Labor saving devices are more troublesome than worth.
 

Has anyone attempted this essay?
Please share your [B]Outline[/B] and/or the [B]Theme.[/B]

[QUOTE=futuristic;806515]Has anyone attempted this essay?
Please share your [B]Outline[/B] and/or the [B]Theme.[/B][/QUOTE]

dear, i attempted this topic very well. I will share my ideas with you tomorrow, after ARABIC papers.

OK dear..I shall wait.

Here is one. Criticize ruthlessly, guide gently :)
nineteen paragraphs and about 1200-1400 words


1. Introduction
1.1. Labor saving devices are more [B]productive[/B] than they are worth

2. Body
2.1. What are labor saving devices? They are machines.

2.2. Why machines are more productive
2.2.1. They save time.
2.2.2. They are efficient.
2.2.3. They minimize errors.
2.2.4. They provide employment opportunities.
2.2.5. They propel research and development.
2.2.6. They organized the social structure.

2.3. How machines are more productive
2.3.1. They spare time for recreational and spiritual activities.
2.3.2. They increased output per unit.
2.3.3. They overcame the nuisance of redoing things.
2.3.4. They increased income and prosperity.
2.3.5. They increased knowledge.
2.3.6. They simplified administration of cities and countries.

2.4. Comparison
2.4.1. Agricultural societies vs Industrial Societies
2.4.2. Wool spinning vs textile mills

2.5. Recommendation
2.5.1. Replace old methods of production with modern methods of production.
2.5.2. Invest in new machines.

3. Conclusion
3.1. Labor saving devices are more productive than they are worth.

[QUOTE=waqas izhar;806607]Here is one. Criticize ruthlessly, guide gently :)
nineteen paragraphs and about 1200-1400 words


1. Introduction
1.1. Labor saving devices are more [B]productive[/B] than they are worth

2. Body
2.1. What are labor saving devices? They are machines.

2.2. Why machines are more productive
2.2.1. They save time.
2.2.2. They are efficient.
2.2.3. They minimize errors.
2.2.4. They provide employment opportunities.
2.2.5. They propel research and development.
2.2.6. They organized the social structure.

2.3. How machines are more productive
2.3.1. They spare time for recreational and spiritual activities.
2.3.2. They increased output per unit.
2.3.3. They overcame the nuisance of redoing things.
2.3.4. They increased income and prosperity.
2.3.5. They increased knowledge.
2.3.6. They simplified administration of cities and countries.

2.4. Comparison
2.4.1. Agricultural societies vs Industrial Societies
2.4.2. Wool spinning vs textile mills

2.5. Recommendation
2.5.1. Replace old methods of production with modern methods of production.
2.5.2. Invest in new machines.

3. Conclusion
3.1. Labor saving devices are more productive than they are worth.[/QUOTE]
i think it was more easy to write about the troubles of labor saving devices.i mean the title is clearly asking you to write about the troubles not productivity.this topic was one of the most easy one.the scope of this topic is vast it can include pollution health problems etc.

[QUOTE=gh_kakar;806616]i think it was more easy to write about the troubles of labor saving devices.i mean the title is clearly asking you to write about the troubles not productivity.this topic was one of the most easy one.the scope of this topic is vast it can include pollution health problems etc.[/QUOTE]

One can always disagree with the topic :)

You are freely allowed to go for or against the topic. However, the latter needs solid points that can warrant your expression. If you want to save your paper, never go against the topic, lest it should be considered that you are challenging the paper-setter. Keep it as it is.

Anyone here from medical field ??

[QUOTE=waqas izhar;806607]Here is one. Criticize ruthlessly, guide gently :)
nineteen paragraphs and about 1200-1400 words


1. Introduction
1.1. Labor saving devices are more [B]productive[/B] than they are worth

2. Body
2.1. What are labor saving devices? They are machines.

2.2. Why machines are more productive
2.2.1. They save time.
2.2.2. They are efficient.
2.2.3. They minimize errors.
2.2.4. They provide employment opportunities.
2.2.5. They propel research and development.
2.2.6. They organized the social structure.

2.3. How machines are more productive
2.3.1. They spare time for recreational and spiritual activities.
2.3.2. They increased output per unit.
2.3.3. They overcame the nuisance of redoing things.
2.3.4. They increased income and prosperity.
2.3.5. They increased knowledge.
2.3.6. They simplified administration of cities and countries.

