My outline:

"The War on terror has contributed to the growing abuse of human rights"

Introduction
>An ayat of Quran related to the topic
>Thesis statement (I agreed to the topic)

Causes of Human rights violations in war on terror
>Lack of judicial oversight
>Terrorist hide among civilians (co-lateral damage)
>No access to media
>Maximum control of military in war zones
>Some examples of violations (Iraq, Afghanistan etc)
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Impact of such violations
>More people turn terrorist
>Economic impact
>Social impacts
>Tarnished international image in the world due to abuses
>Impact on future generations
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Remedies to minimize HR violations in War on terror
>First of all amicable means should be used to counter terror
>Use of latest technology to reduce co-lateral damage (Drones etc)
>Military courts in war zone for speedy justice
>Civil oversight on military in such wars
>Access to media
>Socio-economic facilities for the people affected (jobs, education etc)
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Conclusion

The aforementioned outline is what I remember to the maximum, but there were some 4 to 5 more points, which I can not recall at the moment. Total pages were 13 or 14, including outline. Grammar and spelling mistakes were minimum. Moreover, I perfectly stick to the outline.

Friends, kindly comment on the outline, any chance of 40 marks?

I have read your outline. First I would talk about the key structure. You have outlined the causes and impacts of violations subsequently. But what are the violations themselves?!!! that part is missing. And this part was exactly what you had to prove. By supplying arguments! Your outline misses that.
Secondly, you have mentioned drones and military courts as ways to minimize violations as human rights? In my humble opinion these 2 issues are at the core of VIOLATION of human rights..
This interpretation was my own humble opinion. I would recommend you to see darkmoon's outline posted in this thread. You would get a better idea as to where you stand.
Kind regards

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Thank you so much for your kind comments. You are very right, I forgot to mention the very key aspect that was 'kinds of human rights violations'. On the other hand, in my opinion drones cause minimal damage to the innocents, and I have proved it in my essay. So, the only thing I am worried is the important aspect that I have missed in my essay. In short, my ship has sunk.

One can argue about the efficiency of drones. But the fact that the Drone technology is in the use of U.S military alone & their use is not only a breach of our national sovereignty but also results in collateral damage(though minimal), recommending them would not act as a remedial measure to curb human rights violation rather encourage it! You had to mention the role of Human rights organizations..Government policies. Because the recommendations here were not to "take measures which reduce violation" but which curb it altogether! I hope I make myself clear.
And don't lose hope. There is always a silver lining behind every dark cloud..
Sincerest Wishes.

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National sovereignty? My friend first of all, our parliament has approved the drones to be used in our tribal belt; Musharraf has acknowledged it. Moreover, prior to Salala checkpost incident, drones were operating from inside Pakistan, Shamsi airbase Kharan. Secondly, FATA's status is different. It is not under the full control of the government of Pakistan. In other words, FATA or tribal belt is a semi-autonomous region. This is for your knowledge.

Now, whereas the essay is concerned, it was not on the 'war on terror in Pakistan'; it was a general Human rights abuse in war on terror. Thus, focusing arguments solely on Pakistan is a blunder. For this reason, I used the term use of latest technology to cause minimum damage to the innocent, not in a sense of Pakistan. I hope you got my point.

A very relevant and up to the mark outline. You stand a very good chance of qualifying the exams. May Allah do what is best for you.

@Darkmoon's outline on war on terror are best explain the topic and totally relevant.

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To understand this topic it is necessary to understand what are human rights.it seems most of aspirants attempted this essay focusing on impacts of terrorism.i think the definition of human rights and how they are violated was necessary in this essay.
here is definition and types of human rights.
http://www.ohchr.org/EN/Issues/Pages...manRights.aspx

There were more interesting and philosophical topics in the CSS Essay paper of 2015. But I attempted following.


The War on terror has contributed to the growing abuse of human rights

Outline
(i)Introduction
(ii)War on Terror
(a)Its background history
(iii)US war on terror owned by Pakistan
(iv)What are human rights
(v)War on terror , how it has abused the human rights?
(a)The right to Live
(b)The right to Home
(c)The right to Health
(d)The right Education
(vi)The Impacts of War on terror
(a)The mass migration
(b)Influx of IDPs on urban areas and Metropolitan
(c)The Drone attacks and violation of sovereignity
(vii)Retaliation by the terrorists
(a)Attacks on streets
(b)Attacks on schools
(c)Attacks on Civilian as well as military
(viii)Conclusion

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very good outline.probably you could have added something about laws that limit the freedom of citizens.anyhow it is good outline.