Please check my essay: Disaster Management and Government Preparedness
 

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Disaster Management and Government Preparedness (2011)
Outline:
What is disaster?
Introduction to Disaster Management and Government Preparedness
National Disaster Management Authority
Hierarchy of NDMA
Types of disasters
Disasters in Pakistan
Risk Factors
Disaster Preparedness Phases
Recommendations

Disaster is the sudden event bringing great loss, damage, and destruction and devastation to life and property. Disaster may have the following main features
1. Unpredictability
2. Unfamiliarity
3. Speed
4. Urgency
5. Uncertainty
6. Threat

Disaster management can be the organization and management of resources and responsibilities for dealing with all humanitarian aspects of emergencies, in particular preparedness, response and recovery in order to lessen the impact of disaster.
The Government of Pakistan established the National Disaster Management Authority (NDMA) at the federal, provincial and district level. The Economic Affairs Division (EAD) is coordinating donors and the NDMA is responsible for the overall coordination of disaster response efforts by both the government and international community.

After the massive October 2005 earthquake, Government of Pakistan has established the National Disaster Management Authority. NDMA work closely with the federal ministries, government departments, the armed forces, UN agencies, and donors to mobilize, receive, and deploy relief goods. Relief activities are also being coordinated by provincial level and district-level governments.

There is no country that is immune from the disaster, although the type of disaster varies. There are four main types of disasters:
1. Natural disasters:
These disasters include floods, hurricanes, earthquakes and volcano eruption that can have immediate effects on human health and property as well as the long term effects. The floods cause landslides, earthquakes resulting in fires etc.
2. Environmental emergencies:
These emergencies include technological or industrial accidents, usually involving hazardous material, and occur where these materials are produced, used or transported, large forest fires are generally included in this definition because they tend to be caused by humans.

3. Complex emergencies:
These emergencies involved a break-down of authority, looting and attack on strategic installations. Complex emergencies include conflict situations and war.

Pakistan witnessed two mega disasters. Firstly, the earthquake in 2005. Second, the floods in 2010. The floods in Pakistan affected more than 20 million People in Pakistan. The floods of 1950, 1992 and 1998 resulted in a large number of deaths and severe loss of property valued at an estimated $1.3 billion. The other low intensity disasters which Pakistan faced are landslides, cyclones, and drought.

There are number of factors that increase vulnerability and contribute to the severity of disasters in Pakistan. These include:
 Poor structure of houses
 Weak early warning system
 Lack of awareness and education on disasters and response
 Limited cooperation between various Government disaster response agencies

Disaster Preparedness Phases:
The disaster preparedness phase include activities to develop operational capabilities and effective responses to a disaster, such as
1. Mitigation activity
2. Emergency or disaster planning
3. Training and exercises
4. Public education
Recommendations:
 There should be the proper policies and procedures on the natural disasters. Because of lack of policies, the masses have to face unavoidable damages.
 Public should be given disaster mitigation trainings in schools and colleges.
 After the relief phase, government has to give more focus on rehabilitation process. Government should establish the commission for the proper check and balance of this phase, so that the loss can be reduced.
 Government should immediately rebuild the entire infrastructure including the irrigation channels, communication systems, roads, schools, hospitals and the accommodation of Displaces persons (IDP’s).
All this process needs the comprehensive planning and policy measures.

Asslaam o Alaikum

Hadia,


Is it a complete essay or just the main point(elaborated outline)?
Well its a good attempt if its a first one.

I am not a very good judge but according to me you need to change the flow of essay.

Reply first my question then I'll tell what I feel about it.

Dear Hadia,
Its not an essay; even it does not fulfill even a single technical criteria of essay.
These are facts and figures about disaster and disaster management.
Before writing an essay you must:
learn basic techniques of unity, coherence, organization, and development.
must have an idea about thesis statement, introduction and conclusion.
and you should also know about topic sentence and concluding sentence.

For further detail read different posts regarding essay written by seniours.

well friends... first of all thnk u very much for the replies:-)
shikva it is i guess the just outline.... balky what i think i actually selected the wrong essay for my first attempt.....
i have selected it from 2011 essay paper, but it has no problem statement. i was stuck in the mid of the essay while i was writing bcz i had no idea what i was going to proof.......
its all my fault by choosing wrong essay.....

this is a wrong thesis statement "disaster management and Government preparedness".
it should be like, "role of disaster managemnet in pakistan" then we can write the far and against over it.
dont u think so?????????????

[B]Disaster Management and Government Preparedness (2011)
Outline:
1-What is disaster?
2-Introduction to Disaster Management and Government Preparedness
3-National Disaster Management Authority
4-Hierarchy of NDMA
5-Types of disasters
6-Disasters in Pakistan
7-Risk Factors
8-Disaster Preparedness Phases
9-Recommendation[/B]

u should change outline a bit
1-What is disaster?
5-Types of disasters
6-Disasters in Pakistan
2-Introduction to Disaster Management and Government Preparedness
3-National Disaster Management Authority
3-National Disaster Management Authority
4-Hierarchy of NDMA
7-Risk Factors
8-Disaster Preparedness Phases
9-Recommendation


now check it out..is it not much effective?

[QUOTE=hadia Khan;349658]well friends... first of all thnk u very much for the replies:-)
shikva it is i guess the just outline.... balky what i think i actually selected the wrong essay for my first attempt.....
i have selected it from 2011 essay paper, but it has no problem statement. i was stuck in the mid of the essay while i was writing bcz i had no idea what i was going to proof.......
its all my fault by choosing wrong essay.....[/QUOTE]

statement is nor wrong dear...u should write essay on any topic... good effort i appreciate..keep it up.

[QUOTE=hadia Khan;349662]this is a wrong thesis statement "disaster management and Government preparedness".
it should be like, "role of disaster managemnet in pakistan" then we can write the far and against over it.
dont u think so?????????????[/QUOTE]

it is much effective statement....

Its a good topic for essay


I guess you do need basic knowledge of essay writing


According to me:

Start with the introduction(starter,thesis statement,briefe overview)
disaster
types
history
geographical location of Pakistan
incidents from past
damages caused by them
govt actions(role of govt depts)
training
foreign n local aid
role of media
NGOs,civil society
criticism(corruption + trust deficit due to corruption)
Suggestions:
etc


its a quite extensive topic.
I am just giving you the flavor filhal.
But if you need I'll try to make a proper outline here

dear shikva... ur outline seems to me much better. hassan u jst changed the sequence of my outline, bt u told in ur previous replies that i jst wrote facts and figures nothing else.................