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my essay on Women in pakistan. outlile.. intro and conclusion
[B]WOMEN IN PAKISTAN[/B]
Outline 1. [B]introduction[/B] Paragraph 1 Paragraph 2 with thesis statement leading to the conclusion. 2. [B]Hurdles in the way of women empowerment in Pakistan[/B] a. Unlawful customs b. Feudalism c. Crimes against women d. Domestic violence e. Outdated and perennial culture f. Forced and early marriages g. Misinterpretation of religion h. Lack of policies implementation i. Hurdles in getting into politics j. Insecurity at work place k. Denied basic education l. Poverty m. Inaction of law n. Health issues 3. [B]Steps taken by government[/B] Women rights chapter in 1956 constitution of Pakistan Family law ordinance 1961 Musharraf regime Women protection bill 10% quota in css 33% seats in parliament Women rights chapter in 1956 constitution of Pakistan Family law ordinance 1961 Musharraf regime Women protection bill 10% quota in css 33% seats in parliament Recruitment in army and police Protection against women harassment at workplace bill 2009 Protection against domestic violence 4. [B]Impacts[/B] Faltering economy Tarnished national image Impact on family and future generations Underdevelopment of the country Inhuman customs prevail Population explosion Lopsided society National disintegration 5.[B] Solutions [/B] Government and civil society should be vibrant Proper and free education Extended and qualitative health care Full economic rights Laws against evil customs Freedom to choose ones career Right to manage ones career National commission on status of women Abolishment of feudalism Islam must me practiced in true letter and spirit Rights to minorities be given Easy, cheap and quick justice must be ensured 6. [B]Conclusion [/B] [B]Introduction[/B] Women can be called as GODs complete creation. Being the symbol of love, peace, care tenderness and intensity, she must be given full rights in tandem with men. Almost all the religions and constitutions of the world have accorded women with their full rights. The constitutions of Pakistan also give her full rights as it states that all citizens are equal before law and entitled to equal protection of law. There shall be no discrimination on the basis of sex alone. Moreover it states that the state shall ensure that women that women are not employed in vocations unsuited to their sex alone. Again, it states that the state shall protect the marriage, the mother, the family. The state has blessed women with whatever rights they enjoy, but all has been turned into shambles when it comes to the status of women Pakistan. If, all the violence that have done on women, we put in a bundle and rolled into one, the earth would not hold it, the shy could not enfold it. It could not be lighted and warmed by sun..! The situation of women in Pakistan is much more dubious and grim than in other countries of the world. Though in some parts they go side by side with men, but such women are very low in ratio. Where ever tribal customs, traditional mindset, restriction on getting education, and their right to say are ruthlessly strangled, this is where they are victimized. Poor health, lawlessness and poverty has further intensified and ignited their plight. The country suffers from dwindling economy, low literacy rate, pessimism, tarnished image of society and prevalence of inhumane and barbaric customs, when the situation becomes much more grim and severe than it actually looks like. Because the world is progressing towards the highest possible limits, we need to bless our women with every right which she owns by birth. [B]Conclusion.[/B] All in all, the progress being achieved by the world is not the result of mans toil only, but women-in reality- bear more responsibility for all this. Women in Pakistan are suffering due to the prevalent unlawful and evil customs like swara, vani karo kari, marriage with Quran etc and are confined to the four walls of houses only. This is neither what ALLAH wants them to be like nor our holy prophet has taught us to treat them in like manner. Government of Pakistan has made huge strides by establishing forums, passed laws and free media to empower women. But, we must adhere to what our beloved leader Quaid-e-Azam has said that no nation can rise to the zenith of glory unless their women are side by side with men. We are victims of evil customs. It is a crime against humanity that our women are shut in the four walls of houses as prisoners. You should take your women along with you as comrades in only sphere of life. If we want to be progressive and being reverend, we must not treat our women like the way we have made ourselve |
Women in pakistan? Topic is incorrect. Women's status/rights/role etc in Pakistan would be correct. Secondly my advice to you is this that draw simple and concise outlines rather complex and detailed. It is a very common mistake and time consuming. Hope you take it positively.
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What you have there is an outline for a descriptive essay. The reason for that is because of the topic 'women in Pakistan' there is no question in this statement. Descriptive essays never get high marks as they lack analysis. But you can even make this essay more analytic if you follow certain steps.
To show analytical skills one needs to compare and contrast and produce a reasoned judgement (which is your conclusion). How do I know that women in Pakistan are better or worse off than women in other parts of the world. Why women should have a better position in a country? You need to show this to me through your essay. You need to tell me what should be a women's place in a country, and why you think that. Then you need to tell me how Pakistan deviates from this established norm of a women's place in a country. So for example; child marriages, domestic violence, lack of education, employment etc. Then you need to address why this happens: feudal mentality, misrepresentation of religious text, patriarchal society etc. Once you have addressed the cause you then move on to the measures that have been put in place to address these causes. But you should not just simply states these measure you should evaluate them. What was the purpose of this measure, did it achieve this purpose, if yes - how successfully? If not; than why not, what were the hurdles that led to the measure being unsuccessful. Here you can bring in other countries which may suffer similar issues and compare and contrast measures they have installed; and suggest how to improve the said measure. After going through these steps you can then come back to a conclusion; So one of the the conclusion could be; Policies are not enough, what is needed is a change in cultural perception. Education is not only needed for the girl child of Pakistan, who will learn her value in society and gain confidence which she may have lost at home when compared to her brothers or being termed as a burden. But also for a boy child so that he can learn to respect women and understand they are equal to them etc ( I could have written this more eloquently but you get the gist) |
is't necessary to always write in a negative sense for women?? like in every eassy I have just seen one thing that women are powerless hopeless ..am so confused to write about women ....
