[B]Title: [/B]A vacation trip to Cherokee

The writer wanted to go to an exciting and uncommon destination for enjoying his vacations. He readily agreed when his friend John suggested going to Cherokee. In Cherokee, they visited Quella Boundary, a picturesque mountaneous town. The town offered the tourists a glimpse into its past by displaying eighteenth century traditional Indian lifestyles. The natives of the town assisted them in locating the souvenir shop. They were pleasantly surprised when they met a street vendor named George, who conversed in fluent English with them. George took them to lunch, where they found out that the natives do not rely on trade alone for their income. Consequently, they have to look out for other ways to support themselves during off-peak seasons. Bingo Weekend provides a healthy opportunity to earn that extra income. Finally, the writer's trip concluded by visiting the town's museum, which contained a lot of typical Cherokee historical artifacts. Visiting Cherokee was a memorable experience, leaving the writer to desire for much more.

Passage Length: 441
Words: 153

I overlooked the instruction that we had to write a preci of ABOUT 120 words. This is the first time he's done that after 70s. This is probably because he scooped it from a site, where it had mentioned to do so.

According to the usual practice, I counted the number of words of the passage, which were 441. So, I did a bit of Maths at the end of preci as I always do. Divided 441 by 3. 147 +- 5. Hoping that the examiner won't penalize me. :))

You will be penalised for two things
- exceeding length
- use of names
But hope for the best... All now depends on ladyluck

[QUOTE=Jabbar Raheem;915351]You will be penalised for two things
- exceeding length
- use of names
But hope for the best... All now depends on ladyluck[/QUOTE]

For John, you would have used "the writer's friend".

What designation did you give to George?

I don't think the examiner is going to penalize folks for mentioning the names of the individuals involved. The nature of the passage is such that its essence necessitated the use of the names of the persons involved. Remember it was a narration, and not an exposition or a description.

Additionally, we have to eliminate the superfluities, ornaments, examples and illustrations while writing a precis. Names of the individuals do not fall in either of these categories.

May Allah bless us with success. Ameen

[QUOTE=Jabbar Raheem;913983]one of my teacher asked me about 2 twists in precis after the paper and those 2 twists were excessive use of 1st person and examples... He who avoided both of them will get maximum credit (with impeccable english) and whosoever fell victim to anyone of them will be penalized accordingly... this what he said[/QUOTE]

Write in style book by Richard palmer "There are two views about what to do if the original is in the first person. Some authorities say that a precis should always be written in the third person, and that the original must be recast accordingly. Others argue that clarity is the chief criterion, not formalism, and that if the précis will read better in the first person, then use it. I incline to the latter view, but either is tenable. Practice, experience and ‘feel’ will guide you best: do what seems most comfortable, provided the resultant version is clear and apt"

Why not both PoVS ;D!?

My title: "An amazing visit to Cherokee"

I did not use "I" and instead I wrote "George's friend once and so on. I did not count the words, but they might have been 100+ less then 120.

[QUOTE=gintino;915363]For John, you would have used "the writer's friend".

What designation did you give to George?

I don't think the examiner is going to penalize folks for mentioning the names of the individuals involved. The nature of the passage is such that its essence necessitated the use of the names of the persons involved. Remember it was a narration, and not an exposition or a description.

Additionally, we have to eliminate the superfluities, ornaments, examples and illustrations while writing a precis. Names of the individuals do not fall in either of these categories.

May Allah bless us with success. Ameen[/QUOTE]

For George,i used 'a local inhabitant'

[QUOTE=exclusively;915380]My title: "An amazing visit to Cherokee"

I did not use "I" and instead I wrote "George's friend once and so on. I did not count the words, but they might have been 100+ less then 120.[/QUOTE]

Didn't you mention the words of precis separately?
atleast, near 115 will be fine because he wrote 'about 120 words'

[QUOTE=Jabbar Raheem;915383]Didn't you mention the words of precis separately?
atleast, near 115 will be fine because he wrote 'about 120 words'[/QUOTE]

I left the first and second page and attempted all the rest of the questions from page number three onwards. Because I had a good practice at precis writting, It was my plan to incorporate only 20 minutes for precis in last but on the very first page. So I had last 25 minutes for it, so did not bother to count the words. I performed well in mechanical marks i.e pair of words, Idioms, analogies and translation. Around 10+ vocabulary is correct.

[QUOTE=exclusively;915387]I left the first and second page and attempted all the rest of the questions from page number three onwards. Because I had a good practice at precis writting, It was my plan to incorporate only 20 minutes for precis in last but on the very first page. So I had last 25 minutes for it, so did not bother to count the words. I performed well in mechanical marks i.e pair of words, Idioms, analogies and translation. Around 10+ vocabulary is correct.[/QUOTE]

nice, what will be your total 'mechanical' marks?