Religious Extremism and Militancy
 

Outline:-
*Definition of Religious Extremism
*What is Militancy?
*Religious Extremism in different religion followers
*Religious Extremism after 9/11
*Reasons behind Muslim Militants
Solutions for the Issue
-Introducing an unbiased,moderated and up-to-date syllabus for Madrassahs
-Setting up Real Democracy
-Enforcement of Law and Order
Conclusion: Table talk can give the solution of even a war.

Religious extremism tends to a state of mind of a person about his religion in which he has such firm belief on his concepts such that any negotiation from it is unbearable for him.He becomes aggressive towards the society. As not only he considers himself to follow the religion strictly in his way but wants the society to do so. If unfortunately someone refuses his thoughts, he can go to any limit to make that person acting upon his ideology. He can even commit the murder of disobedient person.
Militancy is aggressiveness irrespective of religion, race, nationality and language. A militant is not always a religious extremist as in the case of Tamil Tigers in Sari-Lanka. But a religious extremist is always a militant.
Religious extremism is found in various religions of the world. Unfortunately the propaganda is against Islam only. But the study of history provides the fact that extremists are found everywhere not only in Islam.
For instance, Christians have extremists in themselves too. Catholics and Protestants are two major religious groups in Christianity. They are so rigid that a protestant even can't think of marrying a catholic christian.
Hinduism contains vast example of religious extremism. Brahmans are the most noble group among Hindus while Shudders are the lowest. Shudders are treated worst than even animals. Even if a shudder hears the Holy voice of a Brahman, he is punished by pouring melt lead in his ears. He even can't walk over the shadow of Brahman.
Jewish are considered as most rigid and extremists on their religion. Crusade wars were fought due to their extremism. They were Almighty's favorite nation earlier. So, they suppose themselves beyond any law of the world. they even don't consider any nation equal to them.


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Likewise religious extremism is found in Islam too. There are many reasons behind it. If we study the world history, it is clear that Muslim nation has been a victim of distinct cruel behavior of several dominating religions. In Palestine, Somalia, Ethiopia, Kashmir, and Afghanistan, Muslims have been undergoing the terror activities of different forces over years. Not only this but non-Muslim powers are destroying the economy of third world countries that comprise on several Muslim countries. As a result of such injustice Muslim religious extremists committed the famous 9/11 attack leading to allow the international media to propagate Islam as religion of terror. Consequently Muslims came to hit list of all non-Muslim powers and they started to treat them distinctly.
These religious extremists caused harm to our country most. During last decade Pakistan has been suffering from several suicide attacks leading to high lost of property and humans. If anyone denies them, they shoot him immediately. Different other cruel punishments are given to disobedient.
These militants did brain washing of innocent people even of youngsters. They presented a wrong concept of Jihaad and give the greed of money and so-called "shahadat" leading to Jannah after death.The brain washed persons are so well trained that they even don't think about the action they are going to do.Sometimes they are unaware of the duty they perform.
This is the need of time to resolve this issue on emergency basis. As this is directly harming the lives of innocent citizens as well as the economy of the state. Moreover its really dangerous for the sovereignty of the country.
It is a bitter truth that most of the militants are given training in so called religious Madrassahs. Such institutes should be governed properly by the Government of the country. An unbiased and modern content of syllabus should be designed for these Madrassahs as the students here are studying the out of date syllabus. They are not aware of the modern world so behave rigidly towards the situations. An up to date knowledge will empower them to think about the realities.
Bitter democracy is better than the good dictatorship. Unfortunately, from the time of independence,dictators have been ruling over the country more than the politicians. Real democracy with its true soul should be given the way to be established in the country. So that a table talk can be done with the militants.
A country can sustain within the state of poverty but it can never survive in the absence of justice. This is why enforcement of law and order is essential for overcoming the issue. If due punishments will be given to the real criminals then there will be a satisfaction among the people that will prevent them from becoming a hunt for the militants.
Conclusion:- Through table talk the solution of wars can be found too. So we should do the same for dealing with this issue

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good outline add effects as well

It is incomplete outline without causes and conseuences of militancy

Brother please include causes and consequences also in your essay in order to complete the format.
There are so many causes of religious extriemism like poverty,lower literacy rate,deteriorated security situation,suppresion of muslims in different parts of the world and ignorance regarding islamic values and sayings.

[QUOTE=Erum Qureshi;407779]Outline:-
*Definition of Religious Extremism
*What is Militancy?
*Religious Extremism in different religion followers
*Religious Extremism after 9/11
*Reasons behind Muslim Militants
Solutions for the Issue
-Introducing an unbiased,moderated and up-to-date syllabus for Madrassahs
-Setting up Real Democracy
-Enforcement of Law and Order
Conclusion: Table talk can give the solution of even a war.