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[QUOTE=ACROBATIC;755360][B]WOMEN IN PAKISTAN[/B]
Outline 1. [B]introduction[/B] Paragraph 1 Paragraph 2 with thesis statement leading to the conclusion. 2. [B]Hurdles in the way of women empowerment in Pakistan[/B] a. Unlawful customs b. Feudalism c. Crimes against women d. Domestic violence e. Outdated and perennial culture f. Forced and early marriages g. Misinterpretation of religion h. Lack of policies implementation i. Hurdles in getting into politics j. Insecurity at work place k. Denied basic education l. Poverty m. Inaction of law n. Health issues 3. [B]Steps taken by government[/B] Women rights chapter in 1956 constitution of Pakistan Family law ordinance 1961 Musharraf regime Women protection bill 10% quota in css 33% seats in parliament Women rights chapter in 1956 constitution of Pakistan Family law ordinance 1961 Musharraf regime Women protection bill 10% quota in css 33% seats in parliament Recruitment in army and police Protection against women harassment at workplace bill 2009 Protection against domestic violence 4. [B]Impacts[/B] Faltering economy Tarnished national image Impact on family and future generations Underdevelopment of the country Inhuman customs prevail Population explosion Lopsided society National disintegration 5.[B] Solutions [/B] Government and civil society should be vibrant Proper and free education Extended and qualitative health care Full economic rights Laws against evil customs Freedom to choose ones career Right to manage ones career National commission on status of women Abolishment of feudalism Islam must me practiced in true letter and spirit Rights to minorities be given Easy, cheap and quick justice must be ensured 6. [B]Conclusion [/B] [B]Introduction[/B] Women can be called as GODs complete creation. Being the symbol of love, peace, care tenderness and intensity, she must be given full rights in tandem with men. Almost all the religions and constitutions of the world have accorded women with their full rights. The constitutions of Pakistan also give her full rights as it states that all citizens are equal before law and entitled to equal protection of law. There shall be no discrimination on the basis of sex alone. Moreover it states that the state shall ensure that women that women are not employed in vocations unsuited to their sex alone. Again, it states that the state shall protect the marriage, the mother, the family. The state has blessed women with whatever rights they enjoy, but all has been turned into shambles when it comes to the status of women Pakistan. If, all the violence that have done on women, we put in a bundle and rolled into one, the earth would not hold it, the shy could not enfold it. It could not be lighted and warmed by sun..! The situation of women in Pakistan is much more dubious and grim than in other countries of the world. Though in some parts they go side by side with men, but such women are very low in ratio. Where ever tribal customs, traditional mindset, restriction on getting education, and their right to say are ruthlessly strangled, this is where they are victimized. Poor health, lawlessness and poverty has further intensified and ignited their plight. The country suffers from dwindling economy, low literacy rate, pessimism, tarnished image of society and prevalence of inhumane and barbaric customs, when the situation becomes much more grim and severe than it actually looks like. Because the world is progressing towards the highest possible limits, we need to bless our women with every right which she owns by birth. [B]Conclusion.[/B] All in all, the progress being achieved by the world is not the result of mans toil only, but women-in reality- bear more responsibility for all this. Women in Pakistan are suffering due to the prevalent unlawful and evil customs like swara, vani karo kari, marriage with Quran etc and are confined to the four walls of houses only. This is neither what ALLAH wants them to be like nor our holy prophet has taught us to treat them in like manner. Government of Pakistan has made huge strides by establishing forums, passed laws and free media to empower women. But, we must adhere to what our beloved leader Quaid-e-Azam has said that no nation can rise to the zenith of glory unless their women are side by side with men. We are victims of evil customs. It is a crime against humanity that our women are shut in the four walls of houses as prisoners. You should take your women along with you as comrades in only sphere of life. If we want to be progressive and being reverend, we must not treat our women like the way we have made ourselve[/QUOTE] Brother please avoid repetition in your outline. It kills. |
remember simple formula for essay
1st cause 2nd effect 3rd solution so i think 1st variable=should be importance of women empowerment 2nd variable=Bottle necks in women empowerment. 3rd variable= Implication of these bottle neck on Pakistan 4th variable= Benefits of women empowerment for Pakistan Now just make sub aspects of these variables simple is this |
dear your outline was too complex and repetition mar your essay. Secondly, title of your essay was not clear like Woman in Pakistan.
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