*Future of Democracy in Pakistan*
 

Seniors and moderators,plz come up with your comments on the outline given below.


Future of Democracy in Pakistan


Outline

1) Introduction
2) Present slot of democracy in Pakistan
3) Factors leading to bright future of Democracy
a) Mass awareness through education
b) Free and fair media/candid journalists
c) Mutual consensus and cooperation among parties
d) Changing dimensions/Abrogation of ritual/traditional politics and rise of the third political force
e) Restoration of Charter of democracy
f) Unveiling of lootacracy, horse-trading, floor-crossing and rigging in election

4) Steps taken by the Government for strengthening democracy
a) Abolition of 58(2(b)) through 18th amendment
b) Provincial autonomy through 20th amendment
c) Fledge of COAS for support of democratic process
d) Judicial activism
e) Asghar Khan verdict: a greater beneficiary for the coming elections
f) Superiority of Supreme Court accented by the executive and legislative bodies of the country
g) Least interest of Army in political intervention
h) Relinquishment of the “Doctrine of Necessity”.
i) Balochistan Package (Aghaz-e-huqooq-e-Balochistan) pervasive in bringing Baloch leaders to country’s mainstream.
j) Consensus and collaboration of the government with its alliance and opposition

5) Steps taken by the International Power Players in this regard
a) Least interest in transgression and derailment of democracy
b) Paradigm shift from unipolar to multipolar blocs: no place for Military interventions
c) Arab Spring awakened Pakistani people
d) Rise of functionalism and regionalism led to no-war

6) Normalization of Indo-Pak relations led to monopolization of the sizes of the armies
7) Suggestions recommendable for further strong hold of democracy

8) Conclusion

[QUOTE=IMTIAZ AHMAD KHAN;530889]Seniors and moderators,plz come up with your comments on the outline given below.


Future of Democracy in Pakistan


Outline

1) Introduction
2) Present slot of democracy in Pakistan
3) Factors leading to bright future of Democracy
a) Mass awareness through education
b) Free and fair media/candid journalists
c) Mutual consensus and cooperation among parties
d) Changing dimensions/Abrogation of ritual/traditional politics and rise of the third political force
e) Restoration of Charter of democracy
f) Unveiling of lootacracy, horse-trading, floor-crossing and rigging in election

4) Steps taken by the Government for strengthening democracy
a) Abolition of 58(2(b)) through 18th amendment
b) Provincial autonomy through 20th amendment
c) Fledge of COAS for support of democratic process
d) Judicial activism
e) Asghar Khan verdict: a greater beneficiary for the coming elections
f) Superiority of Supreme Court accented by the executive and legislative bodies of the country
g) Least interest of Army in political intervention
h) Relinquishment of the “Doctrine of Necessity”.
i) Balochistan Package (Aghaz-e-huqooq-e-Balochistan) pervasive in bringing Baloch leaders to country’s mainstream.
j) Consensus and collaboration of the government with its alliance and opposition

5) Steps taken by the International Power Players in this regard
a) Least interest in transgression and derailment of democracy
b) Paradigm shift from unipolar to multipolar blocs: no place for Military interventions
c) Arab Spring awakened Pakistani people
d) Rise of functionalism and regionalism led to no-war

6) Normalization of Indo-Pak relations led to monopolization of the sizes of the armies
7) Suggestions recommendable for further strong hold of democracy

8) Conclusion[/QUOTE]

sounds interesting, It would be a great help for us all if you could share the related material as well, May be a full essay or your notes on the topic...

dear u have to give a thesis statement before going to making intro and outlines when an essay is like future of democracy in pakistan.I.e whether it is bright or uncertain.If uncertain take it long if bright,must be given bright areas with certain developments.by the way ur essay material is good.

AoA,

Probably there is lot of irrelevancy in this outline with great room of improvement. A little point-wise critical effort has been made in following lines to improve it;

[QUOTE=IMTIAZ AHMAD KHAN;530889]
2) Present slot of democracy in Pakistan
[/QUOTE]

i). Better to replace word 'lot' instead of 'slot'.

ii). Instead of making it a separate heading, add it as a sub-point of point of 3 or rephrase this heading e.g. 'current state of politics,' or 'present scenario,' or 'today's democracy' etc.

[QUOTE=IMTIAZ AHMAD KHAN;530889]
3) Factors leading to bright future of Democracy
a) Mass awareness through education
b) Free and fair media/candid journalists
c) Mutual consensus and cooperation among parties
d) Changing dimensions/Abrogation of ritual/traditional politics and rise of the third political force
e) Restoration of Charter of democracy
f) Unveiling of lootacracy, horse-trading, floor-crossing and rigging in election[/QUOTE]

i). Sub-point b: If we have a general comparison of world, our media is very free and outspoken, which is often cause of misinformation and disinformation. Resultalty, media is playing a very bad role. So, the word 'free' should be erased from sub-point (b) and sentence rephrased.

ii). Sub-point c: Mutual consensus and cooperation among parties for what? For strengthening democracy or for waiting for their turn to fill their bank accounts!

iii). Sub-point d: Who will change the dimension of current politics from ritual/tradiationl politics? Perhaps a bloody revolution!

iv). Sub-point e: Charter of democrary was an alliance against the rule of General Pervez Musharraf, and has lost its value and validity.

v). Sub-point f: Unveiling lotacracy, floor-crossing, & horse trading? Unveiling from whom? Everybody knows it from politicians to journalists, from executive to judiciary, and from rich to poor.