2.4. Comparison
2.4.1. Agricultural societies vs Industrial Societies
2.4.2. Wool spinning vs textile mills

2.5. Recommendation
2.5.1. Replace old methods of production with modern methods of production.
2.5.2. Invest in new machines.

3. Conclusion
3.1. Labor saving devices are more productive than they are worth.[/QUOTE]
Well dear a good attempt I shall say but I think you have changed the whole theme of the essay.
I think for or against didn't apply this essay.
It was a straight forward topic as examiner intends to ask the pitfalls associated with tha latest technology.
Any how best of luck

[B](at)waqas izhar[/B]
Bro, did you take Physics this year as an optional??

i totally agree with futuristic that this topic wasn't intended for pro and against arguments.
probably you should have mentioned the major troubles of devices rather than going straight to their worth because that is reason that this question arise in the first place.no one doubts the usefulness of the machines.
also the second sentence of your outline suggest that you have changed the word troubles with productive boldly.this gives the impression as if you have misunderstood the topic or changed the theme.
But don't be upset because overall your outline is coherent.
pardon me for my harsh words since you have asked for it and i have given my honest opinion.

[QUOTE=futuristic;806640]Well dear a good attempt I shall say but I think you have changed the whole theme of the essay.
I think for or against didn't apply this essay.
It was a straight forward topic as examiner intends to ask the pitfalls associated with tha latest technology.
Any how best of luck[/QUOTE]



[QUOTE=gh_kakar;806653]i totally agree with futuristic that this topic wasn't intended for pro and against arguments.
probably you should have mentioned the major troubles of devices rather than going straight to their worth because that is reason that this question arise in the first place.no one doubts the usefulness of the machines.
also the second sentence of your outline suggest that you have changed the word troubles with productive boldly.this gives the impression as if you have misunderstood the topic or changed the theme.
But don't be upset because overall your outline is coherent.
pardon me for my harsh words since you have asked for it and i have given my honest opinion.[/QUOTE]

Your criticism is welcome :). One can always go against any topic. like in the first topic one could have said that war on terror is not a violation of human rights. or one could have said that anticipation is not better than realization. or that punctuality is virtue of the virtuous. or that digital technology hasn't altered technologies etc. In CSS, as far as i have learned from seniors, it does not matter what your argument is, what matters is whether you are able to prove your argument or not. I passed essay last time. I did not go against the topic that time but let's see what happens now :)

But now if you agree with me that one can go against a topic, have i done justice to my argument? Your further criticism would be even more welcome :) Stay blessed.

[QUOTE=Incorporeal;806641][B](at)waqas izhar[/B]
Bro, did you take Physics this year as an optional??[/QUOTE]

Yes I did :) I have lost paper A actually. will upload paper B tomorrow. And will try to write questions from Paper A from memory as well. Stay Blessed.

[QUOTE=waqas izhar;806607]Here is one. Criticize ruthlessly, guide gently :)
nineteen paragraphs and about 1200-1400 words


1. Introduction
1.1. Labor saving devices are more [B]productive[/B] than they are worth

2. Body
2.1. What are labor saving devices? They are machines.

2.2. Why machines are more productive
2.2.1. They save time.
2.2.2. They are efficient.
2.2.3. They minimize errors.
2.2.4. They provide employment opportunities.
2.2.5. They propel research and development.
2.2.6. They organized the social structure.

2.3. How machines are more productive
2.3.1. They spare time for recreational and spiritual activities.
2.3.2. They increased output per unit.
2.3.3. They overcame the nuisance of redoing things.
2.3.4. They increased income and prosperity.
2.3.5. They increased knowledge.
2.3.6. They simplified administration of cities and countries.

2.4. Comparison
2.4.1. Agricultural societies vs Industrial Societies
2.4.2. Wool spinning vs textile mills

2.5. Recommendation
2.5.1. Replace old methods of production with modern methods of production.
2.5.2. Invest in new machines.

3. Conclusion
3.1. Labor saving devices are more productive than they are worth.[/QUOTE]
Though I agree with you that one could go against any topic but you have redefined the topic.The opposite of "troublesome" is not necessarily "productive".You could have simply said that the labour saving devices were not more troublesome than they were worth.Nevertheless, your approach to your own chosen direction of essay is pragmatic, and I hope you pass the exam.

