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Plz All seniors,juniors and who cleared css written exam plz comment and give your worthwhile comments.Specially on 1st paragraph that how it should be start.Ist sentence of 1st paragarpgh of essay does matter???if yes then what would be your reccommendationz plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz

Islam, A religion of peace
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 The very word Islam means peace
 The cardinal message of Islam is love, tolerance, patience, humanity and simplicity.
 Islam despises sectarianism, extremism and bigotry.
 Islam has always been a target of hatred by the west which perceives islam as religion of fundamentalists, extremists and fanatics.

 Basically, there are two main reasons for this against islam:
i. This is a viscous propaganda which has been unleashed by western media and western rulers.
ii. On the other hand, this is also the result of irrational,un reasonable and extremists activities of some of the misguided Muslim outfits.
 Jihad has been the mere misunderstand word and is only taken for violence and fighting.
 Basically jihad stands for Goodness and struggle with in oneself and society.
 There is another propaganda going on that muslims become violent as soon as they grew in numbers.
 As far as this criticism is concerned there were some fundamental reasons for fighting wars.
 How theoretically islam has preached peace
1. first of all islam recognizes all the civilizations of world
2. Islam does not allow the use of force in the matter of faith.
3. islam condemns lawlessness
4. Islam condemns extremism of all kind
5. islam calls reconciliation through negotiation a victory
6. islam prefers forgiveness over revenge
7. war is the only last option in islam
8. Islam gives full rights to zimmnies
 Practical aspects followed by the Muslims to preach peace.
1. Madina Agreement with Jews
2. Sullah hudabia
3. Exemplary attitude of muslims at the conquest of Makkah
4. Conquest of Jerushalam
5. Muslim tolerant and peace ful rule in spain
6. Muslim ruler Salhuddine attitude during the crusades
7. Muslim Rule in India
 Islam has promoted peace by introducing certain reforms with in society at political, economic and social fronts.
A. Political reforms
1. No opposition in islam
2. Islamic principles point towards democratic
3. Form of Government
4. No room for inheritance
5. Open Access to rulers
6. Cheap justice
7. Human Rights
8. Full rights to minorities
9. Islam introduced reforms with reference to war
B. Economic reforms.
1. Islam believes in equal distribution of wealth
2. Islam wants eradication of Poverty
3. Islam Adopts Different measures to promote economic activities.
C Social Reforms
1. Formation of brotherhood and fraternity
2. Islam Promotes education
3. Islam gives full rights even to slaves


In a nutshell we all Muslims must be united to counter this viscous propaganda launched by west to malign the image of Islam, a religion of peace.


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The very word Islam means peace. It is a religion of peace and love. The cardinal message of Islam is love and fraternity, peaceful relations with all, honoring of pacts and treaties and no aggression. Islamic theories prevailed peace and love over the world. All the towering figures of Islam followed the golden principles of Islam and spread the message of Allah through out the world. Islam is entirely incompatible with terrorism. Islam has facilitated a Golden age of scientific discovery all over the world. It is only Islam which tolerate to all other religions.
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Plz All seniors,juniors and who cleared css written exam plz comment and give your worthwhile comments.Specially on 1st paragraph that how it should be start.Ist sentence of 1st paragarpgh of essay does matter???if yes then what would be your reccommendationz plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz

Islam, A religion of peace
Outline

 The very word Islam means peace
 The cardinal message of Islam is love, tolerance, patience, humanity and simplicity.
 Islam despises sectarianism, extremism and bigotry.
Islam has always been a target of hatred by the west which perceives islam as religion of fundamentalists, extremists and fanatics.

