Brother what i meant to say is that remedy has not been asked in the topic otherwise it is well written and have good points.All the best

Outline is really nice.

aoa soomro g its good attempt no need to say that,but can u elaborate what u r going to write under the head "help from NATO".Regards Noor

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Brother dont loose hope.... your essay is wonderfull but there are some points that i have observed.

1- your starting para is not strong enough to carry your essay.
2- Irrelevency
3- you have been too specific in some cases
4- there is no much coherency is found in your paragraph connection

However, it can be best by your little effort of improvement.......Best of luck

Shahwani,

I am shocked to see your comments, and i feel dizy for you.
Brother you are right, i need little effort of improvement, but i am sure
you need many hours to improve yourself, because you lack to understand essay.

Hope you wont mind.

If you cannot tolerate, do not invite criticism.

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essay is well-written undoubtedly. i dont subscribe to opinion of one who said there is no coherency . there is ..

but soomro dear.. i don't fathom the opinion mostly given by the essay writers that poverty being one cause of terrorism..

can you elaborate please???

is it so that people hired for suicide bombing have nothing to eat ... so they earn little through bombing others... ... and leave the money for their followers... what is it that attracts them towards terrorism... is it money .. or is it that they have nothing to do ... so unemployment forces them to frustration and out of that they jump into being suicide bomber...???


or allll poor follow the said track ???

or is it mindset.. tht needs to be changed... through education??? development??? education may be the best tool.. but again highly qualified people fall into trap of terrorism


finally the last question is why we write argument in essay which doesnt seem to be that viable .

poor me i repeat my request pls tell me vt u r going to write u/ d head "help from NATO".pls reply thnx

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Please also elaborate on the main causes i.e. problem of Palestine, US presence in Holy Land of Saudi Arabia which resulted in formation of Al Qaeda, US presence in Middle East and now in Pakistan. Other causes which you elaborated are just the fuel, real ignition lies somewhere else.

Regards

No doubt your essay is pretty good but remedies u never discussed regarding future of operation rah-e-nijat. whether it should be continued or not as u have mentioned it in the causes of terrorism.

thanks