[QUOTE=nowsherwan;807325]Though I agree with you that one could go against any topic but you have redefined the topic.The opposite of "troublesome" is not necessarily "productive".You could have simply said that the labour saving devices were not more troublesome than they were worth.Nevertheless, your approach to your own chosen direction of essay is pragmatic, and I hope you pass the exam.[/QUOTE]

this was the thesis statement:

"labor saving devices are not only not troublesome they are more productive than they are worth"

now sir what do you say :)

This statement looks better��

Going against the topic is not a healthy approach at all. When the examiner has already taken a stance that labor saving devices are more troublesome, then there is no need to go against the topic. If the topic were ' labor saving devices; blessing or curse?', then you would take a side and prove your stance. However, it's always safer to move with the tide. Dear, you have argued utterly against the examiner's opinion. It's very hard to convince him in such a way. Still i wish you a good luck.

Well guys I started this thread to know view point regarding the said essay.My fellow aspirants have tried very well and I pray for their mighty success.
Here is my outline ,I need your response.I cleared essay exam twice I.e 2013 and 2014 but you need never know when we is your bad day.
[U][B]OUTLINE[/B][/U]
[B]1.Automobiles.....synching distance or creating panic![/B]
Traffic jams,fuel issue,pollution..
Walk for health
[B]2.Computer and related items...a source of anxiety[/B]
Data coppied,corrupt,theft,operating system problem,software problem,electricity issue!
[B]3.Cellular technology.......leave me alone please!!![/B]
Have you installed the new app?
Charging issue,miss communication,near to friends far from family,increasing debt on p pocket
[B]4.Case studies:[/B]
A.Scottish referendum ....manipulating the results
B.Pharmaceutical industry (in this I explained a scenario in which wrong medicine was packed resulting in deaths)
5[B].IT devices and electronic gadgets .....increased dependence and dissatisfaction[/B]
Electronic dictionary vs printed one
ATM ...... A betrayal
Story of one day before eid.
Fraud,theft
Bank is better
[B]6.Online research: Copy paste PhD.s [/B]
Dilemma of developing countries
[B]7.email vs postal system[/B]
Delivered ,undilevered .....a headache!!
Loss if emotional sentiments and charm of letter opening
[B]8.Impact on our lives[/B]
Idleness,diss satisfaction.psychological distress,emotional disturbances,anxiety and depression.
In between I also added [COLOR="SeaGreen"]xerox machine,biometric system,social media[/COLOR] and problems associated with them.
Kindly share your valuable thoughts.

I concentrated more on troubles associated with the devices and less on their worth and usefulness.

[QUOTE=futuristic;807729]Well guys I started this thread to know view point regarding the said essay.My fellow aspirants have tried very well and I pray for their mighty success.
Here is my outline ,I need your response.I cleared essay exam twice I.e 2013 and 2014 but you need never know when we is your bad day.
[U][B]OUTLINE[/B][/U]
[B]1.Automobiles.....synching distance or creating panic![/B]
Traffic jams,fuel issue,pollution..
Walk for health
[B]2.Computer and related items...a source of anxiety[/B]
Data coppied,corrupt,theft,operating system problem,software problem,electricity issue!
[B]3.Cellular technology.......leave me alone please!!![/B]
Have you installed the new app?
Charging issue,miss communication,near to friends far from family,increasing debt on p pocket
[B]4.Case studies:[/B]
A.Scottish referendum ....manipulating the results
B.Pharmaceutical industry (in this I explained a scenario in which wrong medicine was packed resulting in deaths)
5[B].IT devices and electronic gadgets .....increased dependence and dissatisfaction[/B]
Electronic dictionary vs printed one
ATM ...... A betrayal
Story of one day before eid.
Fraud,theft
Bank is better
[B]6.Online research: Copy paste PhD.s [/B]
Dilemma of developing countries
[B]7.email vs postal system[/B]
Delivered ,undilevered .....a headache!!
Loss if emotional sentiments and charm of letter opening
[B]8.Impact on our lives[/B]
Idleness,diss satisfaction.psychological distress,emotional disturbances,anxiety and depression.
In between I also added [COLOR="SeaGreen"]xerox machine,biometric system,social media[/COLOR] and problems associated with them.
Kindly share your valuable thoughts.[/QUOTE]

dear, the last point, impact on our lives, should have been given at the very first place. The examiner is interested more in knowing the troublesome impact of labor saving devices on human life. He is very less concerned about the enviornment etc. You should have explored more on negative impact of labor saving devices. It's my opinion; one may disagree with it.

