Check my outline and essay please.
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1- i didnot find your outline in the post.
2- please improve your writing.
3- I just went through the introduction and conclusion part and it didnot seems proper to me. Work a bit hard on your sentence structure and expressions. Try to learn attractive essay writing.

This is just my opinion and any senior or expert over here is more than welcome for correction.

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Sir jee first type your essay in Word or any other format than post it. Your this format is very difficult to read, its just eating brain.

My outline. Just writing the main headings cause i don't remember the sub-headings. There were 4-5 subheadings under each main heading. I argued that Feminism IS a third world issue and went against the topic. Everyone wrote from a different perspective and so did I.
Feminism in not really a third world issue:
1. Introduction
2. Focus of feminism
3. Why feminism is not considered a third world issue
4. Why feminism should be considered a third world issue
5. Benefits of considering feminism a third world issue
6.Conclusion

This is what I had written in another post a few months back but I can't get this uneasy feeling off my head. Can you please evaluate it? Thanks in advance.

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thanks for the comments.... i will rather care

What was your thesis statement?

That feminism is a third world issue.

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We can say issues raised in first wave and second wave feminism belong to first world but third wave seems too liberal too address the first world problems of exploited women.Main features of first and second wave movement are education of women, right to do job, domestic rights right to vote etc. Main features of third wave feminism are Lesbian feminism. lipstick feminism, pink feminism Femen movement, rights for sex workers and sex etc. If you have highlighted issued raised in first and second wave movement than your essay is on the track. It would we good to send complete essay for proper analysis.

If someone wants to attack the topic statement than he should adopt the perspective of first wave and second wave feminist movement and in case of defense of topic statement, one should highlight the issues raise in third wave.

Thank you very much for your reply. I didn't mention third wave feminism or any wave for that matter. I just said that because the overall goal of feminism is positive to achieve equality of women, to empower them, to improve their health, education, economic clout etc it should be considered an issue of third world. I discussed that reason it is not considered an issue in third world is because of misconceptions, religious reasons, economic conditions, etc. While saying that, I did mention that not all the ideas of feminism are suitable for implementation(like third wave feminism) but its overall goal is positive for third world and we can mold ideas of feminism according to our cultural conditions. I mentioned that implementing feminist ideas that are compatible with our religion and culture will improve economic health, political participation, and conditions of a family that serves as building block of society.

This pretty much sums up my essay and about as much as I can remember accurately. I am hesitant to keep adding details that I couldn't have possibly mentioned in the paper because that would mean that I am exaggerating. Looking forward to your comment on this. Thank you again.

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