Originally Posted by Cogito Ergo Sum

You can write well. You have a good (above-average, almost nearing excellent) expression. You have a healthy repertory of words. You can do really well.

But in this particular essay, I don't think you have been able to do justice to the argument. You have failed to grasp the point and understand the meaning of the statement.

In my personal opinion, the statement "anticipation is often greater than realization" means that the thrill and excitement we have while anticipating something is much greater than the pleasure of actually having it achieved/brought into our possession. There are many examples. People struggling to leave their country to settle in Europe or USA, their days and nights filled with dreams of how their circumstances will change and happiness will chase them once they reach their destination; they often realize that the utopia they had imagined was merely an exaggeration of whatever they had heard and happiness is not waiting for them at the airport. I am a doctor, take my own example. During my FSc. , I used to fantasize being a doctor all the time. My sole motivation was the prestige I would gain if I successfully clinched admission on open merit in one of the top medical colleges of Punjab. After actually achieving that dream, I realized that there was nothing in it as I had imagined--at least not to an extent I used to fantasize. I had too over-rated a conception about the profession. And now, I am trying to run away from it (a bit ironic, haha) and join civil service. And you can have a thousand examples like this where anticipation was often greater than realization. As Behzaad Lakhnavi has beautifully said understanding this strange phenomenon,
"ae rahbar-e-kaamil chalne ko tayyaar to huu par yaad rahay...
us waqt mujhay bhatkaa dena jab saamnay manzil aa jaaye..."

Once you understand the meaning properly, write again. I will be happy to see your write-up. But remember, don't make me say that anticipation was greater than realization after reading your next effort.

Originally Posted by Cogito Ergo Sum

The structure of your introductory paragraph is correct. It just needs some reinforcement.

•The thesis statement is too generic—almost appearing cliched. It is no doubt acceptable. You can clear even if you stick with this style. But I think you're capable of more than this. Infuse some originality into it. Make it more title-specific. Just to give you an idea, this thesis statement can be used with almost any title (eg. Honesty is the best policy)

•Introduction should be succinct and brief, nobody is disputing that. But an introduction should also be comprehensive in the sense that it should reflect all the core arguments you are going to make along the way. For example, you have declared your intention to follow case-method technique. I think that in this essay, if you just follow this approach, you won't be able to use all the different forms of discourses that are demanded by the examiners: namely exposition, argumentation, narration, and description. Limiting your outline and hence restraining your introduction in such a way can make your essay appear deficient. So, I advise against putting a limit on your essay like this. Broaden it a little bit. And reflect that broadening in your introduction as well.