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[B]Please evaluate the Essay below and kindly provide some constructive points that I can incorporate into my overall writing. I will be really grateful if you can read it completely rather than just the outline.

Thank you for taking out the time to do so[/B]

[B][SIZE="3"]Dangers of Unlimited Power[/SIZE][/B]

Introduction
Man’s imperfection and his desire for power
Power defined
Sources of power and dangers they pose
Science as a Source
Nuclear Bomb, Abortion, Global Warming
Politics as a Source
Corruption, Dictatorship, Slavery
Economic/Money as a source
Economic slavery, Corporations, Plutocracy
Social effects
Stratification, Human Rights Violation
Conclusion



A saying goes that “Power corrupts but ultimate power corrupts ultimately”. Such is the allure of power that leads a man to destruction if not leashed. Man was designed to be imperfect, for it is in his nature to err. Similarly, he also has the tendency to be drawn to evil and selfish desires. A combination of the latter with the former is a formula for destruction. Adding to this an unlimited power he can create havoc as has been proved in the past and is being verified today.
History informs us that when one man or one nation acquired more than its need, it has used these resources to acquire even more. This happens to be true in all walks of life whether political, social or economical. One can see great strides in science and technology, but all of this has come with a great price as well. The power that has yielded this progress has also hampered us in many ways, morally and practically. Power thus can be looked upon as a force that affects or changes not only the one yielding it but also that around him living or non-living.
When one considers power the first thing that comes to mind is the power of science. Science has revolutionized our world in ways unheard and unprecedented. Nevertheless, science brings with itself the power of a nuclear bomb as well. The one utterly devastating creation of man was born when nations leaders had unlimited power granted to them by its people. This abomination killed thousands and thousands of people at a time when man had to prove his might. Similarly, let us not forget a man’s tendency to play god when he created techniques of abortion and contraception in the name of science. Since science lacks the chapter of morals, mankind has used it to vandalize Mother Nature anyway they sees fit. To what end? One might ask. Today we sit scared and without answers in the shadow of global warming. Having exhausted our Mother Nature capacity to provide for us, we await our doom. All of this happened so because unleashed and unlimited power was provided to science to exploit nature. The laws and politicians who implement these laws could have stopped this doom, alas they search for the same unlimited power.
Just like science, politics takes its toll as well. Starting with unshackled politicians, who in the name of the people fill their own coffers. Where the hand of the law is supreme and they are restricted by it, they tread with caution. On the contrary, they roam free in lands with no laws and loot with impunity thus yielders of unlimited power. Corruption is rife thus leading to little or no growth in these countries while elsewhere nations prosper. The unlimited power that these countries provide has left them marginally poor and so the man that was created equal is now stratified into classes.
Similarly one cannot ignore the zenith of corruption in politics called dictatorship. Infested with the disease of corruption, dictatorships are the microcosms of unlimited power states. When one man decides for the people at large, it not only results in human rights abuse but also in the birth of patronage. Dictators have wreaked havoc over lands today specially on Muslims in the Middle East. The proverbial “Arab Uprising” and the death of hundreds of people is on their hands. Not to forget the blood of the countless innocents before them that led to this revolution. Dictators with unlimited powers have always enslaved people whether they were in the form of men like Bashr-ul-Asad is today or in the form of a state like the 18th century British Empire.
Colonialism was the name given to this dictatorship. Where a Saxon was the master and others the slaves, to fulfill any need the master desired or to be disposed of like animals. The power that colonial empires had was unregulated and thus they treated human beings as mere tools of production. Never has this been clear enough than in the 18th century slave trade. Slaves were people from Africa, imported to do manual labour in the fields and factories while their masters enjoyed the fruits of their labour. The worst human rights violations are those that these slaves endured throughout their time. One might think that with the onset of the 21st century these atrocities would be a thing of the past but surprisingly they still exist; only now they are latent.
