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Tourism in Pakistan and its contribution to boost the economy
1. Introduction
2. Deterioration of tourism
a. Political turmoil
b. Military junta
c. Terrorism
d. Intricacy of via system
e. Sectarian violence
f. Security blemish
3. Policies for flourishing tourism
a. Tourism summits
b. E-visa system
c. Publicizing of cultural harmony
d. Security amelioration
e. Diplomats role
f. Campaign through social media
g. Involvement of international organization
h. Manual for tourists to explore beauty
i. Participation of private sector
j. Synchronization of central with provincial governments

4. Contribution in economic growth
a. GDP growth
b. Industrial progress
c. International trade uplift
d. Upswing in FDI
e. Employment opportunities
f. Infrastructure enhancement
g. Alleviate poverty
h. Promoting cultural heritage
i. Emerge as top destination in global tourism market
5. Conclusion .

From your outline i can assume your statement is: Why tourism was deteriorated in Pakistan (past), how it is developing (present) and so on...
Need to add more points in "contribution."
Make sub-heading a bit more explanatory.
The outline is good. You have jab the topic.
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Tourism in Pakistan and its contribution to boost the economy
1. Introduction
2. Deterioration of tourism
a. Political turmoil
b. Military junta
c. Terrorism
d. Intricacy of via system
e. Sectarian violence
f. Security blemish
3. Policies for flourishing tourism
a. Tourism summits
b. E-visa system
c. Publicizing of cultural harmony
d. Security amelioration
e. Diplomats role
f. Campaign through social media
g. Involvement of international organization
h. Manual for tourists to explore beauty
i. Participation of private sector
j. Synchronization of central with provincial governments

4. Contribution in economic growth
a. GDP growth
b. Industrial progress
c. International trade uplift
d. Upswing in FDI
e. Employment opportunities
f. Infrastructure enhancement
g. Alleviate poverty
h. Promoting cultural heritage
i. Emerge as top destination in global tourism market
5. Conclusion .
Good morning!

So let's take it step by step. Your outline overall is very all-encompassing, in fact I believe that is where the problem lies. You have discussed facets quite outside the scope of the topic. Let me explain.

The given topic is; Tourism in Pakistan and its contribution to boost the economy. This logically has two portions;
1) Tourism in Pakistan
2) Tourism's contribution to boosting the economy


You have not exactly included the first part at all. Tourism in Pakistan would include what type of tourism Pakistan attracts currently (there are many many types like cultural, educational, religious, sport, geo-tourism, business etc etc), what is our current direct revenue generated by tourism, what is our branding (all countries are "branded" in a way. A very successful branding would be America as "the land of the free". Or people in the west would think of places like the Caribbean or Greece as "exotic vacationing spots". These labels are carefully crafted and such brand imaging and slogans work for countries just like they would for a firm.), how much is spent on tourism etc etc.

Such factors would give the reader a good idea about the overall situation of tourism in Pakistan. Then you go a step further and explain why our tourism industry had not flourished substantially. This would basically be your point 2 reworded but "deteoration of tourism" is not a good title since our tourims industry didn't deteriorate. It has never existed in the first place. Yes, it did get worse post-9/11 but currently we are seeing a boom in the sector because the incumbent government is focusing heavily on it. You can find thousands of videos online of famous youtubers and bloggers making trips to Pakistan. If anything our tourism situation is getting better.

Your point 3 is basically recommendations and all recommendations come at the very end. After you have established WHAT our tourism situation is like and WHY is it even important that we focus on tourism (i.e. its contribution to development), only then you can come to HOW can we make it better.

Let me tackle point 4. It should be contributions TO economic growth. Point a, c, d, e are fine. Point h needs to be reworded. Cultural protection is not an economic benefit. You could rather state the point as "boost to small and medium industries and local handicrafts".

The rest of your points are not linked to tourism. They can be indirect outcomes but rarely if ever are directly related. Instead of b, f and g combine those points to talk about how tourism helps development pick up pace in far-flung areas. Remote villages will get electricity, running water etc etc if they become popular tourism spots.

Point i makes no sense. That is not a outcome but a cause of tourism. When you become popular in the international consciousness as a desirable tourist destination only then will tourists consider coming and you will get such benefits. So that shouldn't be under this heading.

Tourism also has other economic benefits; it can help us learn and innovate (as new ideas and ways of life come into contact, new ideas naturally emerge and constant innovation is the backbone of a progressive economy), tourism ties are good bargaining chips during international trade agreements, tourism reciepts bring in much needed foreign exchange(esp. Dollars). I can go on an on here but I suppose this is a good point to stop.

Tourism has far reaching impacts of the socio-cultural, political and environmental aspects of a country as well. But those weren't asked in the topic so best steer clear of them since they are vast sub fields in their own right.

