fpsc unjustified checking has ravaged many.. i scored 703..failed in compo..despite the fact that i corrected 18 vocab but failed by 7 marks. got 33 marks. This exam is all about gambling.

Dear brother! Jamal Nasir,I sympathize with you, But in my opinion, writing an article for a magazine with the relaxed mind and a plenty of time is different from attempting an essay in exam within three hours.
Secondly,an examiner is there to pinpoint your mistakes,not appreciate the good elements of your writing.
Attempting paper is an art and different from writing for a magazine.
Having said this,your writing skills are extremely good.But,there are other components that are essential for a good essay.
Good luck for future!

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@Infinite Optimism brother I don't give much time for writing an article. I jot down on register in two or maximum three hours and then type on computer. As you said there is fresh mind in writing articles, so dear there is also fresh mind in essay paper because it's the first paper and everyone appears after a proper sleep.

Please mention other components which are essential for a good essay and I omitted in my piece of writing.

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Brother,I read your essay.You have contradicted the main statement,so accordingly, you have to give arguments that prove that Gender equality exists,not only in Pakistan but the whole world.
You have focused too much on Pakistan.Rather your argument should have encompassed the western world because developing countries,like Pakistan, are lacking on so many other fronts too.
Apart from the facts, you should have discussed the philosophical and religious aspect of the discrimination facing the women.
This is just my opinion because relevancy is the key-many toppers have even suggested that.Don't take it otherwise.

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https://m.facebook.com/story.php?sto...49737&refid=12

Maybe you have seen this video,but i am putting the link,check it.

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I saw this video and this is just making me mad; FPSC CHAIRMAN has third degree in graduation and was not a css qualified either. now we should stage strong protest against fpsc really

Congrats,Yes,students now has a strong reason to protest.I hope the quality of this exam improve in every aspect.

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Dear I didn't contradicted the main statement. The topic was, "gender equality is a myth" means that there is no gender equality. Those who say that all genders are being treated equally are actually misguided as rights of all genders are being violated at different scales. While proving the statement I mentioned in introduction that we have legislated laws like article 25 (2), but haven't implemented. Then I wrote "Almost everywhere there is discrimination on the basis of gender. Rights of each gender being infringed and violated." Later mentioned many examples where gender's rights are being violated like mostly families instead of giving education to eunuchs, they exclude them from house while forcing them to be beggars.

Yes the major part of essay focused on Pakistan, but I also mentioned the issues of other countries, I didn't omitted completely the world's issues. In almost start I mentioned about UNDHR. Later I mentioned that how males face inequality in some fields of life, because in gender issues we can't neglect males, as they are also a part of genders. After taking a glance at third gender, I again focused on females' issues. Then I gave the examples of the United States and the United Nations. At last, before conclusion, I mentioned about Muslim countries. So dear you can't say that I only focused on Pakistan. Here is the outline of essay.

Outline

A= Abstract
B= Introduction
C= what is gender equality?
D= Major forms of gender and their level of equality
i: Male
ii: Female
iii: Eunuch
E= Areas of life where there is no gender equality
i: At home
ii: In government offices
iii: In private institutions
iv: In armed forces
v: In Parliaments
F= Gender inequality in Pakistan
G= Gender inequality in the world
i: In America
ii: In the UNO
iii: In Muslim World
H= Suggestions
i: Open psychological treatment centers
ii: Share in husband salary
iii: Opening of schools for Eunuchs
iv: Provide full education
I= Conclusion

Yes dear I have watched this video, before that didn't know that Naveed Akram Cheema did BA with third division.

Thanks brother for your detailed analysis.

By the way even I am an aggrieved candidate, but after result, before doing anything else, I offered two rakat Nafil because I am sure that something better is written for me.

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Sorry!I mistakenly wrote contradicted,wanted to write supported.

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No problem . By the way now I'm searching Mubashir Lucman's Email Address for this matter.

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