 Basically, there are two main reasons for this against islam:
i. This is a viscous propaganda which has been unleashed by western media and western rulers.
ii. On the other hand, this is also the result of irrational,un reasonable and extremists activities of some of the misguided Muslim outfits.
 Jihad has been the mere misunderstand word and is only taken for violence and fighting.
 Basically jihad stands for Goodness and struggle with in oneself and society.
 There is another propaganda going on that muslims become violent as soon as they grew in numbers.
 As far as this criticism is concerned there were some fundamental reasons for fighting wars.
 How theoretically islam has preached peace
1. first of all islam recognizes all the civilizations of world
2. Islam does not allow the use of force in the matter of faith.
3. islam condemns lawlessness
4. Islam condemns extremism of all kind
5. islam calls reconciliation through negotiation a victory
6. islam prefers forgiveness over revenge
7. war is the only last option in islam
8. Islam gives full rights to zimmnies
 Practical aspects followed by the Muslims to preach peace.
1. Madina Agreement with Jews
2. Sullah hudabia
3. Exemplary attitude of muslims at the conquest of Makkah
4. Conquest of Jerushalam
5. Muslim tolerant and peace ful rule in spain
6. Muslim ruler Salhuddine attitude during the crusades
7. Muslim Rule in India
 Islam has promoted peace by introducing certain reforms with in society at political, economic and social fronts.
A. Political reforms
1. No opposition in islam
2. Islamic principles point towards democratic
3. Form of Government
4. No room for inheritance
5. Open Access to rulers
6. Cheap justice
7. Human Rights
8. Full rights to minorities
9. Islam introduced reforms with reference to war
B. Economic reforms.
1. Islam believes in equal distribution of wealth
2. Islam wants eradication of Poverty
3. Islam Adopts Different measures to promote economic activities.
C Social Reforms
1. Formation of brotherhood and fraternity
2. Islam Promotes education
3. Islam gives full rights even to slaves


In a nutshell we all Muslims must be united to counter this viscous propaganda launched by west to malign the image of Islam, a religion of peace.


Essay

The very word Islam means peace. It is a religion of peace and love. The cardinal message of Islam is love and fraternity, peaceful relations with all, honoring of pacts and treaties and no aggression. Islamic theories prevailed peace and love over the world. All the towering figures of Islam followed the golden principles of Islam and spread the message of Allah through out the world. Islam is entirely incompatible with terrorism. Islam has facilitated a Golden age of scientific discovery all over the world. It is only Islam which tolerate to all other religions.
Try to start your essay with any relevant Ayat from Quran Pak which clearly suggests brotherhood, peace and tranquility. In this way you can gain the attention of reader. That Ayat should lead you towards complete essay. That Ayat should serve a purpose of Thesis statement (Hypothesis to be proved with valid arguments, evidences, explanations, illustrations and comparison during the whole essay.


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Islam has always been a target of hatred by the west which perceives islam as religion of fundamentalists, extremists and fanatics.

Do not indulge into blame game and never jump to criticize Western block or Non-Muslims. This shows your inner feelings which are driven by your emotional state of mind which is prone to biasness. Do not out rightly blame over them for defaming or causing harm to essence of Islam. We all know, they have always played a prejudiced role but topic of essay doesn't demand to explain specifically the factors of conspiracy against Islam. This is in our unconscious state of mind that Western block is against Islam and is involved in aggression over Muslims that is why you have hurriedly turned your essay towards West and started justifying your stance as you were asked to counter argue allegations of Non Muslims.

No doubt, you cannot live without discussing west or Non Muslims in this essay because implied message of topic do require inclusion of opposite side too. It would be better if you explain fully the essence of Islam with proper illustrations and evidences and bit by bit insert the flow of opposite factors which term Islam as a religion of violence. This should be clubbed wisely with impressive linkages and justifications but directly justifying your stance in the light of West's conspiracy shows weak linkage and mismatching theme.


Ending paragraph has again resulted in a blunder which is the main cause of failure of majority of the candidates in essay. Essay topic was neither "Islam vs West" nor it was "Muslims vs West"/Threat to Islam from West. So ending your essay with following para invites the paper checker to use his guns and penalize you in result.
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In a nutshell we all Muslims must be united to counter this viscous propaganda launched by west to malign the image of Islam, a religion of peace.
End of your essay should again revert back to the introductory points and should not contain your emotional message. Forget west in the end just praise Islam with valid and sensible quotes/verses/Ahadees in the prism of peace.




Work on your grammar and sentence structure because your introductory para shows your weaknesses in this area.

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The very word Islam means peace. It is a religion of peace and love. The cardinal message of Islam is love and fraternity, peaceful relations with all, honoring of pacts and treaties and no aggression. Islamic theories prevailed peace and love over the world. All the towering figures of Islam followed the golden principles of Islam and spread the message of Allah through out the world. Islam is entirely incompatible with terrorism. Islam has facilitated a Golden age of scientific discovery all over the world. It is only Islam which tolerate to all other religions

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Mr. Raz u have clarified it so nicely.
I am also writing an essay, then I will post it for ur comments.......
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Try to start your essay with any relevant Ayat from Quran Pak which clearly suggests brotherhood, peace and tranquility. In this way you can gain the attention of reader. That Ayat should lead you towards complete essay. That Ayat should serve a purpose of Thesis statement (Hypothesis to be proved with valid arguments, evidences, explanations, illustrations and comparison during the whole essay.




