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The para: Is Not properly punctuated. Lacks clarity. Contains multiple grammatical mistakes. Contains incorrect usage of words. Is poorly structured.
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Beauty of AI is "simulation". Your introduction didn't mention "simulation" at all.
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Besides, re-think on highlighted words / terms which require correct usage/placement. Don't mix different concepts in one sentence, maintain their sequence according to their relevance. Some concepts are overlapping.
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You outline is not aligned with the topic.
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Highest result of education is tolerance .
1 ) Introduction Outline 2) How education ensures tolerance 2.1 ) purpose of education is to succeed in life that requires a lot of time and patience 2.2) Failure is often part of life only continuous efforts can turn it into fruitful results which needs tolerance 2.3) Education highlights the flaws created by intolerance and disadvantages attached to it 2.4) The aim of education is character building and tolerance is one of the major element for good character 2.5) Education promotes discipline in the life and it cannot be achieved without patience 2.6) Tolerance is the best way to avoid conflicts and ensure peace that is priority of education 2.7) knowledge encourages to follow the rule of law and patience is key factor to it 2.8 ) One of the goal of education is to spread love and affection and it is not possible without tolerance 2.9) literacy injects sense of patriotism and patience plays a vital role in this regard 3) why education and tolerance both are prerequisite for Pakistan’s progress and prosperity 3a) Role of education in Pakistan's development a1) higher literacy rate will strengthen the democratic institutions of Pakistan a2) Diversified education will help abundantly Pakistan in job creation and poverty alleviation a3) knowledge highlights the value of human rights and gender equality a4) Education will help in controlling rampant growing population of Pakistan. a5) It will enable Pakistan to control the increasing economic crisis and ensure economic development 3b) How tolerance will make Pakistan a peaceful Nation b1) Tolerance discourages every form of violence in the country b2) Patience boost up love and affection between people b3) Tolerant people will always distance from extremism and sectarianism b4) Tolerance can makes the society disciplined and law abiding citizens 4) Conclusion Introduction Education is not only limited to knowledge, it is diversified term that has influence on our entire matters of life . Tolerance is best outcome of education . Both education and tolerance play crucial role in human development. These two decide the success and failure of men. Education helps in achieving the goals of life whereas as tolerance plays a vital role in character building. Education expresses the knowledge while patience helps in executing it . Both of these complements each other . Today, world has reached at highest point of scientific knowledge and this process is still continuous. Even having knowledge of all inventions scientists faced failure numerous times . But they continued their experiments patiently which brought fruitful results of their hard work. Thomas Edison, a renowned scientist , who had invented dozens of items . While inventing bulb he carried out many experiments patiently than achieved the desired result . Today , Pakistan is facing many socio-economic problems. In addition, the country is still facing issues in establishing successful democracy . If, Pakistan wants to progress and prosperity it needs to educate its masses and equip them with tolerance. Knowledge and patience are solution of almost all prevailing problems of the world. Universe can be most beautiful and peaceful place if Nations and its citizens acquire the knowledge and adopt patience in matters of life. Madam Aisha plz check my essay if possible Sent from my CPH1823 using Tapatalk |
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The topic is highest results of education is tolerance. The first question that immediately springs to mind is; what are the other results of education? a very small section dedicated to that aspect could lend some completeness to the outline. Moving on to your points; 2) How education ensures tolerance Try to use as much of the title wordings as possible. You could rephrase this as "how tolerance is a result of education?" or something similar. Your phrasing isn't wrong, it is just proper to refer back to the original topic wordings as often as possible to reinforce the idea. 2.1 )purpose of education is to succeed in life that requires a lot of time and patience very ambiguous. Patience is not equal to tolerance even if they are synonyms. They are two different traits. Tolerance is not related to time at all. 2.2) Failure is often part of life only continuous efforts can turn it into fruitful results which needs tolerance Again you are confusing the two terms of patience and tolerance. Rather confusing resilience and tolerance here. 2.3) Education highlights the flaws created by intolerance and disadvantages attached to it Okay point. A bit weak in argumentation. 2.4) The aim of education is character building and tolerance is one of the major element for good character Okay point. 2.5) Education promotes discipline in the life and it cannot be achieved without patience Again neither patience nor discipline are TOLERANCE. 2.6) Tolerance is the best way to avoid conflicts and ensure peace that is priority of education Is it? Educational institutions are probably the powder keg of all unrest and disorder since they not only are the birthplaces of many radical ideas but are also means to indoctrinate others. So peace and conflict avoidance are rarely on any priority lists for the educational sector. 2.7) knowledge encourages to follow the rule of law and patience is key factor to it again patience is not tolerance but the rule of law point is okay. 2.8 ) One of the goal of education is to spread love and affection and it is not possible without tolerance Doubt if it is an explicit goal of education. You are mixing cause and effect here. 2.9) literacy injects sense of patriotism and patience plays a vital role in this regard This is in fact sort of a counter-argument to the topic. Blind patriotic spirit can make people fairly intolerant towards other nations/races who were historically against them. For example; our Pak studies books paint the Hindus of pre-partition India as scheming monsters and hence today we have an ingrained hatred towards them. Yes, we can disagree with their policies and actions but irrationally hating an entire nation for things done by people nearly A CENTURY ago is the peak of intolerance. I feel you have not actually understood what exactly the topic implies. Tolerance can be a result of quite a few aspects of the education sector like; -When we enter school, we come into contact with people outside of our family/caste and we interact with those children daily building in us an understanding of the other way of lives and hence promoting a tolerant outlook. -History and Literature can help us understand how people of other eras, time periods and cultures live but it also makes us realize that we all have shared common human emotions. This builds empathy and tolerance. (for example, just give books from Jane Austen a read and you will feel like she was talking about a Pakistani social life today rather than 18th century rural England-same mama looking for eligible matches for their daughters, same daughters chaffing under the binds of society and so on and so forth. Another example is Shakespeare-read and understood all over the world 400 years after they were set because human emotions and desires stay much the same across time and cultures.) -Through promotion and inculcation of values such as cooperation and being happy in other people's successes in school work/assignments can promote tolerance as well. -Education makes us capable of accessing and understanding different narratives (especially political) and hence makes us less likely to be narrow-minded, racist and intolerant. You need to completely rewrite this portion of the outline and since this is the heart of it. I shall wait for a re-edit to start commenting on the parts after this. Here are a few links that i think might help you get a grasp of the topic better; https://www.esu-online.org/?policy=s...sive-societies (from the EU's pov but still very relevant to us), https://www.theguardian.com/educatio...-and-tolerance, https://hamariweb.com/articles/80670 (definitely recommend reading this. It has several excellent points) |
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Thank you so much mam Aisha for your valuable feedback and kindness
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