little knowledge then how can I write over it. Besides, should I made some dummy essay’s and reproduce them in paper after making little changes according to topic??

Please go through following threads.
Hints For Beginners On Essay-writing
General Essay Writing Tips
Thesis Statement

Essay writing during exams

Taking the Essay Test
Read all the directions and questions.
Note the number of items, point distribution, range of difficulty, and time available.
Jot down any immediate answers that come to your mind - lists, outlines, etc. Jot down any other key information you might forget.
Analyze the test question and divide it into its main parts and subparts.
From the parts quickly construct a rough outline.
Note the instructional words included in the question, e.g., compare or contrast.
Use the outline as a "map" to answer the essay question. If you don't have time to finish the whole test, this outline may give you some points. More importantly, the outline helps you to stay focused.
Make you answer as specific as possible.
If you know the answer, write only what you are asked.
Avoid generalities.
Use part of the test question in your test answer at the beginning of the paragraph. This signals to the reader that you are answering this part of the essay here! This will earn you points.
Include an introductory statement at the beginning and a summary paragraph at the end.
Review your answers. Your essay is written under the intensity of a deadline, but it is graded under much more relaxed conditions. Allow sufficient time to check for spelling, grammar, omitted words, incorrect dates, etc. This is when you will be glad you wrote in pencil.

A Glossary of Essay Test Words
ANALYZE: When asked to analyze, separate (a thing, idea, etc.) into its parts to find out their nature, proportion, function, interrelationship, etc.
COMMENT: When asked to comment, you are asked to explore the impact and meaning of something; give a note in explanation, criticism, or illustration of something written or said; remark or make an observation made in criticism or as an expression of opinion
COMPARE: Examine qualities or characteristics in order to discover resemblance's. The term compare is usually stated as compare with, and it implies that you are to emphasize similarities, although differences may be mentioned.
CONTRAST: Tell how two or more topics are different from associated things, qualities, or events, etc.
CRITICIZE, INTERPRET, and REVIEW: Express your judgment with respect to the correctness or merits of the factors under consideration. Give the results of your own analysis and discuss the limitations and good points or contributions of the plan or work in question.
DEFINE: Definitions call for concise, clear, authoritative meanings. Details are not required, but boundaries or limitations of the definition should be cited. Keep in mind the class to which a thing belongs and whatever differentiates the particular object from all others in the class.
DIAGRAM, and ILLUSTRATE: Present a drawing chart, plan, or graphic representation in your answer. You may be expected to label the diagram or add a brief explanation or description.
DISCUSS: Examine, analyze carefully, and present detailed considerations pro and con regarding the problems or items involved. Often found in essays.
EVALUATE: Present a careful appraisal of the problem, stressing both advantages and limitations. Evaluation implies authoritative and, to a lesser degree, personal appraisal of both contributions and limitations
EXPLAIN, RELATE: Clarify and interpret the material you present. State the "how" or "why," reconcile differences in opinion or experimental results, and state causes if possible. In brief, tell how it all happened.
JUSTIFY, PROVE: To justify your answer, provide factual evidence or logical reasons. In such an answer, evidence should be presented in convincing form. Establish your answer with certainty by evaluating and citing experimental evidence or by logical reasoning.
LIST, ENUMERATE: Present an itemized series or tabulation. Be concise.
OUTLINE: Give main points and essential supplementary materials, omitting minor details, and present the information in a systematic arrangement or classification.
SUMMARIZE: Give the main points or facts in condensed form. Omit details, illustrations and examples.
TRACE: Give a description of progress, historical sequence, or development from the point of origin. Such narratives may call for probing or deductions.

Read these things and let me know If you still need help.

[haroon malik]

Well thanks for such valuable guidance. But someone anxious me that Examiner assesses our Essay paper less than 07 minutes. Often examiner just go through outline and weigh Essay.Whereas, here you mentioned that examiner graded our Essay in much more relaxed condition and evaluate our spellings,grammer, statistics etc. ?

[haroon malik]

Also ley me know that is this introduction in lenght wise is fine or i should divide it into paragraphs as i am typing this on MS word so it can easily appear on a single page.