Last remarks: you have done a very good job compiling the points, they just need more structure. My economics specialisation in masters was actually in tourism and development so this is a topic I'm fairly well versed in. I hope my comments helped in some way. Feel free to ask questions, I'd be happy to answer.
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Please have a look at this query too. I'll repeat it here too. Would quoting this article be good in an essay on Afghanistan conflict?
https://www.google.com/amp/s/www.bbc...world-46554097
The article is about how Taliban gets its food on the table. Where does it actually get the money from to do something no country or non-state actor would dare to do: fight the US military.
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Please have a look at this query too. I'll repeat it here too. Would quoting this article be good in an essay on Afghanistan conflict?
https://www.google.com/amp/s/www.bbc...world-46554097
The article is about how Taliban gets its food on the table. Where does it actually get the money from to do something no country or non-state actor would dare to do: fight the US military.
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You asked in your original query whether bbc was a reliable source; it is. Well to an extent. It is instantly recognisable but it is fairly biased. In any case a biased narrative can be just as misleading as false news so take everything you read from the bbc with a huge grain of salt.

As far as the article you have linked goes, it makes some good points. The drug business is one thing, the taliban also have extensive human trafficking and exort protection money "taxes" on people and businesses. They also smuggle goods across borders and take percentages. Kidnapping and ransom money (especially of foreign nationals) was very common in the earlier days for making huge sums of money at a time. There is also the fact that the Taliban actually have a lot "legitimate" businesses or just funding from powerful people across the world.

All the relief and development spending from countries like India in Afghanistan also inadvertently add to the Taliban's pockets. Most contractors of infrastructure pay "protection money" to the taliban even with all effort of the Afghan government to stop the practice.

What bothers me the most isn't the source of funding. You can find a thousand sources if you are smart enough. No the actual question is how are the inexperienced and uneducated leaders of the Taliban (at least the original ones) capable of even handling, moving around and just generally looking after such a vast network of finances.

By all account everyone admits that the Taliban have a substantial stream of income. It might not be a staggering amount but it is still impressive given the circumstances. Those revenue streams are also sustainabile to such an extent that most everyone has given up trying to get rid of the Taliban and instead moved to making some sort of agreement with them.

The taliban are here to stay is the clear message but the financial side of things is very very interesting. I genuinely would love an interview with the mastermind behind all of this in a few years (some western news outlets even claim that the ISI is behind it all. Good lord like we dont have enough of our problems to deal with). The Taliban have held up financially for the most part of two decades! I'm not their biggest fan but this is something worth looking into.
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Much obliged!!
sis you concise the topic in sublime way.... but still have 1 or 2 concern regarding deterioration considering 1970s era when industry was flourishing , generating a substantial revenue in GDP share.
Flaws was anticipated as just spent mere 30,40 mins in scrutinizing stated topic , Thanks for clearing it up .!
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You asked in your original query whether bbc was a reliable source; it is. Well to an extent. It is instantly recognisable but it is fairly biased. In any case a biased narrative can be just as misleading as false news so take everything you read from the bbc with a huge grain of salt.

As far as the article you have linked goes, it makes some good points. The drug business is one thing, the taliban also have extensive human trafficking and exort protection money "taxes" on people and businesses. They also smuggle goods across borders and take percentages. Kidnapping and ransom money (especially of foreign nationals) was very common in the earlier days for making huge sums of money at a time. There is also the fact that the Taliban actually have a lot "legitimate" businesses or just funding from powerful people across the world.

All the relief and development spending from countries like India in Afghanistan also inadvertently add to the Taliban's pockets. Most contractors of infrastructure pay "protection money" to the taliban even with all effort of the Afghan government to stop the practice.

What bothers me the most isn't the source of funding. You can find a thousand sources if you are smart enough. No the actual question is how are the inexperienced and uneducated leaders of the Taliban (at least the original ones) capable of even handling, moving around and just generally looking after such a vast network of finances.

By all account everyone admits that the Taliban have a substantial stream of income. It might not be a staggering amount but it is still impressive given the circumstances. Those revenue streams are also sustainabile to such an extent that most everyone has given up trying to get rid of the Taliban and instead moved to making some sort of agreement with them.

The taliban are here to stay is the clear message but the financial side of things is very very interesting. I genuinely would love an interview with the mastermind behind all of this in a few years (some western news outlets even claim that the ISI is behind it all. Good lord like we dont have enough of our problems to deal with). The Taliban have held up financially for the most part of two decades! I'm not their biggest fan but this is something worth looking into.
Thankyou for the detailed reply. Its partially their revenue streams and partially the fact that you can't take on a guerrilla group on their own land. They'll disappear and reappear another month/year. This is exactly what US learnt after dropping more bombs(in tonnage) in Vietnam than all of the WW2 combined. But it's actions are blaring evidence of it not learning from its follies at all.

