No doubt your essay is pretty good but in remedies u never discussed regarding future of operation rah-e-nijat. whether it should be continued or not as u have mentioned it in the causes of terrorism.
yet i need to put some points on the table for an open discussion. i believe the causes mentioned below in your essay might possibly fuel partisan movement or a seperatist movement but not terrorism. REMEMBER according to these terrorists we are not even MUSLIMS!!! So the causes must be other than the ones quoted by you!
3. Causes of Terrorism
a. Poverty
b. Injustice and Venality
c. Improper Government Setups
d. Red Tapism
e. Soaring Unemployment
f. Lack of Education
i Would go for:
lack of education, lack of government's control over the madrassahs, dual standards of education etc.
propagation of jihadist culture in our society during the Zia period.
economic backwardness of some areas.
our inefficient and short-sighted foreign policy.
According to me, It is not good essay because it contains many mistakes.
And Significantly, Yous essay contains wrong economic related figures.
I agree with Umar, Umar mentioned the real causes of terrorism.
Thank you for sharing this brilliant essay. I wanted to know if in the actual Essay exam we can give headings like you have given? I mean is it a sound practice to write Introduction, .... Evaluation ... Conclusion or is it just understood/implied?
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As for as its extent is concerned, you try to increase it little bite by adding the other effectual logics to make your avowal more sturdy otherwise it is accurate and will Inshallah secure the good score in exam.