Religious extremism tends to a state of mind of a person about his religion in which he has such firm belief on his concepts such that any negotiation from it is unbearable for him.He becomes aggressive towards the society. As not only he considers himself to follow the religion strictly in his way but wants the society to do so. If unfortunately someone refuses his thoughts, he can go to any limit to make that person acting upon his ideology. He can even commit the murder of disobedient person.
Militancy is aggressiveness irrespective of religion, race, nationality and language. A militant is not always a religious extremist as in the case of Tamil Tigers in Sari-Lanka. But a religious extremist is always a militant.
Religious extremism is found in various religions of the world. Unfortunately the propaganda is against Islam only. But the study of history provides the fact that extremists are found everywhere not only in Islam.
For instance, Christians have extremists in themselves too. Catholics and Protestants are two major religious groups in Christianity. They are so rigid that a protestant even can't think of marrying a catholic christian.
Hinduism contains vast example of religious extremism. Brahmans are the most noble group among Hindus while Shudders are the lowest. Shudders are treated worst than even animals. Even if a shudder hears the Holy voice of a Brahman, he is punished by pouring melt lead in his ears. He even can't walk over the shadow of Brahman.
Jewish are considered as most rigid and extremists on their religion. Crusade wars were fought due to their extremism. They were Almighty's favorite nation earlier. So, they suppose themselves beyond any law of the world. they even don't consider any nation equal to them.


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From this section i must suggest you to work on following things in your further writings.

first mistake is in outline
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1.[/B]include point number fifth i.e Reasons behind Muslim Militants after point number three that i.e.Religious Extremism in different religion followers

[B]2.[/B] Do not include it [QUOTE=]Unfortunately the propaganda is against Islam only[/QUOTE]at this point, it look bombastic and biased, still you are in introduction and writing about extremism in different religions


[QUOTE=Erum Qureshi;408044]Likewise religious extremism is found in Islam too. There are many reasons behind it. If we study the world history, it is clear that Muslim nation has been a victim of distinct cruel behavior of several dominating religions. In Palestine, Somalia, Ethiopia, Kashmir, and Afghanistan, Muslims have been undergoing the terror activities of different forces over years. Not only this but non-Muslim powers are destroying the economy of third world countries that comprise on several Muslim countries. As a result of such injustice Muslim religious extremists committed the famous 9/11 attack leading to allow the international media to propagate Islam as religion of terror. Consequently Muslims came to hit list of all non-Muslim powers and they started to treat them distinctly.
These religious extremists caused harm to our country most. During last decade Pakistan has been suffering from several suicide attacks leading to high lost of property and humans. If anyone denies them, they shoot him immediately. Different other cruel punishments are given to disobedient.
These militants did brain washing of innocent people even of youngsters. They presented a wrong concept of Jihaad and give the greed of money and so-called "shahadat" leading to Jannah after death.The brain washed persons are so well trained that they even don't think about the action they are going to do.Sometimes they are unaware of the duty they perform.
This is the need of time to resolve this issue on emergency basis. As this is directly harming the lives of innocent citizens as well as the economy of the state. Moreover its really dangerous for the sovereignty of the country.
It is a bitter truth that most of the militants are given training in so called religious Madrassahs. Such institutes should be governed properly by the Government of the country. An unbiased and modern content of syllabus should be designed for these Madrassahs as the students here are studying the out of date syllabus. They are not aware of the modern world so behave rigidly towards the situations. An up to date knowledge will empower them to think about the realities.
Bitter democracy is better than the good dictatorship. Unfortunately, from the time of independence,dictators have been ruling over the country more than the politicians. Real democracy with its true soul should be given the way to be established in the country. So that a table talk can be done with the militants.
A country can sustain within the state of poverty but it can never survive in the absence of justice. This is why enforcement of law and order is essential for overcoming the issue. If due punishments will be given to the real criminals then there will be a satisfaction among the people that will prevent them from becoming a hunt for the militants.
Conclusion:- Through table talk the solution of wars can be found too. So we should do the same for dealing with this issue[/QUOTE]

How could you define problem of Muslim and reasons behind their extremism, before [QUOTE]*Religious Extremism after 9/11[/QUOTE]

I found many mistakes are there so work these mistakes to became a good writer. I think it is your first attempt. so do not be panic and keep writing.

[B]If you want my views in summarized manner then i must suggest you to work on:[/B]

1. Sentence structure
2. English vocabulary (because your words aren't making the flow of sentence)
3. Outline seems very loose and not according to title (it looks confuse, what you are defining either it is understanding the extremism or it is about the state of extremism that we are facing or what?)
4. Work on the outline flow (you get away from outline in introduction and main body)
5. you misconceived the points and it looks that you biased and it looks that you try to emphasis that reasons behind the extremism and propaganda against Islam.
6. you became specific about problems of Pakistan, which was not mentioned in outline.

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So work on these points and then INSHALLAH you will be able to write in better format. actually these are mistakes that everyone do in starting, but slowly and gradually you will counter them.
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How could you define problem of Muslim and reasons behind their extremism, before
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Kindly do not include this point from suggestions, actually i was editing it but time of editing was finished.

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thanks to all of u specially Mr. Khoro for highlighting my mistakes. I will soon upload further writings. Hopefully they will be improved