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The future of Pakistan lies in Education

1. Introduction
2. How future of Pakistan lies in education?
A. Education brings economic prosperity
B. Education strengthens democracy
C. Education promotes justice
D. It ensures religious tolerance
E. It enhances is the quality of health
F.. it guarantees gender equality
G. It ameliorates the fields of science and information and technology

3. Why Education fails to bring positive changes in Pakistan?
A. Minimum share for education sector in the budget
B. Gender inequality prevails in the sector
C. Corruption is rampant in the sector
D. Education is politicized
E. Craming is common
F. Creativity is discouraged

4. Way forward
A. The state should make education its top priority
B. Obsolete syllabi should be changed
C. Modern facilities should be granted
D. Teachers should be trained effectively
E. Maximum share for education should be allocated in the budget

5. Conclusion




In past, education was in a dismal condition in Pakistan. Though, it improved for a certain period of time yet, permanent changes could not be incorporated to bring effective results of education to the society. The present condition of education in Pakistan is also not as effective as it is in developed countries. The future of Pakistan lies in education as it promotes economic prosperity, political stability, balance in society and religious tolerance. Education plays a vital role in the development of a society and it is very crucial for Pakistan to prioritise education at this stage because Pakistan is way behind from other educated nations in terms of advancement in various fields of life.






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Future of Pakistan lies in education

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1 How future of Pakistan lies in education

a) Education strengthens the democracy

b) It helps in job creation and poverty eradication

c) Education fights best against terrorism and extremism

d) Higher literacy rate results in decline of crimes

e) It ensures economic development

f) Education guarantees gender equality

g)Education helps in building a healthy Nation

h) It is strong tool to control overpopulation

i) Education makes the nation powerful

j) Positive image of the country


2 problems in education system of Pakistan


1) Small amount of budget is allocated

2) Lack of government schools, colleges and universities

3) Poverty forces the poor children to start working

4) Flaws in education system

3 remedies to cure the education system of the country

a) Huge amount of resources are required


b) Opening of new educational institutions


c) Improvements in educational structure

d) Poverty elevation and incentive programs

Conclusion



Introduction
In ancient times wars were waged to conquer the states and its resources. In the contemporary world battles are fought on the economic and diplomatic fronts. Similar results are achieved without bloodshed. It shows that education has transform the world and Pakistan is not an exception. It has changed the directions and goals of the the Nations. Education has brought inventions in all parts of life and modern technology is the most important one. It has enabled men to conquer nature. Today, human being is flying higher and faster than birds. Education has helped Singapore against poverty. It has empowered America to become the superpower state across the globe. On the other hand, Pakistan is facing numerous problems in this modern world. Democratic crisis and flaws in judicial system prevails in the country. In addition, unemployment and poverty rate is jumping day by day. Nonetheless, gender inequality is matter of serious concern in Pakistan. In the same way, illiteracy is encouraging terrorism and extremism in the society. The country is also facing severe economic challenges. In reality, education is best weapon to deal with the the existing problems of Pakistan. In contrary, the question arises whether the country's education sector has potential to meet the crisis certainly the answer is no . The state is spending small amount of budget on its education sector. Millions of children are out of school. Universities are following traditional pattern of teaching and lacking research oriented programs. Besides, all these issues dual education system adds fuel to the fire. To overthrow prevailing problems, Pakistan must invest its highest possible resources on education sector to bring the visible changes. It must be promoted on priority basis. Awareness campaigns must be launched to highlight the importance of modern education. Hence, it shows that if Pakistan wants to progress and prosper in the world, education is only solution for it.


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The future of Pakistan lies in Education

1. Introduction
2. How future of Pakistan lies in education?
A. Education brings economic prosperity
B. Education strengthens democracy
C. Education promotes justice
D. It ensures religious tolerance
E. It enhances is the quality of health
F.. it guarantees gender equality
G. It ameliorates the fields of science and information and technology

3. Why Education fails to bring positive changes in Pakistan?
A. Minimum share for education sector in the budget
B. Gender inequality prevails in the sector
C. Corruption is rampant in the sector
D. Education is politicized
E. Craming is common
F. Creativity is discouraged

4. Way forward
A. The state should make education its top priority
B. Obsolete syllabi should be changed
C. Modern facilities should be granted
D. Teachers should be trained effectively
E. Maximum share for education should be allocated in the budget

5. Conclusion

In past, education was in a dismal condition in Pakistan. Though, it improved for a certain period of time yet, permanent changes could not be incorporated to bring effective results of education to the society. The present condition of education in Pakistan is also not as effective as it is in developed countries. The future of Pakistan lies in education as it promotes economic prosperity, political stability, balance in society and religious tolerance. Education plays a vital role in the development of a society and it is very crucial for Pakistan to prioritise education at this stage because Pakistan is way behind from other educated nations in terms of advancement in various fields of life.