Topic : Corruption:
Presently Pakistan is facing with the monster of Corruption that has badly destroyed the social fabric of society and has hampered the economy Corruption is a social evil which destroys a civilized society and nation, as fire destroys wood. Corruption is a universal curse around the world and exists in all the countries in form or another. In Pakistan,it is as old as the country itself. With every passing day it is growing in magnitude and strength. An international organization expressed concern over the growing corruption in the country saying that the corruption of Rs12600 billion was reported in different sectors of Pakistan during the last five years. The organization reported that the corruption has reached its peak during the last 05 years.Corruption if not dealt seriously, then its mushroom growth spoils nation image and place on the map of the world .It varies from society to society.In Pakistan, the major reasons are feudalism, lack of accountability, low salaries, monopoly of power, unemployment, poverty, illiteracy, immorality in society, lack of transparency, and red-tapism . Due to prevailing circumstances, economic degradation, inflation, poverty, illiteracy, crime, terrorism and extremism are increased many folds. GDP of Pakistan has decreased imports exceeds exports. Sectarianism and morality is another alarming condition in Pakistan There is a dire need to take the anti-corruption measures by law enforcement and accountable institutions to eradicate corruption. so that corruption can be lessen to some extent. Honest and selfless leadership is needed like Quaid-i-Azam, Presently Pakistan leadership and policy makers need to make suitable anti-corruption polices and make sure that they are being implemented at a gross root level; otherwise Pakistan will soon become a country of looters and dictators.

[haroon malik]

well i read your outline structure which is like this:-
Follow the following pattern for initial practice.
1. Intro
2. Thesis statement
3. Current Scenario and Case Studies
4. Causes
5. Effects
6. Solution
7. Conclusion

Whereas my introduction and outline pattern is the same way except thesis statement.My english teacher told me to write the essay in "Indirect way" like this:-
Introduction
current scenaria/basis of stance
causes
consequences/effects
suggestions
Thesis statement
conclusion

from where you got the idea about thesis statement to put it after introduction?

[janzee]

I want a good outline about "Terrorism" essay...

[Man Jaanbazam]

Originally Posted by haroon malik

Well thanks for such valuable guidance. But someone anxious me that Examiner assesses our Essay paper less than 07 minutes. Often examiner just go through outline and weigh Essay.Whereas, here you mentioned that examiner graded our Essay in much more relaxed condition and evaluate our spellings,grammer, statistics etc. ?

I do not know about the thing that in how many minutes the examiner assesses the Essay. However, the examiner is enough experienced in his domain that he can mark your essay just by a single glance. As far as I have heard, the examiner focuses mostly on outline, introduction paragraph (Look for grammatical mistakes and idea), Topic sentence of each paragraph, organization, coherence and conclusion. So it is not the amazing thing that he assesses the essay in minimum time. Hence it is useless to worry about the checking thing.

Originally Posted by haroon malik

Also ley me know that is this introduction in lenght wise is fine or i should divide it into paragraphs as i am typing this on MS word so it can easily appear on a single page.

Topic : Corruption:
Corruption is a social evil which destroys a civilized society and nation, as fire destroys wood. Corruption is a universal curse around the world and exists in all the countries in form or another. In Pakistan,it is as old as the country itself. With every passing day it is growing in magnitude and strength. An international organization (Name of organization: Reference is necessary) reported that the corruption has reached its peak during the last 05 years. Presently Pakistan is facing with the monster of Corruption that has badly destroyed the social fabric of society and has hampered the economy.Corruption if not dealt seriously, then its mushroom growth spoils nation image and place on the map of the world .There is a dire need to take the anti-corruption measures by law enforcement and accountable institutions to eradicate corruption. so that corruption can be lessen to some extent.

Read this one.

Originally Posted by haroon malik

well i read your outline structure which is like this:-
Follow the following pattern for initial practice.
1. Intro
2. Thesis statement
3. Current Scenario and Case Studies
4. Causes
5. Effects
6. Solution
7. Conclusion

Whereas my introduction and outline pattern is the same way except thesis statement.My english teacher told me to write the essay in "Indirect way" like this:-
Introduction
current scenaria/basis of stance
causes
consequences/effects
suggestions
Thesis statement
conclusion

from where you got the idea about thesis statement to put it after introduction?

I have read it from various sources and books including Harvard and Oxford pattern. I do not know whether the thesis statement in the start would be the right thing. However thesis statement at the end of the paragraph is the recommended one.