@ futuristic

Bro your perspective is perfect i would say but here it is...

An outline is supposed to be 'clear'. see your outline begins with:

1.Automobiles.....synching distance or creating panic!

so what? What does it even mean? What are you trying to say?

the first line under the introduction heading should be your thesis statement. in this case you should have said that labor saving devices are more blah blah blah.

then your heading should have been:
2. Some labor saving devices which are more troublesome than they are worth:
2.1
2.2

you have to guide the examiner. facilitate him. in your outline he has to do a lot of brain work. i hope i am able to convey my point.

Waqas,
well said indeed.

[QUOTE=futuristic;807729]Well guys I started this thread to know view point regarding the said essay.My fellow aspirants have tried very well and I pray for their mighty success.
Here is my outline ,I need your response.I cleared essay exam twice I.e 2013 and 2014 but you need never know when we is your bad day.
[U][B]OUTLINE[/B][/U]
[B]1.Automobiles.....synching distance or creating panic![/B]
Traffic jams,fuel issue,pollution..
Walk for health
[B]2.Computer and related items...a source of anxiety[/B]
Data coppied,corrupt,theft,operating system problem,software problem,electricity issue!
[B]3.Cellular technology.......leave me alone please!!![/B]
Have you installed the new app?
Charging issue,miss communication,near to friends far from family,increasing debt on p pocket
[B]4.Case studies:[/B]
A.Scottish referendum ....manipulating the results
B.Pharmaceutical industry (in this I explained a scenario in which wrong medicine was packed resulting in deaths)
5[B].IT devices and electronic gadgets .....increased dependence and dissatisfaction[/B]
Electronic dictionary vs printed one
ATM ...... A betrayal
Story of one day before eid.
Fraud,theft
Bank is better
[B]6.Online research: Copy paste PhD.s [/B]
Dilemma of developing countries
[B]7.email vs postal system[/B]
Delivered ,undilevered .....a headache!!
Loss if emotional sentiments and charm of letter opening
[B]8.Impact on our lives[/B]
Idleness,diss satisfaction.psychological distress,emotional disturbances,anxiety and depression.
In between I also added [COLOR="SeaGreen"]xerox machine,biometric system,social media[/COLOR] and problems associated with them.
Kindly share your valuable thoughts.[/QUOTE]
Your approach is fine, and you have very good chances of passing this essay paper.Now just for the sake of improvement and guidance of other members, I would like to make a few points. The topic was about "labour saving devices"; so It would have been very pertinent had you mentioned specific labour saving devices like forklifts, dumper trucks, chainsaw, lathe machines, cleaning machines,spray painting machines, assembly line equipment, etc. and written about their troubles like noise pollution, air pollutants, risk to human life, maintenance costs,need for specialized training to operate these machines, etc.
The main point to be remembered is that the essay was about " labour saving devices" not just about scientific inventions which have made our lives easier.So, in discussing all the examples, It was important to discuss the troubles of the device which was employed to save "labour" and to prove that these troubles were more costly than the actual worth of the device in terms of its efficiency, productivity and actual cost.In this regards, the example of computers which you have discussed in your essay is very relevant, and If you have compared their worth with their troubles then you have met the demand of the topic.Similarly, in all the other examples, one has to draw a comparison and prove the thesis statement.I hope this explanation will be helpful.

Labor saving devices are more troublesome than the worth.
 

Here is my outline. Its simple and clear. Its short but explanatory. :) Criticism is welcome.

[B]1- Introduction[/B]

[B]2- What are labor saving devices[/B]

[B]3- Benefits of labor saving devices[/B]
a) Reduced cost
b) Error free automation
c) Supports easy expansion of a business

[B]4- Hazards of labor saving devices[/B]
a) Unemployment
b) Capitalist economy
c) Social and moral disaster
d) Environmental pollution
e) Labor free society
f) Real world examples

[B]5- Conclusion[/B]

[QUOTE=waqas izhar;807760]@ futuristic

Bro your perspective is perfect i would say but here it is...