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Hello! I'll give my thoughts on it piece by piece. So let's start with the overall structure of the outline. It is thorough and very well thought out. One point I would like to make is that the main topic is The future of Pakistan lies in Education this is essentially covered in your point number 2. Since this is the actual topic itself it should be at least 50-60% of the total outline. The other two sections on the problems with our education system and how to improve it are additional and supplementary. So that's something to consider.

Taking your point two itself; 2. How future of Pakistan lies in education? Add "the" before future.

A. Education brings economic prosperity How? What will education do to help the economy? Be more specific. In fact it has been shown to be quite opposite. if structural changes aren't administered at the same time as education policies we are left with a highly-educated youth who are jobless. Some might turn to entrepreneurship but that requires credit and dealing with a system of rules (both legal and social) which do not support self-employment at all.
B. Education strengthens democracy Good point. Back it up with further sub points; it helps to implement the rule of law, it makes governance smoother, it boosts political participation, it raises accountability etc etc.
C. Education promotes justice Again how? It can raise awareness about your rights and duties but rarely does more education=more justice. In fact America still has issues with its criminal justice system and its lingering prejudice against black men. Where is the justice?
D. It ensures religious tolerance Solid point.
E. It enhances is the quality of health The sentence is grammatically incorrect. But solid point. More education, especially of women, lower infant mortality greatly.
F.. it guarantees gender equalityDoes it? Not really. You can have a Ph.D and still hold outdated views when it comes to gender equality. This is a structural and societal issues. Opening up more schools in an area is not going to make people send their daughters there. There is an issue of opportunity cost as well which is a whole other debate in its own right. Education will not "guarantee" anything.
G. It ameliorates the fields of science and information and technology Solid point. Education (especially higher education) will also boost innovation.

Looking at the above points, I feel you are confusing two thing here. More education does not automatically mean that people will be better citizens, more respectful or even that they will let go of old prejudices and/or biases. These are societal issues and require large changes than just improving the quality and quantity of education.

Here are some more impacts education can have that will better out future; education boosts easy and ready acceptance of new technology (helping us keep pace with the fast-changing world), quality education promotes peace and fosters tolerance and goodwill, Education is an invaluable tool to help empower women, More Education and dispersion of information can bring political stability (through a better understanding and involvement amongst the populace), Formal Education can help reduce chances of citizens falling prey to involvement with extremist organizations (not a given but it does reduce chances of one being blindly brainwashed), better educated citizens are a investment (human capital) and can attract foreign investment etc etc.


3. Why Education fails to bring positive changes in Pakistan? change it to "why education HAS FAILED to bring...". or "why our education policies don't work?"
A. Minimum share for education sector in the budget good point. Also discuss more political issues like how funds are withheld etc.
B. Gender inequality prevails in the sector
C. Corruption is rampant in the sector
D. Education is politicized

Nothing new nor particularly specific in B, C, D. Okay points but not solid arguments.
E. Craming is common
F. Creativity is discouraged
Can be combined into one and simply be a point on how we have focused on quantity in the past not the quality of education.

Add more points to this such as; education policy needs to be integrated with other development plans and especially the requirements of our country. We need more technical and vocation education institutes which directly educate the people for actual jobs. Vocational education is an important part of the education systems around the world especially in countries like Finland, Austria, Germany, New Zealand and Switzerland. It helps give direct jobs to people and prepare them to be contributing members of the economy. We in Pakistan also have a problem of serious adult illiteracy. How can we get these people back to school when there is so much stigma involved?

4. Way forward
A. The state should make education its top priority
B. Obsolete syllabi should be changed
C. Modern facilities should be granted
D. Teachers should be trained effectively
E. Maximum share for education should be allocated in the budget

This is fine. I see no problem with it. More points could be added, especially about integration, but overall very good portion.

In past, education was in a dismal condition in Pakistan. Though, it improved for a certain period of time yet, permanent changes could not be incorporated to bring effective results of education to the society. The present condition of education in Pakistan is also not as effective as it is in developed countries. The future of Pakistan lies in education as it promotes economic prosperity, political stability, balance in society and religious tolerance. Education plays a vital role in the development of a society and it is very crucial for Pakistan to prioritise education at this stage because Pakistan is way behind from other educated nations in terms of advancement in various fields of life. My main issue with your thesis statement/introduction is that it lays undue stress on comparison of Pakistan with other "developed countries". Don't generalize, be specific. Give examples like the Scandinavian nations and the Eastern tigers who all gave priority to improved the quality of their human capital and credit that vision change to be their single most important reason for success and prosperity today. Overall good but could be better. Also remember to include a hook. It does't have a good hook.


I think you have done a pretty good job with this topic. My points above are merely me nit-picking but I think one should never settle for "good enough". I hope my comments helped you in some way. Feel free to ask any questions and I'd be happy to help if I can.
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