I attempted by adding following contents,
War on terror has contributed to the growing abuse of the human rights(EAASY 2015)
1.Introduction
Instead of eliminating terrorism,the war on terror has added fuel to the human rights abuse of the people in the region generally and in Pakistan particularly.
2.America's unilateral declaration of war on terror
3.Pre-emptive attacks: America's foreign policy
4.Iraq War
5.Afghan war: the land of human rights abuse
6.Repercussions for Pakistan
a.Drone attacks:a negative phenomenon
b.Terrorist's anti-state activities
c.Forced veil for women in Pakistan in FATA
d.Denial to rights to education to girls
7.Conclusion
I quoted the Naum Chaumisky and J.K.Cooley the author of Un-Holy war in the essay by supporting how the WoT has contributed the abuse of human rights abuse by quoting Naum Chomisky's words that the WoT had broken out the unending chain of human rights violation,and by j.k.Cooley that how WoT effects the internal political environments of the Pakistan.
Total words 1400
Pages 10.

my outline for war on terror has contributed to the growing abuse of human rights;

1. introduction
2. meaning of abuse of human rights;
Violation of recognized basic human rights such as right to life, liberty, creed etc
3. How war on terror has contributed to the growing abuse of human rights
a. abuse of human right to life and property
b. abuse of human religious and ideological rights
c. abuse of human political rights
d. abuse of human economic rights
e. abuse of human socio-cultural rights
f. abuse of human rights to information and freedom of expression
4. Contribution of war on terror to human rights violation in pakistan
a. loss of lives
b. loss of property
c. missing persons dilemma
d. curb on religious practices
e. curb on freedom of expression
5. conclusion
war on terror has been a chronic menace to human rights existence








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COMMENTS AND IMPROVE PLZ

War on terror has contributed to the growing abuse of human rights

Outline
1-Introduction:
War against terror has done more harm than good to humanity particularly in terms of human rights violations.
2-Background
3-Pakistan and Afghanistan became center stage of war on terror.
4- War on terror and human right abuses
→Religious freedom denied to the people
→Right of privacy at risk
→Detention centers and torcher cells
→Atrocities committed by foreign troops
→Thousands of innocent civilians killed
→Hatred against Muslims multiplied
→Honour and dignity of Muslims damaged all over the world
5-Can war against terror be justified?
6-Some suggestions
7-Conclusion:
War on terror has contributed to the growing abuse of human rights. Human rights violations should never be justified on any grounds whatever they be.

comments are welcomed.

Both outlines are good,but passing the paper demands whether the theory is proved or not.If theory is misunderstood on the topic no matter how good you write destined to fail utterly.For My theory I have not mentioned remedial measures due to time restraints and wrapped up without such contents but yet I am optimistic.

Introduction
sep 9/11 attack on U.S
U.S INVASION OF AFGHANISTAN
U.S INVASION OF IRAQ

HUMAN RIGHTS.
Freedom of conscience
Freedom of thought
Freedom of expression in a sense that consoles collective liberty
freedom of movement
freedom of beliefs

How war on terror has has contributed to the growing abuse of human rights

Missing persons
stern laws (Protection of Pakistan Ordinance,PATRIOT Act,LAWS ENACTED BY ARAB COUNTRIES)
bar on freedom of expression (ARAB STATES)
bar on freedom of movement
Indiscriminate killings (drones, military operations)



BUT

Terrorism is itself an excess so, its eradicating measures will also be excessive

CONCLUSION.

Your work is quite reasonable and matched with the expected requirement of the examiner . you will make it . sure !!

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sorry i could not make it i have been awarded only 12 marks in css 2015 essay . in the previous two attemps i had passed the essay paper but this time ....