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Please have a look at my work. I am aware that it is not up to the mark and might bore you but I would appreciate your patience very much and would be really grateful for tips...

Literature is a great cultural artifact

God created man in His own reflection. He attributed him with a lot of distinguishing characteristics. Man is not about flesh and blood only. Human personality is composed of a myriad of colors: happiness, sadness, fear, anxiety, ecstasy, and inspiration. Humans are born with a taste for beauty and neatness which is termed as aesthetic sense.
These human feelings are displayed sometimes in the form of painting, at other times singing, sometimes dancing, and still at other times writing. This is how art is born!
Painters express their feelings through colors, they play with brushes. Singers use their voice, dancers use bodily expressions to highlight their presence. Writers use words,a medium chosen by God! They are the creators of literature.
Literature-the art of writing, is a diverse art form, comprising of poetry and prose. It is the outcry of sensitive ones. Those who go far and deep in their observations, getting into a trance. Those who feel so intensely that their hearts begin to bleed and they cannot contain it anymore.
Some of these people write poems, while others choose to write stories or essays. Poems are rhythmic in structure.it seeks people who share the same taste and understanding. Stories and essays are subtle in structure, yet they cater to a large number of people.
Literature is both a captor and reflector of human feelings. It can serve as a communication medium between people of different regions and different ages. It is a silent communication between reader and writer. It can be both entertaining and educating. People who read literature have a better understanding of human feelings and can adjust better with the changes of life. This is because they learn about things they have not experienced in real life. Writers act as representatives of people who share their feelings but cannot express that exquisitely.
As a writer it is my personal experience that reading literature of a foreign land gives me an insight into that region’s cultural and social values. In west we can see many writers whose literary masterpieces are an excellent representation of their society. Jane Austen and Emily Bronte are very famous and loved English authors, their novels paint a very accurate picture of then English Society.
Present age is seeing many emerging writers spreading their cultural values through their words. Khalid hosseini in his novel “A thousand splendid suns” displayed the great picture of pre-war and post war Afghanistan. Elif shafak, a Turkish writer has represented turkish culture and customs in her novels. Many Pakistani writers like Kamila shamsie, Bina shah,and Bilal tanveer are also trying to acts as representatives of Pakistani nation on international platform.
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A very good effort. As I told you earlier, your English vocabulary & grammar is very good, nearly flawless, I would say. Seems like you are somehow related with literature. The choice of words is so beautiful & affective. But, you need some improvements, in order to adapt your writing skills as per CSS requirements. For instance, in the below short essay, the ending is not good, rather it is an abrupt ending without any proper conclusion etc.

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AssalamOalikum,
Please have a look at my work. I am aware that it is not up to the mark and might bore you but I would appreciate your patience very much and would be really grateful for tips...

Literature is a great cultural artifact

God created man in His own reflection. He attributed him with a lot of distinguishing characteristics. Man is not about flesh and blood only. Human personality is composed of a myriad of colors: happiness, sadness, fear, anxiety, ecstasy, and inspiration. Humans are born with a taste for beauty and neatness which is termed as aesthetic sense.
These human feelings are displayed sometimes in the form of painting, at other times singing, sometimes dancing, and still at other times writing. This is how art is born!
Painters express their feelings through colors, they play with brushes. Singers use their voice, dancers use bodily expressions to highlight their presence. Writers use words,a medium chosen by God! They are the creators of literature.
Literature-the art of writing, is a diverse art form, comprising of poetry and prose. It is the outcry of sensitive ones. Those who go far and deep in their observations, getting into a trance. Those who feel so intensely that their hearts begin to bleed and they cannot contain it anymore. (This is a beautiful paragraph)
Some of these people write poems, while others choose to write stories or essays. Poems are rhythmic in structure.it seeks people who share the same taste and understanding. Stories and essays are subtle in structure, yet they cater to a large number of people.
Literature is both a captor and reflector of human feelings. It can serve as a communication medium between people of different regions and different ages. It is a silent communication between reader and writer. It can be both entertaining and educating. People who read literature have a better understanding of human feelings and can adjust better with the changes of life. This is because they learn about things they have not experienced in real life. Writers act as representatives of people who share their feelings but cannot express that exquisitely.
As a writer it is my personal experience that reading literature of a foreign land gives me an insight into that region’s cultural and social values. In west we can see many writers whose literary masterpieces are an excellent representation of their society. Jane Austen and Emily Bronte are very famous and loved English authors, their novels paint a very accurate picture of then English Society.
Present age is seeing many emerging writers spreading their cultural values through their words. Khalid hosseini in his novel “A thousand splendid suns” displayed the great picture of pre-war and post war Afghanistan. Elif shafak, a Turkish writer has represented turkish culture and customs in her novels. Many Pakistani writers like Kamila shamsie, Bina shah,and Bilal tanveer are also trying to acts as representatives of Pakistani nation on international platform. (Conclusion & ending are missing. It seems quite an abrupt ending which is annoying for the examiner, definitely.)
I would suggest you to write a full length essay with proper outline now. Also check your email.
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@sarrial banda: You are very right,I need to focus on my writing skills,My biggest fear is a thing called "Writers block".I do not know what to do with it!!!
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@sarrial banda: You are very right,I need to focus on my writing skills,My biggest fear is a thing called "Writers block".I do not know what to do with it!!!
This problem can be overcome by first brainstorming & then making an outline before writing the actual essay. Make bullet points of your thoughts while brainstorming & then expand each point into a paragraph.

Another possible solution could be that you do something really different. Like studying some other subject for few days & then coming back to essay writing after 10-15 days.
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