An outline is supposed to be 'clear'. see your outline begins with:

1.Automobiles.....synching distance or creating panic!

so what? What does it even mean? What are you trying to say?

the first line under the introduction heading should be your thesis statement. in this case you should have said that labor saving devices are more blah blah blah.

then your heading should have been:
2. Some labor saving devices which are more troublesome than they are worth:
2.1
2.2

you have to guide the examiner. facilitate him. in your outline he has to do a lot of brain work. i hope i am able to convey my point.[/QUOTE]
Valuable comments waqas
i shall like to answer your points
First, my thesis statement was crystal clear in the introduction part.
Second,I know you have to facilitate the examiner but i think in doing so you become a 5th grader.
Like as you say i must have written following labor saving devices are more troublesome:
Car
motorbike
cell phone
computer
What impression would it have given to the examiner? obviously this is a competitive exam.It requires some maturity.
I think examiner needs clarity rather than facilitation.
any how thanks alot buddy.

[QUOTE=behumble;807857]Here is my outline. Its simple and clear. Its short but explanatory. :) Criticism is welcome.

[B]1- Introduction[/B]

[B]2- What are labor saving devices[/B]

[B]3- Benefits of labor saving devices[/B]
a) Reduced cost
b) Error free automation
c) Supports easy expansion of a business

[B]4- Hazards of labor saving devices[/B]
a) Unemployment
b) Capitalist economy
c) Social and moral disaster
d) Environmental pollution
e) Labor free society
f) Real world examples

[B]5- Conclusion[/B][/QUOTE]
Nice attempt
Following aspects are noteworthy.
1.benefits of labor saving devices was not asked infact a comparison had to be made in which you must vote in favour of troubles associated with labor saving devices.
2.what are labor saving devices? This should have been given minimal importance.
Good luck.

[QUOTE=futuristic;808024]Nice attempt[/QUOTE]
Nice attempt
Following aspects are noteworthy.
1.benefits of labor saving devices was not asked infact a comparison had to be made in which you must vote in favour of troubles associated with labor saving devices.
2.what are labor saving devices? This should have been given minimal importance.
Good luck.

[QUOTE=behumble;807857]Here is my outline. Its simple and clear. Its short but explanatory. :) Criticism is welcome.

[B]1- Introduction[/B]

[B]2- What are labor saving devices[/B]

[B]3- Benefits of labor saving devices[/B]
a) Reduced cost
b) Error free automation
c) Supports easy expansion of a business

[B]4- Hazards of labor saving devices[/B]
a) Unemployment
b) Capitalist economy
c) Social and moral disaster
d) Environmental pollution
e) Labor free society
f) Real world examples

[B]5- Conclusion[/B][/QUOTE]
this is the comprehensive outline i was looking for.i was wondering if some one has mentioned the environmental problems.most of the aspirants seemed to have followed a narrow theme,focusing on one aspect of the essay.i wish i had attempted the essay like this.
well done

[QUOTE=khuram fayyaz;806636]Anyone here from medical field ??[/QUOTE]yes i am:ninja:

Very worried about my essay
 

Please give remarks on my outline on labor saving....
The evolution of man from stones to machines
How man has made luxury available at a single click of button
With every utility comes responsibility
How utilities can be hazardous if not handled with responsibility
Then I gave examples of at least five different utilities comparing their benefits with hazards and putting more stress on hazards part
(Automobiles cyber technology home electronic appliances and 2-3 others I don't much remember)
In conclusion told some responsibilities that govt and manufacturers should take
The sad part is that i couldn't complete the conclusion midway
My font was small (10-12 words per line) and 6.5 pages which would make it about 2000 words. Unfortunately I spent half of the time brainstorming :(
All are requested to give sincere evaluations on it
P.s. this is not the exact outline I have only given rough ideas which I discussed
Waiting for the responses

Can someone please evaluate my outline ?

I don't find any problems with your outline Sherix. It's pretty good. But then a lot depends on what you've stuffed it with. About the conclusion, you still managed to make the main points. Just pray now ;)