please argue about this outline! is it able to get pass
 

[B]free speech should have limitations
1. Introduction[/B]
[B]2. Forums of free speech and its impact
[/B]i- use of loudspeaker for the hate speech in mosques and sectarianism
ii- free speech on social media (facebook, twitter..)
iii- free speech at public gathering ( killing of Bashir Bilour at a gathering)
iv- through newspapers ( caricatures in dutch newspaper)
[B]3. Consequences of free speech[/B]
i- Institutional disharmony (politics vs Supreme Court, Babar Awan scenario)
ii-provincial disharmony ( hate speech of political leaders against each othe, Kalabagh dam as an example)
iii- Interfaith disharmony ( inocence of muslims and killing of american diplomated in Libya)
iv- Disintegration at family level (even families are divided... etc)
[B]4. Suggestions[/B] (amendments in national laws of each country, defined limitations on free speech in UN's civil and political rights) and free speech on particular forums only ( as parliament in Pakistan)
5. [B]Conclusion[/B] ( free speech should be ducted by strict laws... because there is freedom of speech only not freedom to offend...):wait:confused:

fourpoints
 

only four points ??????:thinking well essay needs 15 to 18 points for hi.fi marks,,,keep practicing

[QUOTE=ambitious gal;645538]only four points ??????:thinking well essay needs 15 to 18 points for hi.fi marks,,,keep practicing[/QUOTE]

Sir! each of the sub-point (sub-heading) is itself a separate paragraph.... collectively it makes about 14 paragraphs..... 18pages, I've taken CE-2013 attempt (sadly)....

If expectation is just to get pass (40-mks), will it be materialized?

not a comprehensive and attractive outline.
You missed a lot of points like
* what is free speech?
* good bad limitations etc
2nd thing forums of free speech and impacts if you wrote with seperate headings it has good impression.

last your essay is more critical with little suggestions and good impact of free speech.

but i hope you covered your points well in explanation.

all the best.

regards

[QUOTE=very special 1;645602]not a comprehensive and attractive outline.
You missed a lot of points like
* what is free speech?
* good bad limitations etc
2nd thing forums of free speech and impacts if you wrote with seperate headings it has good impression.

last your essay is more critical with little suggestions and good impact of free speech.

but i hope you covered your points well in explanation.

all the best.

regards[/QUOTE]

yes i think, I have presented only one side of the coin ( the bad one) and I thought that [B]limitations[/B] on free speech is to prove. In each paragraph I was able to prove that free speech has posed [B]only hurts[/B] to the world. But you have pointed out the thing that was of crucial importance, that one should give the examples of both sides ( fruits of free speech and perils of F.speech),,,,, and in conclusion one should prove that above examples suggest that free speech without limitations has produced more harm than peace!!!!!!

Don't worry. Getting into these speculations at this time will only make you anxious. Pray to Allah for your success and wait for the result. Keep calm!

Good'luck!

[QUOTE=AAawan;645605]yes i think, I have presented only one side of the coin ( the bad one) and I thought that [B]limitations[/B] on free speech is to prove. In each paragraph I was able to prove that free speech has posed [B]only hurts[/B] to the world. But you have pointed out the thing that was of crucial importance, that one should give the examples of both sides ( fruits of free speech and perils of F.speech),,,,, and in conclusion one should prove that above examples suggest that free speech without limitations has produced more harm than peace!!!!!![/QUOTE]
dont worry, Insa ALLAH you will score good. prayers make the difference.

regards

plz plz some senior read and criticize
 

[QUOTE=very special 1;646177]dont worry, Insa ALLAH you will score good. prayers make the difference.

regards[/QUOTE]

I found that outline too good. But the thing is I am naive in this essay field. I wrote a paragraph. Please please some one check it and criticize so that I can improve.
Name of Essay "Over Population"
"World population:
World population means the total number of human beings living on the globe of earth. World population has risen up to an unprecedented level. This over population is molesting the status of human lives on earth. Approximately all of the social and economical problems stem from this irreversible natural but controllable process. A looming catastrophe in the form of overpopulation is in the way. Extra population is causing more wastage of resources that could have been used for the improvement of human development index. Extra population is consuming food, energy, and all other resources. Extra population is creating social problems in turn with drop down in standard of life. Population must be controlled with law and through temptation, as it has been done in China, and is being done in India. Both China and India were on the verge of population explosion. They have adopted policies which are proving promising hence for, in case of China. Today world is standing at seven billion of population. Population increase at any time is proportional to the present population at that stage. This means a simple thing: time rate of change of population will increase with time.
"

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reply!!
 

[QUOTE=googlechrome;646755]I found that outline too good. But the thing is I am naive in this essay field. I wrote a paragraph. Please please some one check it and criticize so that I can improve.
Name of Essay "Over Population"
"World population:
World population means the total number of human beings living on the globe of earth. World population has risen up to an unprecedented level. This over population is molesting the status of human lives on earth. Approximately all of the social and economical problems stem from this irreversible natural but controllable process. A looming catastrophe in the form of overpopulation is in the way. Extra population is causing more wastage of resources that could have been used for the improvement of human development index. Extra population is consuming food, energy, and all other resources. Extra population is creating social problems in turn with drop down in standard of life. Population must be controlled with law and through temptation, as it has been done in China, and is being done in India. Both China and India were on the verge of population explosion. They have adopted policies which are proving promising hence for, in case of China. Today world is standing at seven billion of population. Population increase at any time is proportional to the present population at that stage. This means a simple thing: time rate of change of population will increase with time.
"

:con[/QUOTE]

Your paragraph envisages that you are striving for the best! keep it up and do more, do more, do more..... you need (sincerely) a lot of improvement particularly in expression and grammer.... statistical data is needed as well for further make-up of your expression (if you are going to attempt a statistic and fact based topic)....[COLOR="blue"][B]topics are not usually so simple like your one... there will be a topic in which you might be asked TO THNK OUT OF THE BOX!!![/B][/COLOR]
Best of luck!

I think you made this outline in hurry. First of all u should think of topic then jot down the points come in your mind then arrange the points according to the importance of the topic, covering four corners of the topic. Creativity demands thoughts and concentration. May god Bless u ........
Rana Khawer