Just as political power has reduced economic power has filled its vacuum. Today rich countries employ cheap labour in countries like those of Africa and South Asia. This cheap labour is not in a much better state than their counter parts were in the 18th century. They suffer from the same malnutrition or starvation as their counter parts and work in the same dangerous environments, if not more. Political slavery where the slaves worked for their parent country has taken a new color of economic slavery. It has not only enslaved the people from other countries but in most cases its own people as well. Economics today is rife with the idea of corporations. In corporations the power rests in the hand of the few and the branches extend throughout the whole world. These few people yield the ultimate power enslaving the people beneath in the chain of power. Due to their huge size, they command enough power even to influence the governments in making laws that are favorable for their own existence. Power upon power is accumulated to an extent that their hegemony over affairs of the state is supreme. This then gives birth to what is called plutocracy.
The idea of plutocracy is the ownership of a country by few rich individuals or families. Plutocracy hidden under the name of democracy reigns supreme in many arena of the world today. In exemplary democracies like USA and UK the cost of running an election campaign has crossed any parties financial limit. To run then is at the mercy of donors whose donations always come with strings attached. That amount of money can only be provided by big corporations. Names like NRA, Exxon, Shell run hand in hand with Democrats, Republicans and Labour Party. Together these corporations and their controlled governments create economical slavery with their power. Passing laws favorable to the almighty dollar and against Mother Nature, lowering taxes while increasing work hours are some of the examples of this slavery.
Nevertheless, if it was not for the modicum laws that balance off the effects of these governments, the world today would be in total anarchy. The social stratification that exists today would be accentuated to unprecedented limits. These laws stop unlimited power to an extent but cannot do so absolutely. The recent economic meltdown of 2008 proves as to what level man will fall to acquire power. Leaving millions of people in economic starvation, the greed of a few individuals brought the whole system to its knees. The rich got richer and the poor poorer. If it were not so that these rich people looked for acquiring more money, today we would not have Greece and Spain in dire straits. It is the allure of money as a source of power that they wanted. Today in connivance with the politicians they are killing society as we know it.
Consequently, the effects of such shock waves go beyond country boundaries. Where a politician tends to enslave people and corporate owner makes his employees subservient, a common man too searches and sometimes yields power. The patriarchal societies of South Asia where he uses it on women or that of Africa where usually children are targeted all are examples of man having power over his inferiors. When this power becomes unlimited it gives rise to words like abuse, genocide and terrorism. Thus it is in man’s nature to seek power but when it is provided to him he has the capacity and the imperfection to yield it in ways destructive to humanity.
It is quoted that “with great power comes great responsibility”. Thus power is inevitable for it is human to seek influence and to command for god has made man his vicegerent on this earth. Nevertheless, this power should be mandated, controlled and checked from time to time to see that it does not cross its bounds. To err is human but when that single mistake can cause havoc then it is better to think hard and ponder over every step one takes. Science with morals, Politics with laws and economics without greed would indeed be the ideal society pillars.
Life is a struggle for perfection but perfection can never be achieved. One hopes that mankind sees the dangers that unlimited power can pose and learn from them. It is these lessons that give us a clarion call to regulate power and not to allow one man or one group to yield it.

Where you end your first paragraph, [I]"proved in the past and is being verified today"[/I] You should give an example or two of the past and the present. Who has proved this in the past? and who is verifying it it today?

When your referring to something, for example in the start of your second paragraph, your referring to something, an event, in history, always give an example of that, the examiner doesn't know what your talking about, don't expect that he will even if he does, just give an example. So when you start that sentence give an example of someone who had acquired a nation and then continued to acquire more, from Muslim history you can give Timur as an example, or Genghis Khan from the Mongols, or from the recent past the British. Followed by a brief one or two lines of ending which proves your argument.


When explaining the part of man playing God, you can give other solid examples. I don't think you should use abortion and contraception because its controversial. There's a huge conflict of opinion on Abortion. You could try to clarify your point towards man playing God but you would be going off topic. Let's see what others have to say about it.