Do not indulge into blame game and never jump to criticize Western block or Non-Muslims. This shows your inner feelings which are driven by your emotional state of mind which is prone to biasness. Do not out rightly blame over them for defaming or causing harm to essence of Islam. We all know, they have always played a prejudiced role but topic of essay doesn't demand to explain specifically the factors of conspiracy against Islam. This is in our unconscious state of mind that Western block is against Islam and is involved in aggression over Muslims that is why you have hurriedly turned your essay towards West and started justifying your stance as you were asked to counter argue allegations of Non Muslims.

No doubt, you cannot live without discussing west or Non Muslims in this essay because implied message of topic do require inclusion of opposite side too. It would be better if you explain fully the essence of Islam with proper illustrations and evidences and bit by bit insert the flow of opposite factors which term Islam as a religion of violence. This should be clubbed wisely with impressive linkages and justifications but directly justifying your stance in the light of West's conspiracy shows weak linkage and mismatching theme.


Ending paragraph has again resulted in a blunder which is the main cause of failure of majority of the candidates in essay. Essay topic was neither "Islam vs West" nor it was "Muslims vs West"/Threat to Islam from West. So ending your essay with following para invites the paper checker to use his guns and penalize you in result.


End of your essay should again revert back to the introductory points and should not contain your emotional message. Forget west in the end just praise Islam with valid and sensible quotes/verses/Ahadees in the prism of peace.




Work on your grammar and sentence structure because your introductory para shows your weaknesses in this area.




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Bundle of thanx.Raz bhai your comments are very useful for me.the purpose of pasting essay here serves by your comments.

What are your reccommendations to improve my sentence structure plzzzzzzz?????
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WOMAN STATUS IN ISLAM
1. What is Islam?
2. Woman and there role in the society
3. Pre Islam state of woman
4. Islam and mankind
5. Islam and woman
6. Woman empowerment by Islam
7. Great Muslim woman of the history
 BIBI Ayesha
 Hazart Khatija
8. Renowned Muslim women of subcontinent
 Razia Sultana
 Maham Anga
9.Islam Vs The west on woman status
• Status of woman in the west
• Policy of Discrimination for muslim (Ban on Burqa)

10.Current status of woman in muslim society
 No good knowledge of Islam in most of the Muslim societies
 Tribal culture
 Unchecked Western style Modernization

11.Conclusion



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Islam is the religion of peace, brotherhood and fraternity. It gives complete code of conduct to lead healthy life. Islam guides mankind in each and ever sphere of this worldly as well as life here after.the misconception prevails in the west regarding conservatism of Islam about the woman right. However, in reality, it isn't the case rather Islam is the only religion which realizes the exclusive right of woman

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Bundle of thanx.Raz bhai your comments are very useful for me.the purpose of pasting essay here serves by your comments.

What are your reccommendations to improve my sentence structure plzzzzzzz?????
How one can improve sentence structure?????

plz share your reccommendation?????????

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outlined should be like that:
1.ISLAM AS A RELIGION
(a)parameters of its superiority
(b).flexible and peaceful religion
(c).Islam and other religion
(d).ISLAM and fundamentalist approach of three holy religions

2.MAN ORIGIN AND NEED FOR IDEOLOGY
(a).conflict in heaven and death of eve son
(b). social institutions fabrication with Islam
(c).Christianity versus Judaism versus ISLAM
(d).conflicts categorizes crusade wars
(e).ideological and revolutionary change and start of ATHEISM and birth of fundamentalism

3.WORLD WARS AND COLD WAR SCENARIO
(A).COLONIALISM VERSUS COLONIALIST
(B)MARXIST ,HITLER MOSALONI ,NAPOLEON AND JEWS KNIGHTS
(C).RELIGION IS MONOPOLIZED;IMPERIALISM,CAPITOL SAKE AND COMMUNIST
(D).ISLAM STANDS AS A LIGHT TOWER
(E).COLLAPSE OF COMMUNISM AND WAR ON TERROR
4.REAL MOTIVE BEHIND WAR ON TERROR
(A).AS A RISING GIANT "THE ISLAM"
(B).STRICT TO TERMS TOWARD EXTREMIST CHANGES
(C).INVASION ON MUSLIMS AS TO TERRORIZE THEM
AND SO ON IT IS NOT COMPLETE OUTLINE........................................... .....................
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For your kind information My Essay Title is "Islam as A Religion of peace"

Your some points are valid for the subject purpose

Raz bhai(Css qualifier) has also point out some mistakes which are sentence structure and Grammatical mistake.....

If you can say something about sentence structure,then it would be higly appreciated

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