[QUOTE=IMTIAZ AHMAD KHAN;530889]
4) Steps taken by the Government for strengthening democracy
a) Abolition of 58(2(b)) through 18th amendment
b) Provincial autonomy through 20th amendment
c) Fledge of COAS for support of democratic process
d) Judicial activism
e) Asghar Khan verdict: a greater beneficiary for the coming elections
f) Superiority of Supreme Court accented by the executive and legislative bodies of the country
g) Least interest of Army in political intervention
h) Relinquishment of the “Doctrine of Necessity”.
i) Balochistan Package (Aghaz-e-huqooq-e-Balochistan) pervasive in bringing Baloch leaders to country’s mainstream.
j) Consensus and collaboration of the government with its alliance and opposition[/QUOTE]

i). Steps taken by 'current government or current parliament' !

ii). Fledge of COAS? (sub point c & g) what role is played by government for this?

iii). Has judicial activisim strengthened democracy? What is role played by government on this account?

iv). Asghar Khan verdict? Will it strengthen democracry? when the beneficiaries are not given any lesson?

v). Relinquishment of Doctrine of Necessity? Was there any need for any such thing in current Parliament period? Or did any body try for this?

vi). What did Balochistan Package for bringing Baloch leaders into main stream?? Mengals six points or anything else!

vii). Consensus and collaboration or good politics :).

[QUOTE=IMTIAZ AHMAD KHAN;530889]
5) Steps taken by the International Power Players in this regard
a) Least interest in transgression and derailment of democracy
b) Paradigm shift from unipolar to multipolar blocs: no place for Military interventions
c) Arab Spring awakened Pakistani people
d) Rise of functionalism and regionalism led to no-war
[/QUOTE]

i). Is this heading useful for writing on this topic?

ii). Least interest! Are we having any proof that previously the international powers played great role? Who were these powers!!

iii). Paradigm shift? HOw come? What are multipolar blocs!! Really there is no military intervention anywhere? Iraq and Afghanistan? or Libya? or now current example of Syria trouble??

iv). How Arab spring awakended Pakistanis? If it has awakened then why there is no revolution in Pakistan? There is perhaps no comparison of Arab Spring with Pakistan or is there any!

v). Funcationalism and Regionalism are stopping wars? Which wars? what is it having link with democracy in Pakistan??

[QUOTE=IMTIAZ AHMAD KHAN;530889]

6) Normalization of Indo-Pak relations led to monopolization of the sizes of the armies
[/QUOTE]

Is there normalization in Indo Pak relations? and what is this monopolization of sizes of armies! .

Thans Wasim and T.S.Awan for your helpful and timely suggestions!
Yes Awan,your points carry weight and are relevant.I will try to constitute my essay on the groungs you suggested.I have written another outline.Plz check it too and come up with your guidelines about it.

regards

[QUOTE=Muhammad T S Awan;532849]AoA,

Probably there is lot of irrelevancy in this outline with great room of improvement. A little point-wise critical effort has been made in following lines to improve it;



i). Better to replace word 'lot' instead of 'slot'.

ii). Instead of making it a separate heading, add it as a sub-point of point of 3 or rephrase this heading e.g. 'current state of politics,' or 'present scenario,' or 'today's democracy' etc.



i). Sub-point b: If we have a general comparison of world, our media is very free and outspoken, which is often cause of misinformation and disinformation. Resultalty, media is playing a very bad role. So, the word 'free' should be erased from sub-point (b) and sentence rephrased.

ii). Sub-point c: Mutual consensus and cooperation among parties for what? For strengthening democracy or for waiting for their turn to fill their bank accounts!

iii). Sub-point d: Who will change the dimension of current politics from ritual/tradiationl politics? Perhaps a bloody revolution!

iv). Sub-point e: Charter of democrary was an alliance against the rule of General Pervez Musharraf, and has lost its value and validity.

v). Sub-point f: Unveiling lotacracy, floor-crossing, & horse trading? Unveiling from whom? Everybody knows it from politicians to journalists, from executive to judiciary, and from rich to poor.



i). Steps taken by 'current government or current parliament' !

ii). Fledge of COAS? (sub point c & g) what role is played by government for this?

iii). Has judicial activisim strengthened democracy? What is role played by government on this account?

iv). Asghar Khan verdict? Will it strengthen democracry? when the beneficiaries are not given any lesson?

v). Relinquishment of Doctrine of Necessity? Was there any need for any such thing in current Parliament period? Or did any body try for this?

vi). What did Balochistan Package for bringing Baloch leaders into main stream?? Mengals six points or anything else!

vii). Consensus and collaboration or good politics :).



i). Is this heading useful for writing on this topic?

ii). Least interest! Are we having any proof that previously the international powers played great role? Who were these powers!!

iii). Paradigm shift? HOw come? What are multipolar blocs!! Really there is no military intervention anywhere? Iraq and Afghanistan? or Libya? or now current example of Syria trouble??

iv). How Arab spring awakended Pakistanis? If it has awakened then why there is no revolution in Pakistan? There is perhaps no comparison of Arab Spring with Pakistan or is there any!

v). Funcationalism and Regionalism are stopping wars? Which wars? what is it having link with democracy in Pakistan??



Is there normalization in Indo Pak relations? and what is this monopolization of sizes of armies! .[/QUOTE]
DearT.S.Awan
Can you please give us your own recommended outline.